Well done....
Really liked your topic of discussion...not common and hence has an uncanny charm to it.Tell me something-what kind of a static item is it.
-Frosty(sayantorres)
Review some of my works pls.
Nicely written Shauna
It is always advisable to space the lines better I mean, after a fullstop start writing from the next line- increases readability and critical appreciation.You're theme is lost love-quite common but your execution is very nice.Overall a good read.Keep it up.
-Frosty(sayantorres)
Review some of my works if possible.
Nice...Tell me one thing.You love your partner more than anything else as portrayed here.So why do you say that you remember him for a brief moment and question the existence of the feeling.Rhyme your poems Lily,they will be much more attractive.Your previous poem for me was better.But carry on and with God's grace, one day you'll be a professional.
-Frosty(SayanTorres)...
Firstly, I'd like to congratulate you for a wonderful effort of yours to bring out the hypocrisy of the society and indeed its inhabitants who try to change themselves according to how others want them to be, just to impress their subordinates but what they do not understand is that in the process they lose their self esteem and flatter themselves more than anybody else.And when realisation finally dawns on them, it is usually too late.Now, on the poetry part...One thing is your grammer is nice but as a reader I'd always advise you to make your poems rhyming.It always adds charm to your work and captures the imagination of people.People may or maynot be able to understand your message, but they will always appreciate a good rhyming poem.I cant quite understand the meaning of howling laughter(oxymorone).There is a line"My knees are weak and I'm feeling faint".How can you feel faint?You can faint but how do you feel faint?
Overall a nice read..I liked your effort this time, next time, make me love it.
-Frosty(SayanTorres)
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