Wow what a scorpion of a tale, with a poisoned barb at the end no less. While I have been desperate for work in my life before, I don't know if I could go that far to prove I am the best woman for the job. I am definitely going to check out your other work. Please keep on writing!!!!
I loved this!!!! Very well done. I must admit that you had me expecting some sort of fight. Very nicely done with the prompt and only 300 words to use it. You definately have a FLASH talent. I will be reading some of your other work. Keep writing
Thank you for letting me read this. You have a gift for injecting emotion into your writing this gives a special dimension to your characters. You have chosen something that is considered rather cliche and turned it into something new and fresh that leaves me thinking. I enjoyed this very much and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you for posting this poem. I have a lot of respect for those that choose poetry as their craft. When I score poetry I go according to how it makes me feel. This left me almost crying with sympathy for the poor woman trapped in such a loveless marriage. Poetry is all about emotion. keep writing I am looking forward to reading more.
This short story was quite enjoyable. I enjoyed the way that you built up the suspense and you give the reader a sense of the frustration that your character is going through. The only criticism that I can give you is that at stages it seemed to drag a little bit. I hope that you will keep up the good work and I will definitely be keeping an eye out for your pieces.
A very sweet poem. I enjoyed the emotions that it invoked in me. I can feel a certain amount of passion. I read poetry to feel something of what the poet is trying to tell me. The rhythm of the poem was quite pleasing. Poetry is not any easy craft to master and I take my hat off to those brave souls that master the craft. keep it up I will be looking at your work.
Thank you for this piece. This is so real. this brought huge emotion out in me. While the poem is heartbreaking it is so beautiful and so full of hope. It sums up so many of the elements of what people have to deal with during the terminal illness or of a person close to them. I would hazard a guess that this is something that you have gone through your self? Please keep writing and keep your writing as real as the piece that you have posted here. God has gifted you, use the gift!!!!
Thank you for posting this piece. This piece makes me feel as if I have been disappointed. It drew me in immediately, I read it greedily and then it was over - I felt robbed. I really wish that there had been more of it. Your use of contrast was very good. This brought the piece to life. Keep an eye on your grammar. What I suggest which you can use or not use is to read through the piece out loud or even better get someone to read it out to you. This helps yo to correct any grammar issues and also make sure that it flows smoothly. Please keep up the hard work, you have a lot of talent and I look forward to reading more of your work
Thank you for putting your work out where we can all see and enjoy it. I appreciate the effort that you have put into your work. Your ideas are very good and I could definitely see what you wanted me to see. You have created a beautiful world. What I did notice was that you need to refine your writing very slightly so that it flows more smoothly. My suggestion which you can take or leave is to read the piece out lout and see if it rolls off the tongue or if it stutters. Even better get some one else to read it and make changes as they go along. This makes a huge difference. Please keep it up I am looking forward to reading more of your work.
I think you have alot of potential. You describe things very well and give a real sense of being in the piece. Sometimes a writer can lose himself in the setting and slow the story down a bit. I enjoyed what I read and would love to read some more of it. I really hope that this helps.
Vicky
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