Nice story. Some of our most memorable experiences come not from planning, but almost by accident. Like good wine fond memories only get better with age.
While much of the following may be seen as nothing more than a difference in style I try to include my reasoning with each comment. In the end these are simply my opinions. Only you know how to write your story.
But there are nights like tonight that the hubby wants to just get out of the house, especially when the weather is hot. Tonight was one of those nights, what we had planned was not what we had in store.
But there are nights like tonight… / Tonight was one of those nights… (redundant)
…what we had planned was not what we had in store. (Seems to be out of order since it comes before what is normal. The last sentence “Little did I know…” negates the need for the phrase. To be clearer it would be more like: …what we had planned was not what was in store for us. This is somewhat clumsy and you did get the ice cream. I would not include it.)
Normally, my hubby and me would go for a motorcycle ride…
Normally, my hubby would go for a motorcycle ride…
Normally, me would go for a motorcycle ride…
Normally, my hubby and I would go for a motorcycle ride…
Rather minor point: Normal and normally are not used often so when both appear in the same paragraph they stick out just a tad. I would change one.
Actually, I would change it to: Usually, we would go for a motorcycle ride… (Hubby is used a lot. I would change "hubby and I" to "we" in this spot.)
School nights / there are nights / those nights / tonight (I would try to mix it up a little, not use as many nights.)
Only an example:
Normal school nights, we have homework, dinner, then it’s bath time. But there are evenings that the hubby just wants to get out of the house, especially when the weather is hot. Tonight was one of those nights. Usually, we would go for a motorcycle ride or take the vette out to the country, however, on this night, I wanted ice cream, to be specific, a banana split. Little did I know this was one banana split that I would be talking about for days.
… they are totally grown and out of the house, well all but the little one who is only seven but the other two seventeen and fifteen are slipping out of our hands… (I would remove the first “but” and "all." There is the little one and the other two.)
… they are totally grown and out of the house, well, the little one is only seven, but the other two, seventeen and fifteen, are slipping out of our hands…
Only did we remember why we don’t take all the girls at once to do anything together after we were almost there. (I got a little lost in this sentence.)
We were almost there before we remembered why we don’t take all the girls at once to do anything together. (We and all the girls implies togetherness. I would leave out "together" but maybe that's just me.)
“Yea this was a great idea!” (“Yeah, this was a great idea!”) Note *1,*2
…acting like they would never be any more then strangers… (any more than strangers) Note *1
‘Yea this was a great idea!’ was the last thing the girls heard… (Yea – Yeah) Note *1,*2
(yea best age to me) (This seems to be "yeah" but could, I guess, be "yay.") Note *1,*2
The laughter and light heartiness of the simple trip to the DQ on a March night on the porch turned out to be magical.
(light heartiness? Do you mean "lightheartedness?") (...the simple trip to the DQ on the porch... Seems to say: The laughter and lightheartedness of the simple trip to the DQ on a March night and later on the porch turned out to be magical.)
Note *1 - (Borrowed from Stephanie Grace's April 11 Noticing Newbies newsletter: Glitches and Twitches)
Yea is the opposite of nay and represents a positive or supportive (yes) vote.
Yeah is a friendly, informal way of saying 'yes'. It is pronounced as y-AH (Pretend you're a New Yorker and just say pair, rare, care, etc... That's how you say 'yeah').
Yay is used to express excitement or in such phrase as 'I was yay big at the time'.
Then: This refers to TIME and time only. We had ice cream and then Matt threw up on Joe.
Than: This compares two things. I am smarter than Matt. That shirt is brighter than the sun. Joe's puke smelled worse than Matt's sweaty T-shirt.
Note *2
While I know what you mean and by definition "yea" can be used, I think Stephanie makes good points.
More formally: "Yes, I am OK with that."
Less formally: "Yeah, I'm OK with that." I hear: "Yeh," not "Yaa."
Doggone, it's been a long time since I've had a banana split. Come to think of it, it was at a DQ, when my girls were little.
Thanks for the read.
Wally
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