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Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Great Poem!
It had amazing imagery.
When I read this poem I pictured a couple on a romantic evening.
Good Job!
Keep up the amazing work! :D

I've really enjoyed reviewing your work I hope you would take the time to do the same to me. I just got finished writing a new book called "My Best Friends Brother." I would like to know what you think about it. I would really appreciate it if you read it all because no one has, some chapter haven’t even been looked at yet and I don’t know how to get people to read it.
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Review of A Halloween Night  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Great Story!
The beginning was really good.
I thought it was fantastic how the girl got dragged into the bush and never seen again.
It was also brilliant for her bf to find her mangled body a year later.
But everything after that seems a little unrealistic and I know this is a fantasy story.
I feel like there could be a way for the events to fall together better.
Amazing Job!
Keep up the good work! :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of Texting  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Great Story!
All you write was very true.
Its a shame these days that all most teens and even children do is text.
They have no other cares or worries besides their technology dieing.
Its so sad to see your child turn into a "text freak"
Awesome Job!
Keep up the good work! :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of The Coin  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Great Story!
It was very interesting too read.
A typical children's book story.
Your writing was good and very realistic.
So was the interaction between the two siblings.
I thought it was amazing how much they thought they would be able to buy with one little coin.
But I got kind of sad at the end when it wasn't worth anything.
I also thought it was funny how the little girl switched sides on her brother at the end.
Good Job!
Keep up the fantastic work! :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of Light My Way.  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)

Great Poem!
But I could use some work!
I loved how you described everything but it could be a little more discription.
Like describing the love between couples or somthing could be nice.
But your poem reminded me of the summer time when school is out and how everyone hopes to find that summer romance.
Good Job!
Keep up the excellent work! :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr... _Brother
and you can message me on here and tell me what you think. You're the first person to ever read it after I revised it.
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Review of Tainted  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
AMAZING POEM 5 STARS!
This poem was really entertaining to read.
Your word choice was excellent everything flowed together perfectly.
The poem made complete sense and is extremely true and realistic.
The words fit so well together it was almost like a song.
You should really consider making this a song this could be a chart topper.
Great Job!
Keep up the good work.
Who ever gave you 3 stars had lost his/her marbles.

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr... _Brother
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Review of Mess  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Great Poem!
I loved how it was so random.
I enjoyed these parts the most "Circles sing and squares cry
Purple smells and orange reeks
This song tastes like ice cream and steak. "
I thought this part was really funny and random which I enjoyed.
But I would like to know what this poem is really about.
I think its about some sort of realtionship.
You write really well, I loved the way you explained everything and your word choice was excellent.
Amazing Job!
Keep up the good work! :D


I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr... _Brother
and you can message me on here and tell me what you think. You're the first person to ever read it after I revised it.
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Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Awee! What a touching story!
You write very well, the story grabbing me in right away.
I thought it was so sad that she lost both of her parents.
But I'm glad to know that she still has lots of great memories in her moms garden.
I loved the way you explained everything in the beginning of the story it was very discriptive.
I also was amazed how you summed up an complete story in just 300 words.
Amazing Job!
Keep up the good work! :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr... _Brother
and you can message me on here and tell me what you think. You're the first person to ever read it after I revised it.
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Review of I live  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Awesome poem!
Even though it was short it was very imformative.
I loved how you used imagery.
I could imagine everything you said.
Your word choice was really good as well.
The words flowed together perfectly and was not difficult to read.
Great Job!
Keep up the good work! :D


I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr... _Brother
and you can message me on here and tell me what you think. You're the first person to ever read it after I revised it.
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Review of A Poem by a Mom  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Nice Poem!
It convey's the problems mothers have to face and how they are sometimes scared of these obsticles in life but they try to overcome them with out their children realizing. \
I loved how you encorporated the blog into this.
The way you wrote it shows as if it could be a blog entry,poem, or even both.
Good Job!
Keep up the good work!
I hope your a great mom. :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr... _Brother
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Review of My Secret  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Great Poem!
I love how it was short and too the point.
It was very romantic as well.
I loved your choice of words.
Especially with "Why do I tinker with words
And play the game with letters"
This was a great line.
I also thought the first and last stanza was cute as well.
But I will say I see it unessisary to use " And the truth is"
I think it would sound better with just "To tell the truth"
I don't know if you ment to repeat thr two for emphasis or not.
Fantastic Poem!
Keep up the good work!

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr... _Brother
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Review of Still  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Great Poem!
I think this poem is off the a really good start.
But I feel like you could do some much more with it.
Like you could expound on your feelings a little bit more.
I think some of the wording could be a little better.
But I really enjoyed the mood and feeling of this poem.
I can totally sympathize with break ups, it really sucks
when a person doesn't turn out to be who you think they are.
Amazing Job!
Keep up the good work.

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of Alone  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Great Poem!
The imagery was fantastic.
But I'm still a little fuzzy about what's going on in this poem.
At first I thought is was a person alone in a relationship.
Then as I kept reading I thought it was a person who was alone in society.
But close to the end I started thinking of a person who was trapped alone in the desert.
Good Job!
Keep up the amazing work! :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of Take A Step  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
FANTASTIC POEM!
This poem was very motivational and exciting to read.
I like that you had the right amount of rhyme and it wasn't cheesy and made sense.
When I read this poem I pictured a person running up a giant gold stairs and then
at the end they finally reach the top and realize that life is amazing.
Awesome Job!
Keep up the good work.

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Amazing story!
I loved the beginning part It really grabbed my attention.
Your descriptions were so well executed, I was able to imagine the prince in my mind.
This story made me think about all the hardships knights go threw for their masters/kings.
Even though the knight was clearly dieing him came to his master/king's side with glee.
Great Job!
Keep up the excellent work.
I have no Idea who gave u 3 stars your piece deserves more than that.

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of Love Haiku  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Nice poem while I was reading it reminding me of a flower growing and love is like the sun that nurtures the flower and helps it grow.
Good Job
Keep up the good work. :D I would appreciate it if you would take a look at my work as well.
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Review of Bitter Words  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent Poem!
Even though it was short I felt like it was very influential and meaningful.
I loved how you used as little words as possible to tell the story of your poem.
I thought it was very unique to tell the story by using just details of emotions.
I thought that was very creative.
Spectacular Job!
Keep up the amazing work!
5 STARS! :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
and you can message me on here and tell me what you think. You're the first person to ever read it after I revised it.
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Review of Keep on Wishin’  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Wonderful Poem!
It was very positive and inspiring to read.
The words you used flowed together well.
I loved the way you told a story with the rhyme.
People can do anything they want if they just have
the guts to try and believe in themselves is what I got out of this poem.
Outstanding Job!
Reading this poem made me smile.
Keep up the great work! :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of A Father  Open in new Window.
Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Amazing Poem!
It had lots of emotion.
I could sense that the person in the poem wants to be a good father.
But for some reason at the end I felt like he lost hope.
I think at the end you were trying to say a father can only do so much, I suppose. (tell me if i'm right)
But I felt like you could have wrote that on a more positive note.
To me it came across as a fathers work is never enough or something along those lines.
I'm not too good with grammar and punctuation.
Everything seems to be spelled correctly and it wasn't difficult for me to read so I think your fine in that area.
Wonderful Job!
Keep up the good work! :D

I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works. I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of Promise  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Awesome little poem!
Even though it was short the words you put in
made it very memorable and insightful.
I can really relate to this poem.
People dream about their lovers all the time.
Fantastic Job!
Keep up the good work! :D
I would really appreciate it if you could review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the items that are visible in my port are not fit for a honest review. So I posted my story on another writing site until I get it back because I'm still writing and would love to have feedback on my new works.I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of Life's Happiness  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Amazing POEM!
This poem is so beautiful and romantic.
I could really feel like I can relate to this poem because it speaks the truth.
I loved every second of this poem.
You had an excellent word choice, everything fit together perfectly.
my favorite part was : "But dreaming and wishing alone do not work
And mistakes once made must remain
Man must take action, pursue his desires
If he truly, his life, wants to change"
Spectacular Job!
Keep up the awesome work!
I can't believe only 3 people have reviewed this so far.
5 STARS! FOR BEING WONDERFUL! :D
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Review of Talitha Koum  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Great Poem!
I loved how you used lots of details.
I also like how you used the poem to tell a story.
Though I'm not completely sure what's actually going on.
I pictured a girl standing on a bus stop taking to a friendly stranger or she talking about her surroundings. '
Good Job!
Keep up the amazing work! :D
I found out another way for people to read my story until i get my membership back.
I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of Don't you  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Fantastic poem!
I loved every minute of it.
This poem really spoke to my heart.
I loved how I could really relate to it.
Everyone wants to have a special someone like that.
I could also feel the emotion in this poem.
I also liked how all the words didn't rhyme.
I liked how you ended every other sentence in a question it added character to the poem.
Awesome Job!
Keep up the excellent work! :D
I found out another way for people to read my story until i get my membership back.
I would like you to review this story here's the link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2973986/1/My_Best_Fr...
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Review of You Wish!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Awesome story!
I wished you had added a little bit more too it though.
The story does seem like a full chapter but i feel like you could have added more.
Maybe you should have added more details in stuff like that. Explain to us what her childish room looks like or things like that.
I would also like to know why her parents haven't been in her life so much. I don't understand why she needs a bf to hang out with and ask her if shes okay has this girl ever heard of friends? lol just kidding.
I really enjoyed reading you story and can't wait to read the rest.
I'm not sure if its true or not but people tell me your supposed to space out the lines when a person is saying something.
For example:
“No?”

“No.”

The teens face reddened in frustration as her lower lip pouched out into a childish pout.
“ But daddy!”

“ I said no and that’s final!”

The tired man had made up his mind and he wouldn’t here anymore of his daughter’s constant whining. That was his wife’s job. Flicking his wrist in dismissal, he turned his attention back to his paper. Miller tossed her head full of mocha locks indignantly. Her father was always a pain when it came to listening to his daughter. He wasn’t the dependable one.

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Review by Mrs. Populatery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a fantastic story!
I have nothing to even say about it.
I like everything the way it is, I really can't wait to see what happens next in this story. I loved the way you explained everything with some much voice a character. I could actually even see myself in the main character. I also think how also it is that its the end of the first chapter and I still don't know the main character. I also wasn't expecting the title not to be about the main character, amazing twist.
I'm not really good with grammar and punctuation but everything looked fine to me I didn't have any problems reading it.
Keep up the excellent work!
I can't wait to see what happens next.

I would ask you to review my work as well but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories that are in my port aren't fit to be reviewed. So have a nice day! :D
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