Boy that fridge sounds super busy and might need to be cleaned. Or maybe those mushrooms you put on your pizza weren't the ones you thought they were. Either way the imagery is great and the flow is different(I read it three times), keep it up.
Good job on the creepy factor. I'm being one hundred percent honest, by the end of it I had a big grin. I haven't read a horror story that creeped me out in a long time, but that right there...yeah. I also like how it wasn't overly graphic and yet is bit more horrifying.
I feel that I connected with the first two lines "Only the lonely can know, What it is to be alone", because it's true. And I imagine that some older guys will connect with it better than I did, those who's kids have grown and have had their own families and who's kids may not appreciate their grandfather. And maybe their kids don't have the time for him anymore because of work and family life. I imagine that could become one lonely existence, especially if his wife past before him. To have all of those memories only to be practically forgotten must be heavy.
Of the few reviews I've done this is one that I can truly connect with. My whole life I've had to put on a mask or two, a smile here or there. The whole while resenting people because they didn't know the real me, nor did they seem to care. It hurt a lot and I too became lost in past transgressions and self doubt. But as I get older I've come to know who I am and what I want from this existence. Realizing that it doesn't matter what they have to say or think because I am beholden to none but myself. And if I wanted existence to be what I envisioned it to be then I had to make it so. It's a struggle everyday to maintain this frame of mind but at the end of the day I feel better knowing that I was the one who lived today, I was the one who got up and went to work today, and the one who paid my bills. By casting aside thoughts of responsibility for others I gained responsibility for myself, I gained freedom. I may not know you personally but I do know the struggle you go through and believe me, once you put your foot down and raise your head up high the world will begin to become yours.
Not sure how to review an essay, let alone this one. I do know that everything in your essay reminds me of a man named Bill Hicks. Bill Hicks was a stand up comedian during the late eighties and early nineties, but despite that fact he brought to light some very real topics. Even thirty plus years later those topics are still prevalent in America today. I recommend to anyone and everyone, right or left, give him a listen to.
Well...there's that. I like what you've done here. There's no forgiveness, no apologetic bully(ies) atoning for his(their) past transgressions. Just pure and simple revenge👍.
I rather enjoyed this one, simple yet refined. You nailed the imagery. I have a pretty good imagination and this was like candy for it. I found myself smiling at the end, thank you.
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