Ah yes, the lost love. The thoughts of what might have been. What might have been if only----.
You have framed the old story very well. There is no problem getting the picture. Fame has a cost, and only some are willing to pay. As presented here I suspect the getting home late, drunk, and with lipstick or makeup on his clothes was the prime cause of the break. As I said. there is a cost.
Using a country song to highlight the situation is a good devise. I tried a couple of standard country back-riffs and couldn't find one that fit. Even so, it helps the reader keep his focus.
I do have a couple of suggestions to make this even stronger.
The first might involve a greater change than you wish to make, but I'll toss it out anyhow. At times, most particularly when you are describing something or someplace, you over write. That is, you tell us more than we want or need to know.
The first few paragraphs are an example, I'll rewrite to show you.
Yours is:
Jesse sat in the deepening twilight and gently cradled the worn wood of the old guitar in his arms. His fingers lightly caressed the strings, and a melancholy chord echoed through the hills outside the screens.
Somewhere in his mind he heard the sound of distant laughter . . . their laughter. Closing his eyes he could still see the way her crystal blue eyes crinkled at the corners and feel the soft warmth of her breath on his cheek.
“Beth.”
Startled by the sound of his own anguished voice breaking the pervading silence, his eyes popped open, and he stared out over the hazy mountainsides.
I would write this part: "As he watched twilight come slipping down the valley Jesse lightly strummed the strings of his familiar old guitar. What he heard however was not the music, but the sound of distant laughter, What he saw was not the valley, but eyes so blue they made the sky jealous..
He whispered the name---Beth--- and for just an instant she was there. Then she, the laughter and the eyes were gone leaving Jesse to stare broodingly at the twilight,"
Now, I'm not trying to rewrite your piece, you did a fine job on it, I'm trying to show you how to keep fro overwriting. Count the adjective and adverbs in each piece.
Well, I said you might not want to make a major change like that.
There are a few awkward sentences too. Here are a couple:
"He had been just starting out then, with this same old guitar, discovered in a pawnshop." This could mean Jesse was discovered in the pawnshop ands it begs the question of what he was playing when he was discovered.
"Impatient for the performance to end, he so wanted to take her in his arms, aching with the desire to cradle her next to his heart and keep her there for all eternity" This one is just awkward.
This is getting pretty long. I'll repeat, you had a good concept and you presented it well. Keep writing.
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