I remember When I used to volunteer at a nursing home my mom worked at, and how with some of the patients had lost the will to live and you could see it in there face and there demenor. mom used to tell me that when they saw me (at the time i was 11) they actualy brightened up. Sometimes i would picture what they were like when that said brightness was not there how bleak there lives were. BUt then I would look at some who were vibrant with life. A few haveing (elicit) love affairs with in the building. I had nicknames for all who were my friends. And I smile with what they hadnt lost. YOur poem has inspired me to write a memoir on those people who I loved with all my heart and will continue because they shaped my life. I think this is the point of writing to inspire others to remember. Keep writing you excel at it. and incorage others as well. Your friend Sashua
Hi shelly, I've been here a while but I stopped comeing when I didnt have internet so I still feel like a newbie most of the time. You said that you know form poetry. If you could give me some pointers that would be wonderful. I'm homeschooled and My mom knows nothing about poetry. and I dont learn well from books. ( not sure why) Have a great day Your friendly WDC neighbor Sashua
Wow your awesome at poetry. I hope When Im older I can be half as good as you are. My best friend who I consider a sister Isnt neccesarily like your brother. When we first got so close we were a lot younger and went through compleatly diffrent things but the closer and stronger we grew together the more we ended up deeling with the same problems. Even though we are both teenagers and are almost at each others throats 24/7 we still will always consider each other as more then a best friend. I love yor poem because It reminded me that through thick and thin she'll always be there for me and Ill always be there for her. even when we move away in the near future. So thank you for the inspiration. I hope you have a great day and keep hanging in there. Your friendly WDC member Sashua
It's a good poem. The reason I gave you the rating I am is because based on you decription of what the peom was going to be about, I thought it was going to be diffrent. Plus I had no clue what a tri stanza was. so I wasnt sure how it was going to be set up. So you taught me something new. Thank you for that. Unfortunatly it sorta through me off when I was reading it. Your title is endevor which since it appears no were in the peom leads me to believe that we should endeavor to try and if we fail there in lies the success. I love your ending sentence Trying built our nation. It's very true. Keep up the good work. Your friend Sashua
I love this poem. You could easily turn it into a Childrens book if you wanted to. I could see it playing out in my head in story form,but that might just be my twisted mind. Still It was written really well. The only thing was that you switched betwent how you wrote it. I would have kept up the pattern. Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading more
Your friend Sashua
It's not bad, It kind of reminds me o a book series called THE CITY OF EMBER. It about an underground city were the power is failing and they have to get it working again before they lose power forever. They end up just finding a place to leave the city. Still it sounds a lot like that. What is a NOAA licence. You should continue with this story it has promise but you would need to finish it to find out. there are a bunch of question you should answere if you decide to keep going have fun writing. Sashua22
for me there are to many things this poem could mean with in the outline of trees like the begining part says "i see trees to calm" it could mean the trees are to calm or it could be sibolic of your self being to calm like your looking at yourself from a distance and your not doing enything worth while then you say familiar form i dont understand what that means and i let you know ive never been all that fond of poetry good points poetry is suppose to make you think so its a good thing wordsare spelled correctly
p.s. what does each to each mean
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