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Review of Dynamic Duo  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
lol, that was funny. Especially the end.
I enjoyed reading this.

I think you chose a good title for this, it goes with it very well.
I like how you bolded one of the person's dialogue, it really helped to know who was speaking.

I think you did a good job writing this.

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Review of The Ring  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is great *Smile*
I really like the twist of this story.

Losing a ring in the ocean was akin to tossing it in a volcano or flinging it over Niagara Falls.- I liked this line

One cut revealed something strange - a metal object.- I think the ring could be describe more creatively than 'a metal object' here.

This is a nice story. I really liked it. Short but sweet. *Smile*

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Review of Reviews  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well said.
I agree with you all the way.
Especially that the review should be positive and not to tear the person down.
I think it takes a lot to put your work out there for all to see and to have someone rip it apart doesn't help anything.

The reviewed author should come away from his review feeling that he has gained insight to his writing and has become a better writer- great line *Smile*

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Review of Glen  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this is very good.
I'm sure it was emotional for you to write but I thank you for sharing such an uplifting piece with us.

You are really talented with your adjectives.

You have done a wonderful job writing this. I did not see any errors reading this and it kept my interest all the way through. For me a good story does that. *Smile*

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Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I thought you did a very good job writing this.
It was very heartfelt *Smile*

The flow was a little off, but the content of the poem made up for it.

Bring him home safe and sound- I think this line sounds better without 'and sound' on the end.

Good Job! *Smile*

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Review of Ashamed  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I like this poem. The content is great.

I realize ashamed is the name of the poem but it seems that the word is repetitve. Maybe you could use:humiliated or embarrassed.

It's hard to critique a poem that seem personal because I'm sure you are putting your feeling and emotions into it. Again you express yourself very well.

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Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is very good.
The title is very good for this poem.

The only thing about it is the word 'free' is used frequently. Maybe you could use liberated, unbound, or something of the sort.

I think this is sad poem. I think you have written it well. As a matter of fact I can almost see a ribbon on this item *Smile*

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Review of Demon in Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I think you did a great job writing this.
I don't know if this is true, but I commend you for your expression. I like how you tell just how you feel.

I think this is very good. The flow of the poem is very nice.

I think someone going through the same thing reading this might find it helpful.

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Review of Promise  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is very good.
The flow of the poem is very nice.

I really like the style you wrote this in.
you have nice inagery here.

that is my bind- this seems a little forced to me.

Hidden tears, muted screams- great line *Smile*

I think the title fits this poem very well and you have written this well.

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Review of The New Me  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is interesting.

I'm so tired of smelling
your depression- I thought this was a very interesting and creative line. I never thought of depression as a smell *Smile*

You are very expressive in your writing and I think it adds a nice touch to your work.

Good Job *Smile*

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Review of I Am Who I Am  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This is good.
You express your feeling very well in this one too.

I like how the first and last stanza are the same. I also think those are the best ones in the poem.

I think the rhythm is inconsistant but I really like the content. The rhymes are good. When I say the rhythm I mean the flow of the poem *Smile*

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Review of Taking New Flight  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is very good.
You have done a wonderful job writing this.
The flow is great, the rhythm and rhyme is good.
Your word choice is great.

spreading my wings and taking new flight- I love this line and it ends the poem well *Smile*

Great Job!!! *Smile*

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Review of Understand  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I thought this was very interesting.
Again you express your feelings well.

This sounds like a love for someone you met on the internet and your mom is trying to warn you to be careful. I have to agree, you have to be careful if it is someone whom you have never met before.

Anyway, I think you did a good job writing this. You have great imagery.

Keep up the good work *Smile*

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Review of Blanket of Love  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is great.
I think you have done a wonderful job writing this.
You express your feelings well.

I like this line-I need to feel
that blanket of love- It gives the image of love being warm and fuzzy *Smile*


I one day I wish- This doesn't sound right

Great Job!!

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Review of Dirty  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is good.
You have some good descriptions here.
You seem to have a knack for song writing. *Smile*
I think this one flows very well and the chorus is good.

My skin glistens under your touch- I like this sentence.

Great job!

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Review of Angel Eyes  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
This is good.
I think you did a good job with your word choice.
I was wondering if you write the music for these too or just the words.

I don't have another suggestion for one but I think another title would be better, because I know there is another song with this title and I think there might be two.

Good Job.

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Review of Your Creation  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Oh my. I have to say I really did not like the content of that song. But I think you did a good job writing it.
I like how you have the echos.
Is this suppose to be like heavy metal or alternative?

You did a good job writing this even if I disagree with the song *Smile*

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Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a great story. Great imagery througout. I think you have done a wonderful job writing this.

Mackenzie didn't know what to think of the immacurate home. It was three floors, a bathroom on each floor, six large bedrooms, a kitchen, living room, parlor, lobby, dining room, library, office, attic and basement.- this seems to be in the wrong place. She couldn't have noticed all of this just on her way upstairs to her room. Maybe you could describe the house a little bit as she is walking to the door.

without cringing about thinking about when the last time the tub.-{c:rose the last time the tub what? *Smile*

before she ran off to that birthday part for her friend Morgan.- birthday party

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Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I think this is great!
I really like the story and I love how you began and ended it.

This is a sad thing that happens all the time and if this is true, I hope the other person realises it and you two and do something about it *Smile*

I like this line-
I drained my heart

Keep up the good work *Smile*

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Review of Rainy Night  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I think this is very good. You say very little but it comes out as so much.

I like how you started and ended with the same stanza.

The imagery is great. I think you did a great job writing this. I like the red its a nice touch for the poem.

Great Job!

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Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
You describe the pain well and I think you did a good job of writing this. But it leaves me questioning what is causing this pain.

I like the how you described the encounter with the child in the middle of the night with the spider on the wall.

in the middle of the story it gets confusing. I'm not sure if you are describing a dream or if its suppose to be a metaphor or what.

Most of what you have written is very good but this story leaves me questioning.

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Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Aww how sweet.
This is a lovely story. The content of course is great.

I think this would look alot better if the whole story was not centered.

Your borders and pictures add a nice special touch to the story.

I liked the part where you described the baby when she was first born.

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Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a great story. Very inspiring.
On the holidays we usually pray for the homeless but what you and your family did was take it a step further. Its great that there are people like you.
I'm sure those people couldn't thank you enough *Smile*

I thought you did a good job writing this. I think you deserve the award you have on this item *Smile*

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Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nice. I think you have to be talented to write an acrostic that rhymes too. I think you did a nice job here. This too is a good one for children to read.
I thought the last line was very good.
I also like how you made the first letters orange to go with the theme.
Good Job *Smile*

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Review of Girls Night Out  Open in new Window.
Review by Shadow Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I think you did a good job writing this and have incorperated the titles in the story very well.
The story is pretty good.
I think you could introduce the friends a little better. I was reading it and a different girl's name came up every couple of sentences and it was a little confusing. The title suits the story well.

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