It is a very good poem and shows where your heart is. There are some places that need editing though. Stanza 5, first line: I go to the poor, you have two I go. Maybe leave out the second. It doesn't fit and throws off the flow. 7th stanza, third line: It says As I part. I think you mean As a part. 8th stanza, 4th line: may in you they confide. Maybe leave out they. It would flow better. Very nice poem!
Very good and very descriptive! It held my interest all the way through. The last line leaves you wanting to know about her past and what brought her there to the beach. Nicely done!
Wow! That's quite a dilemma that I'm sure many have or are going through. Each one personal and different in it's outcome. You have captured it perfectly. One thing to fix..Loose is lose. Other than that, good job!
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