I like it... I like that fact that with sparse words, you are able to bring the writer to the location in question...Sea gulls sound a shrill decree
As an auburn sunset passed....
I do think, however, that the idea could have been devoloped a little farther in the last two stanzas.. They seemed a little... I don't know.. Stale, maybe... All in all though, I really liked it and will read more of your writing.
Michael
PS, Check out F*** You, if you like poems on the other end of the love spectrum... It does have harsh language, though, so be aware...
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