This is a sad piece of work, and it must of took some strength to share such a thing about yourself. I can relate. Very emotional.
Spelling/Grammer.
Well edited, no errors, way to go girl!
You very descriptive,and reading this almost passes the sadness onto to reader. I got sad reading how to look at this and people aroung you. Thanks for sharing.
Overall ImpressionI liked what you wrote her, about someone whom you admire for goodness, evil perhaps and everything else in between.It has some great vocabulary,and it intent is very clear, however there are spelling and grammer errors.
Some errors I've noticed in spelling; angst-ridden I'm sure what word your trying to use here. frttingagain not sure the intented word,flirting,fretting
Some other errors,I realize
in shock that the shril , insanity-ridden laughter is mine, and I wonder why.I look down and saw the sight that shattered my soul. This sentence doesn't need to be broken after I realize.and I can be removed.
This has nice use of rhyme, and emotional words,A nice flowing piece with clear intent, just a little off in editing and appearance.
Done well,and after you've edited it I'd be glad to re-rate and review it for you.Take care.
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