Overall I really liked your story. I felt like too many adjectives made it a little bit tough to read at points. That is not a bad thing at all. Personally, I enjoy a challenging read. If that was your intent ^5. If not, my advice to you would be to take some out because some people lose interest when they have to concentrate.
My favorite part: tranquility of a gently drifting feather cascading alongside a whispering dream.
...that flows together beautifully.
I only reviewed this because you asked for opinions, and maybe you will review mine in return with honesty.
Great work! I would like to read more.
p.s. I don't know what these gift points are, but i have a lot of them. Here, take some.
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