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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very moving lyrics! I would love to hear it put to music to see how it flows and feels. You discuss many critical issues in our society.

This is my favorite lyric!
"It's only a handful of dreams,
But my heart weeps and screams,
For the future of our youth
To know these things as truth."

What does the future hold for our youths?

Very nicely done. Best wishes,
trafick
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hooah! Powerful words that speak the truth about us veterans. Thank you for serving our country bravely and honorably. Where would this country be without us veterans?

God Bless you,
Korri US Army Disabled Vet



Have you forgotten what happened on 9-11-01? I will NEVER FORGET!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It was a good attempt at writing poetry. I find that the stanzas are choppy; they don't seem to flow along. Have you written poetry a lot? It is one of my favorite genres. This poem needs a little rhythm to it to make it a piece that is smooth to read.

Good luck with your contest!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,

Sometimes short and sweet are the way to go. A very descriptive poem and wonderful tribute to your wife. I don't see any grammatical or spelling troubles. Nicely done.

Keep on writing,
best wishes,
trafick

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very nice start but I have this feeling of wanting more. This has the potential to be an excellent poem. Add more to it... be more descriptive...

Every person you meet has a story to tell,
a tale of their own personal hell.

What is the story? the personal hell?

This feels like a piece written with emotions. Use those emotions to expand on this poem. Give the reader insight into the struggle and the pain.

that determinsdetermines whether your soul will heal

Hopefully this review will be helpful to you. Overall, I like it... just needs some "tweaking" *Smile*

Best wishes,
trafick
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nicely done. Loved the rhyming and the flow of it. Maybe a bit on the short side... but sometimes short and sweet is the way to be.

Keep on writing. Best wishes,
trafick
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Review of You can  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love it! What a great picture to use. Very colorful and I love the saying, "Who Can? You Can!!!" coming from a Toucan. Nice job!

best wishes,
trafick
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Smokey is very cute! Must be very hungry. I love the purple collar. Thank you for sharing the photo. I have ferrets. Would love a cat but hubby says he is allergic to them, but I know he just hates them *Frown*

The picture itself is good. If you want it to really stand out, though, try putting a different color down under the dish... a towel or sheet. To make it stand out more.

best wishes,
trafick
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Review of Interactive Stuff  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Cool folder set up with your polls. I looked at each of the poll and survey in it. They were fun to do.

Best wishes,
trafick
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Fun activity. Thank you for running it. Have a very interesting storyline working on it.

Best wishes,
trafick
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