Hi,
I love the rhyme and rhythm of this poem, mainly. It reads so well that I decided to review the same.
"You sowed a seed of love
And asked for nothing in return"
I had the good fortune of meeting such inspiring and generous people in my life as well.
They are part of me too.
Yes, there are people to whom we owe a lot. They remain in memory forever, making the heart glow whenever remembered. Even when they are not by our side, they continue to spread positive awareness, kindling hope and good will.
This is a perfectly composed poem. It flows well with appealing imagery.
This free style poem expresses poet's feelings on how the world changed after love at first sight.
It is true that adrenalin flows fast and mind gets confused somewhat at the onslaught of emotions.
"Our eyes met, the music slowed,
Blood was pounding so loud in my ears"
It seems to be an earth moving and life changing moment for the poet, which is well conveyed through apt choices of words.
Emotions are confounding and there are moments, when time stands still.
It looks as though there is a story behind the poem, which is not completely conveyed.
"Tomorrow, our eyes will meet again,
And I will die at that exact moment."
This sounds like a serenade to night. The poet's love for the night descending on the world covered in a black coat accompanied by clear skies and twinkling stars comes to fore in this rhyming verse.
"Darkness and starlight, in perfect unity;"
It is a unique phenomenon wherein dark and light meet with accord. They complement each other.
The air of anticipation spreads through the sky as night advances to a welcoming dawn.
In nature every element is gloriously placed.
This nature poem has enhanced charm due to perfect rhyme and rhythm.
This form poem has an appealing content as well.
While spring rain softens the mother's grave with green grass, the passage of time soothes the person whose heart is now tender and no longer filled with sorrow and grief of loss.
The comparison between nature's touch and that of time is convincing.
A new beginning is sought and found "finally."
Both stanzas sync well with the flow of the poem.
They have nature at the core and things soften and solace found at her tender touch.
Images of nature are impressive and visual enough for the reader.
Extremes are convincingly placed in this nice children's poem.
"a mouse sleeping with cheetahs
frogs chasing elephants"
The forest is a place of fascinating scenes. For me, the trees and whispering leaves and waterfalls laughing down the mountain slops and the big rising sun benevolently smiling down on a sleepy world are enough wonders of nature,.
You have the fauna that lurk in the forest unveiling an interesting scenario. This shows that out in nature, there is nothing that "gets boring." It is just the opposite.
Short sweet stanzas surely attract the kid reading it.
There is something sinister about this house seen at night "A warm, cunning light,"
The description of the cold night and the slick grass evoke a scene of no beauty only a kind of apprehension. The house is not welcoming but the contrary is felt by the person approaching it.
"An eerie coldness,
shoots down my spine,"
Imagery is the spine of this rhythmic verse. Each single stanza offers a bevy of word pictures. Images convey not only the physical appearance of the house in view, but also the feelings it brings to surface.
Indeed, some houses turn us away. Hardly welcoming.
It is a wonderful narration of the affinity you have with mother nature, my own friend as well.
Lake Lanier is a place of wonder where you can see things of nature moving about with incredible freedom and beauty.
The six hundred pictures in which you captured the various images of bird life assure me of your overwhelming love of calm and peaceful surroundings of the lake.
"I will never forget this experience. I believe it brought some healing to my aching heart and some beauty that touched my soul."
I cannot agree more. Whenever I have a chance to be in a place where nature blooms, at least for a few hours, I return home with the same kind of feelings you have mentioned above.
Secrets could be malevolent and best forgotten in entirety. Not hidden in the closet as well.
A secret could be a mystery, an enigma or a puzzle. Something that is hidden for some reason.
This poem, however, tells a that secrets could be positive and cause a relationship to bloom and last for long. It is a new definition as far as my understanding goes.
"They should be like roses growing among thistles
Swaying in the wind, but never whistles."
I found this rhythmic verse in your fascinating portfolio. Couldn't resist a review, so here it is as much as my humble self could perceive.
The main focus in this well conceived poem, as you have stated is on "shadows". The symbolic use of the term had me in its grip.
"Echoes of times past ripple
......
whispering to my soul."
The first line and stanza hooked me for good. You have a unique way of using metaphor and symbol.
Indeed certain shadows linger try as we might to erase them. The events of the past flash on the mind's eye without much effort, bringing fresh emotions to the surface, some, outside of us.
The last line is suggestive of memories of a long time ago in the poet's life.
Catching my attention are the phrases,
"faint impression"
"a vague sense of recognition,"
"foggy recollection of times long gone--"
not remembered,"
Yes, we cannot be just observes of climate change, global warming and environmental pollution. Thought the power to deal with these issues rests with efficient governmental agencies, as members of society, everyone has to do his or her bit.
For example, when people started dumping rubbish by the roadside despite the dumpster near by, I started objecting to it. Despite opposition they had to stop the bad practice. Bad habits are difficult to erase.
Now the spot is clean and with no trace of dumping. What matters is how much we are committed to clean up the act. The desire to keep the roads clean certainly pays off if the mind is bent on it.
The same commitment is necessary to contain climate change as well. Planting the trees is one way to bring coolness to our environment.
Yes, everyone can do a lot to make life more comfortable and cool.
I find this article quite frank and realistic. You are right about being apologetic to various persons, family and friends for being what we are.
Another important stigma attached to self is to feel guilty about certain events or actions. Ruled by the situations and having no one to sincerely offer advice or guidance, we do commit certain mistakes. However, I find many of these "mistakes" bring benefits to those concerned. So, what I am saying is acting according to one's conscience is not being guilty, so therefore, no reason to be apologetic about anything done in all honesty.
"Yes, you have nothing to apologize for."
This write up made me turn the searchlight inwards and find answers to some unsolved questions such as "have I done anything wrong?" and so on.
I appreciate your frank admission of enjoying a positive life.
It is true that for some it might look dull without spark. But they know not of the sparkle within.
“Yet beauty is in the eye
of the beholder.”
Well said.
Simple pleasures such as enjoying changes in nature, belief in self, God and the society, smiles that fill with pleasure, speedy passage of time in reading, writing or singing make myday flow with ease and joy.
And, yes, you are right about “simple pleasures” making a positive impact on life.
Hi Brittany!
this feeling of incompleteness and desire to change life style and motives to live for, again and again, are the makings of an unsteady thought process and lack of belief and commitment.
"My happiness flies with the changing styles and seasons."
This is a common complaint from my own friends. Wanting to do something new on a daily basis is not a problem if you find ways to do it. For that, we need to think and plan the day with focus on our interests.
If nature becomes bored with her daily routine we wouldn't be here to enjoy the days, which in my opinion are gifts from God.
Living in comfort("Comfortable life.") should offer several opportunities to knock on and feel fulfilled if you deliver.
I like this verse which to me sounds like a poem from stream of consciousness. It is also a way to know what goes on in our mind and think of ways to find a way out of chaos.
Husband's concern for his wife is overwhelming. The beginning is sound and the middle is fine too.
But the end is confusing.
I can't see who actually broke in broad day light, and what did the neighbor see and reported it to the police. The neighbor is not seen when the police called.
There is a reason for Greg to feel so worried about his pregnant wife.
You are so right about the thrill of cycling. I learnt it as an adult and experienced all those emotions you have mentioned. Keeping balance, knowing how to pedal or brake properly gave me a sense of freedom and achievement.
"Cycling will mean suffering. You will face your physical limits."
This is exactly how I felt about and thought of stopping my bicycle riding half way. But people were helpful in encouraging and tolerating my sudden swerves and brakes.
I loved the way you have injected the example of the legendary Robert Falcon Scott's adventure to the South Pole into the story.
True that cycling can be romantic in a unique way.
I enjoyed this non fiction story. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on cycling.
The note above, contains precious lines on faith's strength.
It comes from within and it fears none.
Faith has no enemies, only believers.
Faith is the key to success and it is a stepping stone to discover contentment and love.
The personification of faith and the weaknesses, is winsome.
"Fear, Anxiety, Grief and Gloom speed out into the night."
It runs like a story and the story can be written using human characters in their roles.
A fine allegory that wins my heart. What is life without faith? An empty shell, to say the least.
Confidence and courage behind the writers words reach out, clear and convincing.
All we want is love, all we need is love, for love can bring unimagined pleasure to soul and spirit.
Unconditional love as mentioned above ( "where they are not mine but I am theirs,") is nothing short of a miracle in this "God forsaken world." That in itself shows the rare feeling, which is verily a gift bestowed on us by a caring God.
Love is truly divine when you care for others' happiness without craving material benefits such as "money, riches and gold".
Poet's words make me hope for a world made of persons without malice, greed and coveting.
Imagery and sentiments expressed in the above free style poem win applause.
But this situation realized in covid times when people suffered from a dire lack of daily provisions.
Almost all the shelves were empty and the store owner couldn't meet the demand. Frustration was writ large on the faces of the buyers and situation became desperate.
"the poor man stood
with a bowed head
till someone yelled
"Hey! Where's the bread?"
You have depicted the scene so realistically that it unfolded before my mind's eyes with ease.
Short of closing the store, he couldn't help the situation. There are so many wheels to turn smoothly, behind the screen to let the bread and drinks come to the stalls.
Not everyday goes without impediments.
Wonderful free style poem on a particularly chaotic day at the store.
Hats off to your unconditional love. It’s commendable that you find “No one owns a man”.
Usually, jealousy and envy play an important role when a man goes to seek favours elsewhere.
However, it’s a wise decision to be dispassionate and objective regarding relationship with man. It leaves no scars of failure and disillusion.
Passion without possession is hard to achieve.
Will such love last forever? I wonder.
Short and sincere, this verse different, yet appealing.
Imagery is felt and the flow is spontaneous.
Crisp and short this traditional poem shows our existential struggle, caught in the wheel of time. Past being buried and future being unknown, to live in the present seems the best option.
It’s an appealing choice because if I could do anything to live with freedom, it’s possible only in the present.
I find this thought of not wasting time and energy either bogged by past memories or worrying about an unclear future, extremely helpful and positive.
This poem is a winner at many levels. Rhyme and rhythm, word choices and line length, title and theme, image and symbol: an unending list of merit points.
Well, my definition of success is listening and remembering good things, writers like you utter.
It is an experience that makes me inspired at finding something new to think about or write about.
You are right in regard to defining success as something purely dependent on personal point of view. We all have a unique way of measuring success.
"It can be as small as brushing your teeth in the night and morning to creating the next book of the century.'
It reads like a casually written piece of prose, yet it has a relevant topic. I appreciate that.
I find you painting a visual dream of love and romance, which is also a reality.
The story has a single theme of unmitigated love. I hope it lasted forever.
Imagery used is pretty visual and the sense of touch is also too used a lot.
Edit-
" I except.
(I accept)
I find the same items served in breakfast are used at lunch too. I suggest a variation of items so they enjoy and appreciate their mid day meal better.
The significance of Christmas Night is well brought out in this acrostic poem. Silver Bells show the jubilant mood when the king was born in a stable. The holy moment was announced by the star of the night to a whole new world. Mary's little boy Jesus too is referred here as the star of the night.
This flowing verse describes the events of the night with visual impact.
Rejoicing the birth of Jesus were the wise men and angels in Heaven singing "Joy to the world."
I appreciate the religious fervor shown in this verse.
A spiritual poem.
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