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Review of Duck Mourning  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I can see why Dole is self confident. He was raised with a loving family. But, by the title, I'm afraid Dole has some trouble on the way.

Very nicely done! I enjoyed reading this.

One question - what is "oil- rainnbow?" Does it mean the color of oil on water?

Thanks!
RG
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Review of Rancho Mornings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
This piece does evoke an image. I think there are some very nice details here. Specifically, I like the tequila bottles in back pockets. Thanks for sharing the image.

RG
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Review of Memories  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I was not familiar with this style of piece, but just looked it up. It's very cool! I must try one or two.

But that's beside the point. I enjoyed your content very much. I cannot tell if this is written to someone who has just left the author's life, or left life altogether. Maybe it fits either way? Regardless, I find it meaningful.

Thanks for sharing!

RG
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Review of The Girl  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I found this to be a very nice piece. I can imagine her. Actually, I thought there may be a "punchline" where she turns out to be a statue, but my hunch was incorrect.

Nicely done!

RG
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Review of 7th of April  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Pretty rough on yourself there, E. Maybe getting outta that bottle would do you some good?

April 7 is also my daughter's birthday. She's turning ten tomorrow. So if you can't claim some happiness for your own birthday, take some from hers. She's out to set this world on fire, in a positive way!

Happy Birthday, E.

Regards,
RG
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Review of Dear Japan  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You've done a nice job of expressing what is so hard to put into words.

I have to stop reading the reports and watching the video clips. Having lived in Japan, I can imagine the terror. The Japanese have a very different way of dealing with disaster. Neither right or wrong, very different from Western countries.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts.

RG
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Review of Arboretum  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed this. I wonder if you're describing the National Arboretum in DC?

One aspect that I really appreciate is your ability to combine natural and man-made features in unison.

It has been a long winter. It's time to go to the arboretum!

RG
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I think every man has this fear still in him. Many won't admit it.

Thank you.

RG
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Rated: E | (4.0)
There is much wisdom in this piece. Thanks very much for sharing it. I hope to see more of your work!

RG
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Review of waiting for what?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (2.0)
I like some of the suspense that you've included here. There are plenty of word usage problems, like "...could see know one..." and some run-on sentences. It is fairly rambling language. And, just personally, I find the ending too much of a reach. A "cold water cave?" Definitely hard to imagine without knowing more. And why a "clay cutter?" I feel like I'm being left out of a lot of details.

I think if you watch your word usage, and take time to expand your descriptions, you will have a more engaging sytel. You have a gift for suspense.

Keep writing!

RG
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Review of love is  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I like this very much. I've never seen love referred to as a plural "love are" versus "love is."

Thanks for this.

RG
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I found this story fun and engaging. It's a little ironic that his name is Theodore. I believe that's one of the chipmunk's names in the famous and annoying musical group, Alvin and the Chipmunks.

There isn't much room for detailed description in flash fiction, which I always find challenging. This one could use some more space for elaboration.

Nice job.

RG
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Review of You Wish!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I can visualize Miller and her family well from your description. I particularly like your description of her mother.

There are a couple of spelling / word use mistakes:

"out of there hair"

"every now and than"

I feel like you could have expanded upon what the prices for dreams coming true may be.

Nicely done! Thanks for sharing.

RG
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Review of Nature's Show  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed this poem very much. I share your love of watching storms (or so it seems that you love them).

The analogy of rain's song and lightning's dance are quite illustrative. The sadness at the passing of the storm is also poignant.

Lovely! Thanks.

RG
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
What a great little piece of work! I enjoyed reading this lighthearted commentary of our politics.

RG
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Review of Whispers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very touching piece. I know that it's very personal for you, but I thank you very much for sharing it.

Two weeks ago, I lost my grandmother. 89 years old, married to my grandfather for 73 years. He is lost now, convinced he's reached the end of his life. I can relate to much of your emotion here.

Thanks again.

RG
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a poignant little tale. You've introduced a subject that would normally need significant exposition to be believable, in very few words. Belief is not required; you've gotten your point across. Thanks for the great writing example!.

RG
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Review of Become  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
"Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!" - I like to restate this - it's very important, in my opinion.

I think that this piece addresses a central issue for the modern world, at least the rich part of the modern world. As someone who has been very lucky in my life, I struggle with materiality, and see it developing in my child, as well. Thank you for addressing it.

Your writing is harsh in its criticism of material dependence. Yet, it offers a solution that results in becoming again "an innocent child." And the final line asks the reader to take action, to "shed."

The negative, darker parts of the piece sound a bit like a threatening preacher to me, which I personally think is a bit much. I love the solution proposed, and the call to action.

I enjoyed reading this very much.

RG
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