ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3327903

Review of Time

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about time and how it affects your body. Clever. A skillfully crafted Dodoitsu. Perfect 7/7/7/5 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling ad sense of humor about what time does to ones physicality.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3327897

Review of Savage Waves

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the sea, its power as it flows and is salted in God's patient grace. A skillfully crafted Tanka. Perfect 5/7/5/7/7 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the waves of the sea, unchartered and raging.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of waves - 'raging'

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Powerful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3327890

Review of Jubilation

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and dedicatory piece for Stormy that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture through nature of the character of your friend that is bright uplifting.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a note, punctuation isn't usually used in haiku/senryu.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how special she is and the joy in knowing that she will return home safely.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3324912

Review of Envy

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good story poem about the need to be loved and feelings of envy of the person who is loved by James while she wishes to be loved by him who belongs to another. A nice blend of free verse and rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of Cassie's eyes we see her fun and laughter she enjoys with James that ends when Sandy arrives and leaves with him leaving Cassie feeling pain because she knows he is not hers.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express Cassie's sense of loss in not being the special person in James' life, something that she envies and wishes was hers.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.
Nice rhyme in lines two and four (ball, tall); lines five and six (uproar, shore). Nice internal rhyme in line five (seashore, uproar) and line seven (sunshine, line).

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3324897

Review of Scars

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of this monolgue/prose.

Form/Style:

A good dark write about the painful scars that remain in the heart, mind and body due to the failure and expectation of the person you thought loved you. Heartfelt and introspective. A well crafted monologue/prose.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Powerful, passionate and painful as you express thoughts of suicide at being seen as not good enough for her, a failure in her eyes.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of rhyme (reviving, surviving, depriving). Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3324469

Review of Snow Angels

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write of your joyful memories of children making snow angels. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Sestina. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your memories you paint a vivid picture of children at play making snow angels after a pristine snow fall, which after some time brings you back to the present as a car arrives filled with your grandchildren who pile out into the snow, once again bringing you joy and love shared by you and the one playing and watching over his children.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Heartwarming. You express the love you feel for the children from your memories and the grandchildren who now play in a snow blanketed yard that brings joy to you on this beautiful winter morning.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling which is also driven by this form of poetry. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3322867

Review of We Must Find the Time

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about finding strength to tell the one you love that you love them. Well crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about the importance of making time to express what you feel in your heart for the special person in your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3322861

Review of Invocation to the Night

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about seeking comfort from your troubles. Abstract, heartfelt and prayerful. Skillfully crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of the night that is cool, yet comforting.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; haunting. You express your hope that your troubles be washed away by this higher power found in the night.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3322846

Review of Light in the Darkness

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the light of faith found in God. Heartfelt and introspective. A lovely testimony. Skillfully crafted free verse triplets.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the light of hope; the peace found in nature that He created and the light that He plants within all who believe.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about God's light which He gives to us; His peace, light that gives us hope. Uplifting and encouraging.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3321840

Review of Three Types of Darkness

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about darkness and its definition and nuances in life. Clever, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express very well how darkness affects those within in.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3321823

Review of Tiny New Star

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this special wishing star. Heartfelt and imaginative. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the star, its light and wonder.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a note to check your punctuation. I think line 4 in stanza one should end with a period and line 4 in stanza two should end with a period. Making these changes will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the star - it thinks; it's her light that guides a persons way.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. A mix of near rhyme and every second/fourth line throughout poem is near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Lilting and uplifting. I like the magic of starlight that you express in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Strong use of as repetition for emphasis of the character of this star. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3321804

Review of My Rock Has Gone

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about lost love and the pain it has brought to you. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of metaphor to describe how much this person meant to you - 'my rock has gone.' Nice simile: 'like the stars above, I used to shine' - a good descriptive/comparison about yourself of how you shined when you were together.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Lamentful. You express your sorrow and loss for this person you loved who left you in pain, anger and with regrets. The person you once were, now gone--dying with him. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3321796

Review of Fragments (prt1 from Bellas perspective)

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about love lost and how it makes her feel. Heartfelt and lamentful. Nicely crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transitions and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to her thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of metaphor in describing this lost love: 'I lost my sky' and 'you lost your star'. A good descriptive/comparison for this this person she loves and this love he once had for her.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express her sadness and loss of the person she loves and her plea that he comes back to her. Passionate and poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of her feelings. Nice alliteration, consonance an, good assonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line seventeen, should be 'peace'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3321781

Review of Last Stand

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your feelings of your journey in life. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line two of the second stanza (plight, light) and in line one of the third stanza (give, live) and line three of the third stanza (flight, light).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Dark. You express your thoughts about your journey with clarity; the feelings of aloneness, a path that is not quite seen, although it has not end and the fear of its end.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition and rhetorical questions for emphasis of feeling in your plight in life. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3319697

Review of Flower of Hope

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a special snowflake and the flower that buds from it with the hope of spring. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of snowdrops that poke out of the ground; these little bells of white that dot over the landscape as spring finally awakens.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter (eight syllables per line). Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababa. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. A sweet story poem about this flower that buds in Eve's garden, a gift from angels. You express hope beautifully through nature in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3319685

Review of A Promise to You, My Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your love for your husband. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for him passionately in this piece. Delightfully sensual. You are blessed to have a husband who loves you and whom you love so much.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3319676

Review of Writer's Block

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about how writer's block causes you to lose your way. Heartfelt, concise and succinct. A well crafted free verse mirror acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of 'Writer's Block' as it breaks off branches you hoped to climb; bury's your thoughts in a tomb and causes you to lose your way.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how exasperating writer's block can be as it undercut's your creativity making it hard to express your thoughts. I've been there.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3319674

Review of Grandpa

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and loving tribute to your grandpa. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your grandpa, his scratchy kisses and tight hugs and the fun you have with him.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for your grandparents, but in particular the love and pride you have in your grandfather. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of your love for your grandfather. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3319670

Review of A Pot of Gold (or 'Yellow'?)

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write, bawdy with humor. Clever. A skillfully crafted limerick. Good form and rhythm.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this saloon and the drinks that you partake with merriment resulting in the need to use the 'john' to release all the fun.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba ccddc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as is the sense of humor. Lilting and fun.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3317307

Review of My Valentine

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the love your husband feels for you and the love you feel for him. Romantic, short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the passion that his love gives you, these 'breath marks' he leaves upon your heart.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3317303

Review of Quarrel

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write about what a quarrel looks like. Introspective. A skillfully crafted Shadorma. Perfect 3/5/3/3/7/5 syllabic form that is concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of this shadow of regret brought about by quarrel.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of a quarrel as a shadow curled up in a corner; and simile: licks itself like a cat.
Good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the heat of an argument, then the regret which is afraid of the light, this shadow of a quarrel.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3317296

Review of Bizarre

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this special love that found you when you least expected it. Heartfelt. A well crafted free verse acrostic that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how you were satisfied with your solitary life and then he walked into your life and freed your heart to love him. A lovely tribute to your husband.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3316516

Review of Roses in Heaven

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your love for your mother and how much you miss her. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe aghg. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Prayerful. You express your love for your mother beautifully in this piece as you converse with the Lord about your feelings for her and what you'd like Him to tell her. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of There are..

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your feelings for yourself and your aspirations. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts and feelings nicely in this poem. I like the encouragement that surrounds you, those who bring you peace, love and happiness that is a blessing to you. Uplifting and encouraging to your spirit. I like your optimism in yourself, knowing that you will come through whatever the obstacle.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line five, should be 'breaths'. Also, line five is a bit awkward; if you change "thank for everyday" to 'I'm thankful for everyday,' this will make the flow and rhythm of that line even better in my opinion.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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Review of Boogey

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the boogyman that is heartfelt and eerie. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this sinister shadow that brings fear to you when you try to go to sleep.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your fear of this 'night' creature very well and the one thing that can keep it away is light. I like the bit of humor of your last two lines--the thing that protects you and keeps you safe a 'powerful night light!' - the memories that this brings back to me.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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