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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
With the words I chose to put in the madlib, the story was hilarious.

Only bad choice of words for me was selecting a body part -eyes (plural).

Great idea for laughs. You could really sell this to a website.

Warm Regards ,
Ujjwal Dey
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Nobody will like it very much (HeHeHe you know what I mean)

- Interesting way to look at a child's understanding of our words.

- Nobody could really be a comic strip

- The child comes out as cute though I could predict paranoid schizophrenia in his near future : D

- Nobody is educating the poor kid - is this a real life experience?
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Ferry ride to growing up :)

- Concise and to the point

- Emoional and somehing most people can relate to

- Description of child's reaction to a real boat is brilliant and best part of the story (though your point was about the child understanding his world)

- Would fit into most magazines on Parenthood and most likely , Reader's Digest.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Attack of the Cancerous Asbestos :)

The article is informative and deals with asbestos as the main link to the dreaded Mesothelioma in the world today and in future.

The detailed list of Sources allow the reader to see what the author has seen.

Recounting 9/11 tragedy and Iraq War further brings in the mood of doom as it connects well to the article about a fatal illness. (2 thumbs up)

The lines:
"Exposure of as little as one or two months can result in Mesothelioma 30 or 40 years later."
are scaring the hell out of me cause I don't know and can' recall where and when I could have been exposed.


You could add case examples to show where and how we could innocenly expose ourselves to the contamination in the modern ea.

The article looks professionally edied because of the subtitles and breaks between diferent angles to the story. It could get picked up easily by any health or commercial/industry magazine/journal.

Best of Luck

Regards,
Ujjwal Dey (2write)
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