Hiya! again
holz1812
Into the second chapter I go.
Ok I must tell you I'm lost. {e;worry} from Anna's kidnapping in the first chapter, all what she was experiencing, and even the Detective James in the end, I am introduced to Chester and a dog kennel? and a, wondering to myself what does this have to with Anna, her crazed boyfriend, being Taken in general as the title lures us.
Into it I learn what I hope are important later on details, however it this a needed chaoter two. in the order this novel is presented? Could what I learn here be told later on when we the readers learn more of Anna? what led to her being taken? Why she was? Why suddenly caused her beau to turn black? So much is raised in the first chapter in in this secind chapter no answers are given.
I know you are trying to create a background for all the will happen, however I am just unsure when Chester plays now in your novel. This is fast paced like the first chapter, you are depply creative and have a solid idea, only getting off to clear start is somwhat cloudy.
I suggest a decription to prick our curiosity. Thanks for sharing, and I look forward to reading more.
StaiNed-:D
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