This is a great poem! I relate to it so much! Thank you so much for sharing it with us. You should be given an award for this, if there were such a reward.LOL I have some poetry in my portfolio too if you'd like to take a look at it. Once again, thanks for sharing...
So, was this a dream or did you actually get married and not know it? I think the story leaves out some specific details. It leaves yoou hanging wothout knowing if it's a dream or if it's for real. I would try to add to it so all will undrstand what has really happened. I mean, don't get me wrong, it's a good story, I just wish I knew what really happened. Try adding to it to clear up the discrepency. All in all what you have wrote so far is good.
This is a very sexy and romantic story. Is this a non fiction story or did this happen for real? It honestly sounds like it's a non fiction. But, what do I know, right? Your words are put together to make the flow just right. I think it's a great story. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more of you writing.
I think that certain topics, especially taboo topics like suicide need to be told. It is there that I will begin to tell you of a traumatic suicide that affected our family. This is a Non-Fiction story.
Once again I feel that it could be a little longer than what it is. It's a good poem and I think you have great potential. Good luck with your writing and keep up the good work.
This is an excellent poem that reminds me of one of my past relationships. You have described the feelings and thoughts so well, that you've said in one poem what I would have liked to say to that person. I'm feeling betrayed and deceived is exactly how I felt. I thank God that I came across your poem. Thanks for such a beautiful work of art. Keep writing. I have a poem titled, Innocently you might be able to relate to.
Cancer is a very scary disease. It can leave one feeling all alone in such a big world. That's why it helps to have loved ones around, family and friends can mean the difference of living and dying. None of us want to die alone, it's just too painful. When my mom was first diagnosed with cancer the whole family felt lost. We didn't know what to do. We eventually learned that she needed love and understanding more than anything else. Especially when she found out that it could have been prevented, but her doctor failed to send her to a specialist.
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