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I used a template for all of my reviews. I will comment on plot, characters, scene/setting, grammar, and anything else that comes to mind.
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short stories, novels, and blog
Favorite Genres
dark fantasy and horror However, I will read anything that is similar to a VC Andrews story. I also like any books about cooking.
Least Favorite Genres
romance, comedy, mystery, science fiction
Favorite Item Types
short stories, novels, blogs, anything about cooking
Least Favorite Item Types
poetry, campfires
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Romance, action-adventure, mysteries/thiller, science fiction
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, and WDC Frontliners.

I loved you WDC testimonial. It was so witty. It also made me hungry as I read it. It also appealed to me because I do like to cook. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Essay Assignment  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, and WDC Frontliners.

I enjoyed reading your assignment about blogging and journaling for writers. I keep a writing journal too. I'm about to start a blog too. Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your writing.

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, and WDC Frontliners.

I really enjoyed reading your seasonal pieces. I'm glad you didn't delete them. Reading this gave me warm fuzzys inside for the holidays coming up. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I really enjoyed reading your writing assignments about writing for children. I think it takes a special talent to write for children. I wish you luck in continuing to write in this genre.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Such a tease  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I love reading senryus, and yours is certainly no exception. I love the tongue and cheek way this poem is presented. I love the imagery in this poem because it brings across that teasing perfectly.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I really enjoyed reading your mini-story about child terrors. Your story seemed almost like a poem with the rhythm and use of allteration. I thought the ending was cute. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

This is such a sweet Halloween poem. A romance between a good witch and a vampire. This would make a great short story. The line about blood not trickling down her eyes reminded me of the vampires on True Blood. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of When you need me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army and WDC Frontliners, and because of gave me a review.

I believe this is more than just thrown together. I can tell a lot of thought was put into this. There's so much truth in this poem, and that's why I liked it. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I really enjoyed reading your blog. Good luck with your classes and the GMAT test. I know what you mean about Ecomonics classes. I had to take both of the Econ principals classes over again, so you're not alone.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

This is a fascinating journal you have here. It's quite orignial. I think it's great that you are helping those in need with this.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of To fix a fence  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and because of gave me a review.

Good Points
1. I like your laid back writing style.
2. This reminds me of when I used to live on the farm when I was a child.

Suggestions
1. They wont emerge until late evening. wont should be won't
2.The quail and roadrunners don’t mind. The sunflowers don’t mind. Combine these two sentences to eliminate repetition.
3. The new wire stretches across the old fence posts and I pound in the “steeples.” A comma is needed after posts.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and because you gave me a review.

Good Points
1. The action is great.
2. Kyle is a neat character to follow.

Suggestions
1. You change verb tenses in some of the paragraphs. It is best to stick with past tense in narration.
2. Kyle stood up a little straighter as a tingle traveled through his spine and he found himself peering at the occupants of the cabin in search of a threat. A comma is needed after spine.
3. Go through and drop the adverbs.
4. The narration is a little stilted. Go through and add contractions to correct this problem.

Sister of Mercy

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Review of HALLOWEEN NIGHT  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

This Halloween poem is so awesome and fun to read. It's just spooky enough to attract readers of all ages. I really liked the second stanza because it ran small chills through my spine.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Sirius black.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I enjoyed reading your tribute to your beloved pet. Your use of repetition and the rhyme scheme is very good. The last stanza was my favorite.

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I enjoyed reading your essay on poetic feet and meter. I jotted some notes as I read this to have a guide when revising some of my poetry.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtsey of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

Good Points
1. I liked the way you wove poetry in this story.
2. Great opening paragraph. This will draw readers to your story.
3. You have a strong ending. This will keep readers interested in your story.

Suggestions
1.She knew what was going to happen and it filled her with conflicting emotions of both dread and delight. A comma is needed after happen.
2. The presence was bred from evil, she knew that from the start, but magnetism drew her to him. You have an extra space between was and bred.
3.Did this belong to the man who had committed suicide? Put this thought in italics. This will help it stand out as an internal thought instead of an author's statement. You have other thoughts like this that would benefit from being in italics too.
4. Use contractions to improve the flow of your story.
5. Edit for commas around coordinating conjunction.
6. Go through and drop the adverbs. Adverbs tend to clutter up writing.
7. Write out all numbers under one hundred.
8. He would seem to come as soon as she felt she could wait no longer, was he watching?. Break this sentence up into two sentences.
9. I think this story could benefit from more dialogue. This story mostly contains narration and is rather telling at times. Substituting the dialogue will eliminate the telling.
10. I didn't become connected to the characters as I would have liked to. I believe adding dialogue will help with this too.


Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you courtsey of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I love the humor in this poem. It really cracked me up. I could picture the whole scene with your cleaver writing. I liked your use of alliteration too.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Love's Good-bye  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you courtsey of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

This lovely poem reminds me of a song by Jeannie C. Riley called "Shed Me No Tears". The flow, imagery, and rhyme scheme are perfect.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of My Music  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you courtsey of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I love music, so I was naturally drawn to this poem. I liked your use of allteriation and imagery. The flow and rhyme scheme were perfect. The last two lines were my favorite.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of I tremble  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you courtesy of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I've never read a haiku that was romantic too. The imagery is quite nice for a short poem. It absolutely took my breath away.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you courtsey of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

Good Halloween poem you've got here. I liked your use of allteriation. The flow and rhthym were just right. The imagery was great too.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you courtsey of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I really enjoyed reading your journal and learning more about you. Congrats on the weight loss. Keep up the good work.

Thanks for sharing this and write on.

Sister of Mercy

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Review of THE DARK  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtsey of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I love the eerieness of this poem. The imagery is deligthfully frightening. I really loved the last stanza. It creates a lot of mystery.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Simply Put  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
I'm reviewing this story on behalf of Angel Army and WDC Frontliners. You also gave me two helpful reviews.

Good Points
1. I like your use of isolationism in this story. One of my favorite authors, HP Lovecraft used this often in his stories.
2. You portray Jane's anxiety rather well.



Suggestions
1. Write out all numbers under one hundred.
2.The road was wet and the autumn leaves along the curb reminded her of the time when her mom drove over an oddly shaped branch buried in a freshly raked pile of leaves. A comma is needed after wet.
3. Jane’s timid, trembling eyes squeezed closed, closing out the world for the last time and she overheard the woman mumble under her breath, A comma is needed after time.
4. There were a few unneccessary adverbs. Go through and take those out. Adverbs tend to clutter writing.
5. Computer repair, craft shops, a service that converted vhs tapes to DVDs, everybody seemed to have their own business. vhs should be in all caps.



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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I really liked this poem. I love wolves, and my dog is part wolf. While reading this poem, I could picture a wolf in the forest roaming about. The third and fourth stanzas have the best imagery, but I liked the meaning of the first stanza. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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