I can understand how you feel, I was in therapy practically my whole life until the age of 14? yea, 14. so I can understand what you are trying to let out. It took me awhile to concentrate though because of the structure. be creative! your UNIQUE feelings are worth more than repeating stanzas. It seems like you try too hard to fit everything into the same rythm. Try the approach of being abstract. make your own rythm to write to becaue I swear there are about 300 people on this website writing with the same rythm. (your two line stanzas are PREDICTABLE) a good writer wants to capture the reader. I hope my advice leads you to a stronger road
I REALLY ADMIRE YOUR WORK! when I read this I pictured me and this girl that I loved experiencing your own cherished moments. I am deeply sorry for your loss. this poem is truly romantic with the imagery you provided... it makes my heart ache for the one I love.
I really admire how you hold such significance to a "simple kiss." your pleasures in kissing isn't so "simple" is it? you cherish what you have experienced, I like that. As for me I'm still Patiently Waiting. good luck with your love life!
this is SO TRUE! It all depends on whether we allow ourselves to be totally assimilated into the customs of those around us. The variables that allow us to become leaders all depends on our efforts and struggle to stand out of the crowd, to become an individual. positive and negative energy. these are context clues to how we should live. we cannot totally live life on the positive side OR the negative. we must keep ourselves balanced in bothe hemispheres to allow us the wisdom of becoming aware of both planes. we have a greater chance of ascension within ourselves if we live indiscriminately to both sides of negative and positive energy.
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