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Review of River  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was an enjoyable little poem about life. You were able to describe the good and bad of life without putting a negative spin on things.

Errors/Suggestions: I found no technical errors of any kind, but as a suggestion, it might be nice to have some information at the bottom of the page explaining to the readers who Harry Chapin and Thoreau are. I've heard of Thoreau, though I'm not familiar with his work, and I've never heard of Harry Chapin.

What I liked: I like how you described the give and take and ebb and flow of life.
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Review of Valet Limerick  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a cute little limerick, I enjoyed it. To me this seemed like it was based on a real person, because everything seemed so realistic.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how every line made sense within the context of the story being told.
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Review of Sleep My Beauty  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I love poems like this about a real person, you really showed your love for your daughter here, it was unmistakable.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked the sincerity of this poem, your love was real!
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Review of Leprechaun Gold  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a nice poem that rhymed well without seeming forced. The subject of the poem seemed interesting, I could visualize what you were writing about. This seemed like a professional level poem that could appear in a magazine.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the bold green font you used. I also like the cadence of this poem, it flowed nicely.
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Review of In Dreams I See  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item on the shameless plug page. I can relate to this, because I am in love with a woman I haven't seen in a long time, and I only have memories and dreams of her. I think a good portion of adult single people can relate to this, we all have people that we dream about, if not literally then figuratively.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how good things are in the dreams, you did a good job of describing it and making it tantalizing.
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Review of Missing My Friend  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a sad poem, but I had trouble figuring out who the friend was; at first I thought it might be a dog that died, but I wasn't sure. Still a good poem none the less. (If you could, can you please respond and let me know who the friend was?)

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how the poem starts off happy, and it is bittersweet when the friend is no longer around. Good job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I'm assuming that this poem is about Alice returning to Wonderland when she was a much older woman; that is an interesting twist. I've heard of her returning when she was still a kid, but this is my first encounter with an author who has her going back when she is an older woman.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the Alice returning as an old woman concept, and I liked what you said about dreams, and life being a dream.
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Review of Someone Cares  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I enjoy poems with a positive message like this, and I agree with the theme of this poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how you opened a door for those who might be struggling in life, and offered them hope with your words.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was an interesting article, I'm glad that family was given a helping hand.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how different companies came together to help a family in need, this goes to show what a great country America is!
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Review of Cote De Pablo  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool, this was an interesting supernatural tale, I like stories like this. You chose an interesting time in history to place this story, when President Nixon was resigning. I lived through that time period, but I was too young to remember it.

Errors/Suggestions: I found this error: They are as pure as the firery Finger of God!" I think "firery" is misspelled. I found another error: tugged the detectives pants off, I think there should be an apostrophe before the "s" in "detectives" so it is spelled: "detective's" so it is possessive. I found another mistake: many colorful tatoos The word "tatoos is supposed to be spelled "tattoos," you left out a "t."

What I liked: I like the supernatural element of this story, you did a good job of keeping the reader interested.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I like the theme of this sonnet, that marriage is sacred and is preferable to having a live-in relationship. If I had a choice between the two, I would choose marriage.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the theme of the value of marriage over a live-in relationship. It's nice to see someone take a stand for what is right!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool, this was a sad poem with kind of a happy ending, because the husband who lost his wife will get to see her again when he dies.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how they spent their remaining time together before the wife dies, walking along the shore. It sounds like they had a high quality life despite their advanced age, that is a good example for a lot of older couples.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a sad poem about a woman people didn't try to get to know, I wish all the lonely people in the world could be happy and have friends.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the fact that you took the time to write about a person like this, too often people like this are forgotten.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool, this was a good article with a solid, well thought out theme. Comparing people to animals was creative, and I never realized that in some ways animals are smarter than us humans.

Errors/Suggestions: In the section about pigs, you wrote: we're the stupid one. I think "one" should be "ones" to be considered gramatically correct.


What I liked: I liked the southern/country personality or "voice" of the narrator, I could hear the voice in my mind of the person telling this story, and it really fit in with the subject being discussed.
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Review of beautiful lies  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review feature, while I don't agree with your point of view, I found your view on life interesting. I believe fairy tale endings are possible, but I can understand if some people don't choose to view life that way, and choose a more realistic approach to their views on life.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind. Good job!

What I liked: I liked seeing a different view on life than my own, thank you for letting me see life from your perspective.
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Review of place of peace  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool, you described a beautiful scene that I could visualize in my mind; this poem reminded me of summertime.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind. Good job!

What I liked: I like the scene you described, I actually want to travel there. Was this based on a real place?
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. Congratulations on winning $200 for this poem, it was interesting to read and I found it entertaining.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked how realistically you presented the events of this story, I could almost picture myself in that room with them!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random reviewing feature. I enjoyed this, I like reading about the family history of different people. I like how your Mom went from rags to riches. Kentucky seems like a nice area, even if you're poor; Jennifer Lawrence is from there.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the way you colored your font and bolded it, and I like the overall theme that life can and does get better.
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Review of Wisdom  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. This was a really well put together poem that followed a prompt that told you to write about wisdom. I like the elusive quality you gave wisdom, that is something I can relate to personally. I'm 42 and I still don't think I'm wise.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the message behind this poem, wisdom is difficult to obtain.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. It's interesting that you chose to dwell on three main concepts in this poem: college, work, and romance. I'm in college now, so I can relate to that part, and the section about working seems realistic, from what I know about it.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you broke three subjects down and wrote about them in poem form.
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Review of Packard Lane  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. Your story was realistic and the characters seemed to be alive. I thought "Lobo" was a unique and creative name for a fictional town. You managed to create suspense throughout the story up until the very end, I enjoyed reading this story.

Errors/Suggestions: You misspelled "delapadated" in the first paragraph. I think it is spelled "dilapidated"

What I liked: I anticipated a tragic ending, but wanted a happy ending, and I was pleasantly surprised. You did a good job of establishing drama.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. The theme of lost youth was interesting to me, you were lamenting your lost childhood but still had hope for the future. I felt you achieved a delicate balance of yearning for the past while still anticipating a good future.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how the first letter of each line spells out "Lost and never found" that was creative!
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Review of Fr. Ninja  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. I enjoyed this short story, the protagonist was in a tough situation and he acted in the only way he was trained to. The terrorists thought he was just another victim, but he had a surprise in store for them.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I like the twist/surprise ending, I didn't see that coming.
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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. This is a very extensive list, I hope you were successful in following through on at least some or most of these resolutions. I have creative resolutions every new year also, but mine involve drawing at least one drawing a day. So far, it's March 11th and I've succeeded in my goal. Last year and the year before I didn't even make it to February.

Errors/Suggestions: I found no technical errors of any kind, but as a suggestion, I think it would be interesting if you provided an update at the bottom of the page to let readers know how you did on following through with your resolutions.

What I liked: I like how these resolutions encompass a wide variety of goals, creative goals and staying in physical shape with exercise, and cleaning the basement.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature, I can relate to this a little bit because I am much heavier than I was at 22, and I look different now and I would love to go back to looking like I did when I was younger. I think that's a universal desire.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how I could relate to wanting to look younger, if I lost some weight I could go back to looking pretty good, despite some gray hairs.
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