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Review of Smothered Dreams  
Review by jaya h
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
The poem speaks the truth about vanishing dreams. The free verses flow well with food coices of the words. The every step of killing the dreams is documented and it feels terrible to read them. It mainly reads like a prose but written well. I suppose with all the knowledge one stilll can't stop ruining the dreams...
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The title and the content of the poem don't agree. It's amazing that the youngest member should volunteer to sacrifice his life for 11 others. The background of this event is not clear,so the importance of the sacrifice can't be judged. The poem reads like a prose but the idea is vague and can't get the 'unconditional love' s feeling.
Jaya H.

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Review of Cheat  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The fiction is about catching a liar red handed. The flow is patchy. sometimes confusing so that the event that should have been exciting, comes out as a drag. the punch ;inre is not interesting, though the plot seems to br good. With little editing with the flow of the fiction, it 'll be a good fiction.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of The Lullaby  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It's mysterious lullaby. It reads like a prose but there a flow with a rhyme. It's simplicity is alluring. The emotional bond between the sisters is well documented. The connection to the lullaby is touching and feelings are poured all over the poem.
a good read,
Jaya H.

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
It's a humorous story about the missing keys. It's not clear whether those are car keys or house keys. The flow is good with a rhyme.The panic feelings are well documented. I was not sure why not check with the husband before searching all over. I'm sure he was enjoying the scene all along, that adds spice to the story for sure.
a good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Like an Angel  
Review by jaya h
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
It's a subtle piece of a story of one's life without going into any specifics. The second paragraph, second line, I think , should start with A rather than I, to make a sense out of it. The life style of the human overusing the natural resources and depleting the energy to the level of being helpless for the future; is mentioned in the piece.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Her Eyes...  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The soldier i the poem seems to be an old-timer, since there is sword mentioned as his weapon and not a bomb. The life on battlefield portrayed here is amusing. The hope of the love keeps them going until their last breath. A soldier counting on to live for the loved one and trying to get strength from the love he remembers. Its a good piece- a prose on action and adventure.
Jaya H.

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Review of The window  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Which window is being referred here? Is it the window of a soul? because the description says -a spirtual poem. Is it trying to be free? third stanza is very confusing to me. What is the problem here? There is a misspelled word in the second stanza.-last line. Please edit it and make the poem litlle clearer in the process.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Heart with Fears  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The poem of a confused mind. The thoughts are scattered all over the poems,it has no ending or a beginning. he questions are popped up in the poem in search of answers but at some point there seems to awareness of many answers within'he'-whoever he is. There is no clarity in this poem, it reads like a questioner for no one to answer in particular but just presented for the self knowledge.
Jaya H.

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Review of Plane Trip  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A good slapstick on a believer's mind. It flows well. keeps the suspense till end and covered all the conditions of the fiction contest. There should be quotation marks for the last sentence., otherwise it reads well well with no other errors noticed by me. Its hard to believe that a businessman would get carried away with a small girl's talk, unless he really didn't want to make that trip and looking for a reason.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This fiction needs a lot of editing. It flows very patchy and the formatting is not easy to read. It reads a dialogue between mother and daughter but the statemnts are very confusing. The song and storyline has to be seoarated properly. The end is somewhat abrupt without comleting the storyline at all.
Jaya H.

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This piece is listed as apoem but reads like a prose item.
Who is 'I' in this piece? is it god, a person , superpower or what? It's very confusing to undrstand the thought process in this peeiece so I couldn't enjoy it. The description said its about the god'slove , but I didn't follow it at all.
Needs clarification of the central idea,
Jaya H.


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Review of Glory and Honor?  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
The confusing thoughts about 'Gut and Glory' are documented here. It seems the reason for any war is to preserve our own-old or new wars. The author seems to be in conflict as said here: 'We may not start the fights anymore, but by God we will finish them! ' The reason for any war seems to be as protecting our own and there seems to be conflicting feelings about the reason in author's mind as I read it.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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Review of Angel  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It's like an eulogy to the friend. It's hearfelt and realistic portrait of friend's nature. There is no rhythm or rhyme but flow is good. The feelings are written spontanously. All her qualities given here are commendable . it's nice to have a friend like that. The loss is reflected in every line.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Position of Power  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Is this a fiction? it seems only a beginning . there is no plot , no action or story. It seems an incomplete work. Just a dialogue between aq king and his son. Is it a work in progress? I really can't comment on half hazard writing displayed here, it will be better if it's completed soon enough.
Jaya H.

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Review of Whirlwind  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A positive tone of the poem is very refreshing.
Take a control of your own life is the message given here. There is no rhythm, rhyme or punctuations. the confused thought process is flowing all over. There is a focus in the thoughs but poem is scattered all over. Needs some editing to tighten the grip of words.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of The way  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The poem is expressing a tremendous faith in the God. The was between the god and devil is eternal and the choices offered between evil and good are also eternal. The faith in the god shouln't be blind enough tofall for the devil's evil power and then hope for the god to get you out of the mess. that's the message in this poem, I think.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of An Answered Wish  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
For a happy, blessed situation like this the poem is not very cheerful in its tone. It's told very humbly in simple way.There is no rhyme or rhythm but a story is told with clarity. It expresses a true love and a faith in the god(s) as well. A flow is smooth, many times it flows like a prose.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A life story in a shoebox is the inspiration here. The memoryboxes reveal person's life. Whether it wellspent or not. The reflections on ninety years can be taken as a pinch of salt , now and then. All decisions and choices made in a life can't always be correct, but one hads to live through it. The poem can beimproved with better words and clarity of thoughts.
Jaya H.

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It's a messy affair painted in the poem in a very round about fashion It needs more focus and a thought process needs to be expressed better than it's done here. Pragmatic lover can be calculative, manipulative and to be in that relationship can be messy but other party is sensitve and emotional. The poem needs more work to make it not messy.
Jaya H.

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The poem does read like a song. Is it a dreaming or being high on..? It sounds like more than a dreaming and if at it's dream it may be hopeful feelings of togetherness. The last two lines wipe out all the dreaminess from the poem and puts the finality to all the hopes.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Anger  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It's a complicated poem. The theme is everyday feeling but expression is very unusually painted. The last stanza is moving very choppily. The flow is not smooth , may be for the theme but areder gets entangled in the theme and waiting for a breather until...
An interesting job,
Jaya H.

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A nice way think about the beginners. But they may be newbies fo WDC, but could be accomplished writers, which is always not known by rest of us. Even then it's nice to win a recognition at any stage of career. It's encouraging and a happy moment for a winner.
A good thought,
Jaya H.

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is more like a prose than poetry. It seems it has been written on the Memorial day or written for the veterans. The feelings are true to the core nad expressed very well. The flow is great with a good choice of words. Only hope is the se feelings should reach them when they are figting for our freedom all along.
Jaya H.

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Review of Hourglass  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
An hourglass expressing the whole life. The time gone can't be recovered. Very rarely one gets a second chance in a life. The metaphor fits well except the hourglass is enclosed and life can be an open book. It's all in our hands: choices we make and decisions we take . Well done .
I enjoyed the poem.
Jaya H.

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