Kashtien James's (weepingdusk) Reviews

Kashtien James

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58 Total Reviews Given

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#3419559

Review of wormwood.

Review by Kashtien James

Rated: E

| (4.5)

This piece was an absolute exceptional read! Firstly, thank you for sharing.

I especially loved the last two lines:
but if she knew how matter transforms itself
she'd know she changed the atmosphere forever.

They are two very powerful lines, to flow nicely with a powerful poem.

My only suggestion would be to capitalize the first letter of every line. It would make the piece much cleaner looking.

Keep writing!

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#3390144

Review of Bicycle Lady

Review by Kashtien James

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I found this poem slightly repetitive in a unenjoyable way, but I enjoyed the underlying story and the message. You have successfully created a character without actually naming or introducing them.

This short piece would definitely make a much better longer story. That is my only thought of how to improve it. Expanding on these nonexistant characters, along with clarifying the identity of the existing character, would definitely keep me intrigued and interested.

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#3322447

Review of Hope to fly

Review by Kashtien James

Rated: E

| (4.0)

I really love the concept of this short piece. Really insightful, and kind of slightly creepy to think that one person could become so deranged and not realize it. I know that this does happen but to be put so beautifully is a concept all on it's own.

{Read something of mine if you get a chance? :D}

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#3318390

Review of Meeting Him

Review by Kashtien James

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hahahaha! Sorry. I'm laughing so hard. Started off like a victorian romance or Jane Austen type, then the mention of AIM! Oh my God, I love this piece. Completely. And so true in today's society. You have talent. Keep it up!

{Check out my statics if you have a chance?} Thanks.

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#3318357

Review of Ode to the Oriental Empress

Review by Kashtien James

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Just to get this out there first: I am found to be newly in love with this piece. It says enough when a man can have feelings so great and actually express them, but when theey can write as well? And with such powerful words? Keep writing. Trust me - the world of romance needs you and this dark/romance intrigue.

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#3318348

Review of Almost Eighteen

Review by Kashtien James

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

Two thumbs up! I really like this piece. Interesting how it came out of a fight with your father. LOL Some things are blessings in disguise, I guess.

{Check out my static pieces if you hve a chnace. :D Thanks!}

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#3317804

Review of Jumping

Review by Kashtien James

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Interesting perspective... Great use of adjectives. Bravo!