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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write and message about hate and how it is fostered from generation to generation. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababab. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line five (say, today)
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express how this 'illness' is promoted from parent to child through the generations, a sad commentary on mankind.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about justice that is short, concise and succinct. Clever word play. Thoughtful and thought provoking. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of justice as a woman; one that is blind so every person coming before her is on a level playing field yet sometimes it rings untrue.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbcdd. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the problems that one finds in justice when it is delayed, or on those who don't have the means to get the best representation; and I agree, courts and lawyers can render it pathetic.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about spring rains that is short, concise and succinct. A well crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.
Imagery:
Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of rain as it nourishes flowers to blossom as it renews plant life.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a note, you don't have to use punctuation when writing haiku.
Tone:
Nice depth of feeling. You express the importance of rain in springtime, one of renewal and rebirth.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about your love for Spring. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of new life that comes with the spring season. Through the lens of your eye we see the beauty of blossoming trees, budding flowers and as though we're right there by your side, hear the birds singing; this is a lovely touch of spring.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the joy of Spring beautifully in this poem. I can relate. I love Spring. It's finally arrived here in NYC.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of springtime. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.
Overall:
Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A very good write about the inspiration of love in a relationship. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of love as view through nature, leaves rustling in a breeze (love's symphony) and color flowers (love's galleries).
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the comma at the end of lines five and nine. If you remove them the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.
Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling as you ask for love to inspire your imagination making it run wild; to inspire your senses with every beat of your heart. Poetic.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.
Overall:
Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about youth and how the attributes of youth is similar to characteristics of the life of a leaf. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of the bond between leaf and tree that is similar to the connection between parents and children.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Metaphor or Simile:
Nice use of metaphor expressing the similarity between a leaf and growing child.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the stages of growth, still clinging to the care/life giver and in time given the opportunity to float free on its own.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice use of double entendre. Just a note, I think there is a typo in line seven, should be 'though'.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about the beauty of the morning. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of the morning sky as the light becomes a symphony that awakens the day and nature's creatures from their nightly rest.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the commas at the end of lines two and three. If you remove them the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.
Metaphor or Simile:
Nice metaphor: 'the ineffable rhythm, nature's sublime symphony' - a good descriptive/comparison.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express your love of the golden light of the morning. I can relate.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about the true meaning of love. Heartfelt words of wisdom. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the commas at the end of lines five and six. If you remove them the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.
Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling as you express what love means to you.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about release and cleansing of the soul through tears. Heartfelt and abstract. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eyes you paint a vivid picture of tears as they fall from 'eye-less' faces.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the period at the end of line four or the semi-colon at the end of line eight. If you remove them, the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.
Metaphor or Simile:
Nice metaphor: 'Time faces the mirror' - good descriptive/comparison.
Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. You express how through tears, the spirit is mended.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.
Form/Style:
A very good write about dawn that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Haiku. Perfect 17 syllables or less form.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eyes you paint a vivid picture of the light of dawn.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.
Metaphor or Simile:
Nice metaphor: 'glowing light begins the dance' - good descriptive/comparison of the flickering light of dawn that is dance-like.
Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty of dawn as it breaks through the night. I enjoy watching the rising sun and the beautiful colors of the sky.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.
Overall:
Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about a Halloween and an evening of fun and games. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic which I enjoy.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of fun children have on Halloween night that any reader can see in their mind's eye.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm of your poem even better in my opinion.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the fun of dressing up on Halloween, seeing pumpkins carved out and glowing and the giving out of candy to trick or treaters on this magical night.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.
Overall:
Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about the love you feeling for this special woman in your life. Uplifting. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme which is executed well in this piece.
Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for her and for each other beautifully, this love of yours that shall never be defeated. The power of it will keep you through the valley's of life.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good short write about words as a wall of protection that is concise and succinct. Well crafted rhyming poetry.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the period at the end of line two. The flow and rhytm of this short piece will be even better without it in my opinion.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. The second and fourth lines are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this poem.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. A clever word of wisdom for ones safety; a way of hiding from the ills of the world.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about your love for words. Heartfelt and clever word play. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the power of words, your passion for them, how you crave them, their sound and how they flow off the tongue. For you they are like fine wine, sweet as they wet your lips.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feelings about words. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write and message about living life. Heartfelt and upbeat. Well crafted rhyming poetry.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cbcb dbdb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. Uplifting and encouraging. A message that tells you to take heart and be strong and you will fend anything that comes at you in life.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.
Overall:
Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write and heartfelt prayer, a tribute to your Sioux heritage and its people. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.
Metaphor or Simile:
Nice use of simile: 'hear the prayer of this Sioux like a dream catcher, sift out the bad' - a good descriptive/comparison.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.
Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. You express your plea to the Thunder Spirits to give your people back what has been lost to them poignantly in this poem; a heartfelt plea for peace and dignity and to find the path back to your home that was once plentiful.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.
Overall:
Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about your life and how you live it. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts and fears about life and how it shapes you very well in this poem. Thoughtful.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and rhetorical questions for emphasis of feeling about living your life. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.
Overall:
Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write and presentation about a getaway day trip. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a good picture of getting away for a picnic with the children, going no where special, but enjoying the scenery of the time and place of your unknown destination.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks that are done well. Nice rhythm.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghij kblb. Every second/fourth line is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling as you take time with your kids and take a cool road trip to enjoy your time together on the road find a place with a lake and trees for a picnic and lovely day enjoying nature.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line four of stanza seven, should be 'trees'.
Overall:
Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about the fall that is short, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted form. Perfect syllabic count of 55 syllables.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the beautiful colors in the autumn season and its beautiful night skies.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Tone:
Nice depth of feeling. You express your enjoyment of this season beautifully in this piece.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good fantasy write about unconditional love and how she will wait patiently, through the ages even in the darkness for the one she loves. Well crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your imagination you paint a vivid picture of unconditional love through this woman who will wait for her true love no matter how long it takes.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Metaphor or Simile:
Very nice metaphor for unconditional love as a woman.
Nice simile: 'death's mystery sung out like a soliloquy'
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the power of unconditional love through peaks and valleys of life, in silence and darkness, always there, always able to be counted upon and always waiting.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of character of unconditional love. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about a love lost and how important this person was to you through the strength of your memories. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. Even in sadness, you express your good memories of this love you once shared, savoring images of a smile, laughter, unforgettable warmth, presence and love... and then how much you miss it when it disappeared and you realized how much you loved this person and how important they were to you.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write, message and metaphor of living a solitary life as described as a single stemmed rose. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your life as described in a solitary rose--roots tired and dry, no petals, bare and lost.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Metaphor or Simile:
Nice metaphor. A very good comparison/descriptive of the traits of a solitary rose that is similar to traits of a solitary person.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccde ffgg hijj kkll. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three of stanza one (tight, fight).
Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express the hope you see in being 'a solitary rose' that you will endure even in defeat, just as the rose; but you will overcome and be a radiant rose basking in sunlight. An uplifting and encouraging message.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a suggestion, the following typos need correcting: throughout poem 'I' should be capitalized as well as 'I'm'. Also, in line four of stanza two I would change spilled to 'spilt'; in line two of stanza three I would change stood to 'stand' and in line three of stanza four I would change kept to 'keep'. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about a quest in a day dream while in class and caught at it by the teacher. A good story poem, and true to life. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of being in class and the confrontation by the teacher because of not paying attention and the mad dash out the room and straight into the arms of the principal.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba ccddc eeffe. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling, with a tinge of humor. You express well how you may be captive at school, but your thoughts on this particular day are free.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of dialogue. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A good write about a horse in swift gallop that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.
Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a horse in its element, running free, powerfully in joyful flight.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the beauty of a horse and the joy of freedom he feels on a run.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.
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Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Form/Style:
A very good write about lessons we learn no matter how old we are. A heartfelt message. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.
Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.
Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.
Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the importance of love in a relationship, a bond that when broken another lesson (though hard) is learned, that it's okay to grieve and cry. Poignant.
Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about things we've learned and learn in life. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.
Overall:
Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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