Hee Hee! You make me smile. Sometimes I feel awkward as well. And for a long time, I guess ever since I started writing, acting and reacting from my imagination, I have known what schizophrenia is about!
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Not a thing! It is too awkward to talk about!
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I think it has to be that we all agree on one thing - none of us is perfect! Keep at it, you are doing a fun thing here!
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Hi, Nathii! I am always amazed by people who do so well with my language, when it is their second language, and virtually my ONLY one! This little opening to your Sad Comedy is very enjoyable.
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We'll invent something to spice your relationship up, but right now I guess I could get a headache of your ideas.
Just an American note: we get headaches from each others' ideas. It is up to you, of course, whether you want to change it.
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I really like your easy style of writing for this piece. It is very well adapted to this type of subject matter.
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This is very sweet and child-like. I love how you wrote about the thrill of being a child and finding your dream had a physical expression you could pull close to your heart and remember. I think that may be the most awful thing of all, that a lot of the wonderful dreams we have, we cannot remember upon waking.
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Could you write this from the point of view of the child? Could you bring in the excitement by having us experience it, in a dreamlike writing instead of telling us about it? Just an idea.
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Not a thing to worry about!
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The animals leaping around in heaven is something I know must be true!
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You made me feel loved! All we really know about each other is that we both love to write and have discovered writing.com ▬ until one of us shares a poem like this. And then I know that your heart is filled with the desire to bless others, to see them surrounded with angels and guided by the light of heaven. Thanks for stopping by
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so I would be led to discover a little about you! I love angels and you'll see one on your plaque for participating in the Challenge.
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The Lighthouses in the first line in your poem! Yippee!
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This is so adorable! Your son and you are quite a team. I read it aloud and we both giggled like crazy, so you did a great job!
Now, for a quick aside, when your character speaks, you should put a comma if you are going to continue without captitalizing. There are a few of those scattered through. I must say, you are consistent!
Lastly, there was only Flowerina the third youngling left she was a friendly pig You'll need to check this sentence, it is a little awkward.
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I don't know, it was all so precious. I think it had to be when the wolf confesses his attraction for Flowerina.
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Writing resulting from prompts makes interesting reading! This is an interesting tale. Walking the dog, a chore not enjoyed by everyone. I like how you showed interactions between the dog and the girl, even though she was so miffed at it.
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The dog smelling the cheeseburger breath and not paying any attention to the girl's feelings, just like they don't.
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Folders are the doorways from the Main Entrance to the Wings that hold the different categories of our stuff! Portfolio impact is greatly governed by getting the reader interested.
Hee Hee! I just had to come by and rate this, since I told you to get a pic and took the challenge of finding the perfect graphic. Oh, yeah, this is you. Hahahahahahahah!
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I like the unfinished part. I think all of us have things we haven't finished yet and sharing them kind of puts them in line to be finished, don't you think?
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A Texas Birder! Very cool! I love birds and live in Texas as well. You have a great ability to communicate things in a clear, concise and hilarious way. Welcome to WDC. Please let me know if I can help you with anything, except perhaps banding Cardinals!
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Meanwhile Arriving back at the station, I take Mr. Cardinal out of his bag.
He has a kind of "now what am I supported supposed to do" look.
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I can relate to this! I have had birds and other animals bite me when it is mandatory to grin and bear it. It is not fun, but it does teach one discipline.
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You nailed the family experience! This was a humorous little item! You did a good job of including the frustration of dealing with teens and the excessively poor design of some of our modern "conveniences." I found no typos or grammatical errors, but was unhappy to come so quickly to the end.
One of my friends and I spent a summer with minor projects and we were able to trace all the troubles of civilization of we know it to 'lousy nails'. Your treatise reminded me of that and gave me a smile.
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The sugar ants solving the problem of dirty counters cracked me up!
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I wasn't here for the first birthday, but I am here for this one! I ran around and looked at the other stuff and enjoyed each item. I couldn't pick up the party decorations, because right click was disabled, so you might want to look into that in your spare time .
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Well, I don't have any ideas for improvement and that's just the simple truth!
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We will then evaluate his/her entries.... entries... and so on until we find the winner three winners.
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I really like what you are doing here! You have done such a fine job at organizing and discussing! Off to another great year as a homeschooler. I am doing my part in trying to steer homeschoolers your way.
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Your presentation and confidence are inspiring!
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It is what we live that makes the difference, isn't it? We'll never be 'good enough' for God by ourselves. It is a blessing that no such requirement exists. Simple, exquisite faith in accepting the salvation offered to us is the answer to what we have to give.
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That this is a special prayer poem from your heart. It shows!
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What a sweet and beautiful poem! I could see the things you describe. I, too, have deer outside my front door and am very familiar with the splash of red the cardinal makes on the scene. I'm from the Houston area, but these are scenes which occur over and over across the USA and the world. Good, sweet familiar things that God gives us every day.
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I love the whole poem and your new daisy sig looks perfect!
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You made me feel! The lyrics to this song are "Your love is lifting me higher," this is the way love feels. Not just every day I care about you love, but sensual driving love!
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is still the fact that this tiny group of letters, when properly organized can represent a huge emotion!
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I love the way the title fuels this poem! Tiny poetry is so interesting. It's not all that easy to review, because there is such a little bit of words to talk about, but the emotion you have filled them with is really well-done.
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How it feels that one might not catch one's next breath at all...
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You made me feel! The emotion here is strong. It does seem like forever when you are waiting for something to happen. Haiku is such an excellent form of poetry to use for that feeling of suspense, tension, vibrating senses.
There is one misspelled word in the last line. You'll know which one
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I like the contemplative mood! It seems a pebble has dropped into the still waters. The movement of the water, the waves which go out in circles have not touched or capture you yet.
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As yet I am still.
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Turn about is fair play! but only because all is fair in love and war. Again, it takes so few words to draw the imagination to the edge of the story behind them.
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Is that it reminds me of that country song about the devil having blue eyes and blue jeans.
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You made me feel! This type of poetry truly lends itself to being the center of a work of prose. Have you ever done it that way? Some of my prose winds through song and poetry, but often a picture or a prompt such as a poem nurtures the story. I'd like to hear the story.
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The twirling on the wind reminded me of those spiralling wind chimes that are colorful and mesmerizing.
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I like this picture! You have described in a very short poem, exactly what temptation feels like. It feels like silk against bare skin.
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How enchanting this little item is.
The period at the end with no other punctuation at all may be an effort on the speaker's part to stop her heart from being drawn out.
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You made me feel! This one is really sweet. I like it a lot! Thanks for sharing your first love poem with us. It is a clear sample of things to come, for you are good at putting emotion into words.
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I love the way this poem goes straight down the center of the page, leading us from one line to the next!
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You made me feel! Love gives us hope. We reach out with a part deep inside of ourselves, daring to believe that we are loved and are capable of loving. This is very well done. There is something on the edge of this poem that makes it all the more attractive to me as a writer.
You have managed to interject the fear of the one who loves. When we have lost before, we fear losing again. Very well done.
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I like the way you capture emotions.
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You made me feel! I have had this experience with a horse and with a dog, both of whom were totally frightened of storms and loud noises. I can only see it as a type of shell shock, the storm is frightening to them because of the noise, but it seems to be more. I have found that playing music or singing helps. My presence alone in the stable or the barn helped a lot.
I understand your longing to help your dog and I hope you can find something that helps him. I do think if you can establish a protected place within your sight when there is no storm, it will help to settle him when there is no storm around.
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I love how you let your caring for you dog to show through!
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You made me feel! This poem is very true. The weapons of the spirit are so dangerous, because often we, especially as children, do not have any defense against them. A child is a tender gift from God and must be sheltered to grow. Thank you for pointing this out so eloquently.
in everyway every way.
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The clear statement against child abuse is represented by the title and the vivid imagery in this poem.
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You made me feel! Yep. You captured it. The emotion of depression is a mixed thing. It is a lot like other times in our life when we are fussy or complaining and ask others to go away. What we really mean is we need help seeing anything loveable about us. It is often melodrama, but it is not to be taken lightly. It is a desperate call for help from a spirit that feels conquered.
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The last line sums it up Help!
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