You might want to continue to refine this. Proofread and check for punctuation. "With the dawn of a new day," for example, is an incomplete sentence. Maybe try reading it aloud to see where it needs work. Possibly re-structure it into two stanzas of equal length, one beginning with "Death" and the other, "Life." Just a suggestion. I particularly like how death is portrayed as a new kind of "life."
Well written for the most part, but not exactly the type of thing that I would read personally. Almost seems kind of like the beginning of some strange sitcom. Keep writing.
You can obviously write very well. I read this entire play on my cell phone. If your writing was this good over ten years ago then you must be published by now. Some of the second half seemed to kind of drag on a bit and could be cut down and condensed, but you have talent. Love can indeed be a "volatile phenomenon." I myself have often said that there is no greater pain than the pain of love.
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