I'll say this at first i was like "dang i found another story with alens and pirates and crap" and to be honest i'm just not into that kind of writing. but then, i'm a smart girl, i know that i should give everything a chance becuase you can't judge a book by its cover. So i read on...and i was hooked. that line “Two blasters?!” Aydri cried, “What the heck do you expect me to do?”
“Shoot!” He replied.
From right there i was like:
"brilliant*"
I like a good line like that and becuase of that i will continue to read you're story. It sound like it could get to be very famous with a bit of nursing. you should be very proud of this work- its very well written. I am sure you're other four chapters will be just as fantastic. i'm sorry for the horrific grammer in this message its not normally so bad i actually edit my stories unlike my replies hehe.
i welcome you to read some of my work on my portfolio. After reading this i figure you'll like "Lie to me" or even "Surefire Dying Flame. " I'll be checking up frequently for updates!
- much amor,
La Lola* ^-^*
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