I know you already know what I'm going to say! This is beautiful! I can't find other words. You write from the heart, like I've said a million of times before, and that makes your writings so beautiful, and full of feelings. Full of love in every verse. This piece is GREAT!
Spelling
As before, none spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them. The description let us know what we will read about, so it's fine to use it there, and it prepares us for all that you wrote.
Keep on writing from the heart. I can't find other words to tell you, other than that. Amazing!
All that you wrote is totally true. The title is perfect and it's all true. Writen again from the heart, and with honesty in every line. You did a beautiful job. I love the ending!
Spelling
I did my best again, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them! I love that title, like I said before. It's true. There should be no war. No more children need to die.
WOW! This is another beautiful poem. The love you feel for your husband, again is felt in every line you wrote. It's amazing how much you love him, and how your love have survived for so long. That's not a thing that unfortunatedly we see everyday, and in this time. It would be a blessing if every couple in the world would love each other like that. Many children, and problems in the adulthood would be resolved if all the couples in the world would love like that, and gave the example to others. Don't you think?
Great job! Beautiful, and writen from the heart!
Spelling
I did my best again, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them. Great job!
Keep on writing from the heart, that everytime that you do that, beautiful words fill the page.
Take care!
Winnie
This is a beautiful poem, bull of inspiration and uplifting. Great job! I love every verse of it, and also the rhyme you added. It's true, we HAVE to let God enter in! Great verse! I also love the ending!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
I like the title, is a good choice. About the description, you should add a little of what's the poem all about, so it can capture the eye of the reader easily. It's just a little suggestion for improvement. You did a great job with the poem!
Take care and keep on writing such beautiful poems!
Winnie
This is a great poem. The love for your land, is beautiful. It can be felt in every line that you wrote. Great job! I also like the rhyme you added to the poem.
Spelling
I did my best again, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them! The description is a good choice, because it relates with what you wrote about, and it can paint a picture. Good job!
This is a good poem. Full of strong emotions, and anger. You never let us know why all this happened. They are just your feelings and emotions towards all that. Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
I like the title. You should capitalize it, (upper case) and about the description, you should add something that will capture the eye of the reader, that way we'll want to read it instantly. What you added, can be written as an author's note in the body of the item. You added that the poem is Dark. For me it's not dark, it's just a strong poem, with strong emotions, and anger. It's sad, and emotional, but is not a dark poem. It's just my opinion. You did a good job!
Suggestions
Another suggestion is that you should use: . , ! ?, etc, and also upper cases where they are needed. That way it will help with the flow, will look good, and we as readers can understand it better.
Take care and keep on writing. You did a good job!
WOW! This is a emotional piece. You brought tears to my eyes. I love every verse of it, because it's kind of a little story, you can SEE it all happening. You managed that to happen, with the words you choosed, and with the flow. Easy to understand from begining to an end, and the emotions are incredible. Beautiful ending. I like that note at the end of it. I'm so sorry that he died. You did all you could, always remember that. God is the one, like you said in the poem, who knows when, and who decides. Beautiful work.
Spelling
No spelling errors. well done!
Title/Description
Great choice for title, and the description is a good one, it can capture the eye of the reader. Good job!
Keep on writing such beautiful items writen from the heart!
Full of anger. I think that's not the right word, but it's full of a feeling close to anger. I can't find the right work right now. Sometimes my Spanish gets in the way . I like it, it was writen with honesty, and kind of letting out your anger/feelings at the time. Your load (stress). Thanks for the note at the end, that way we understand the purpose/reason of the item, and the feeling you portray in it. Good luck!!!
Spelling
Again I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
It's a good choice for both of them. The description fits what the poem is all about, and it makes us wonder, and read it.
Keep on writing, and take care!
Good luck again!
Winnie
This is a sad poem. I like the intro, and the ending too. It kind of change the mood, from beginning to an end. I like the words you used through the poem and the mood you created. Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Just one thing. I don't know what "bereaved" means (Spanish Speaker, from Puerto Rico) I took a look at my dictionary, but the word doesn't appear I can imagine the meaning of it, because of what you say in the sentence, but I'm not sure, so if you can, please let me know, I would like to learn.
Title/Description
Great choices for both of them. This time I like your description, this is what I'm talking about. It can capture the eye of the reader easily, because you gave us something to think about. We wonder: What? Why she did that? and we run to see. Great job!
Another beautiful poem. Full of emotions, and very sad, because it talks about what happened. I like the rhyme you used through all the poem. You did a beautiful job!
Spelling
I did my best, and again I didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them. Even thou the description can be put as an author's note, it's a good choice for this item. Well done!
This is another great poem. Beautiful, and also written from the heart. The love for your for him, is so strong that it can be felt in every line you wrote in the poem. Beautiful!
Spelling
I did my best and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice for a title, and the same thing about the description, you can add that as an authors note, and just add a verse, or something about what the poem is all about. Just to catch the eye of the reader easily.
{e;note1} Keep on writing from the heart!
Take care!
Winnie
This is a great poem. Very positive message. I like all the questions you used on the poem. I also like that part where you say that all the bombs stop, and the rich give the poor, and that the children ask what's hunger? Great! You wrote it from the heart, and I wish that the world one day can be as beautiful and peacefull as your item says. Great job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Great title, it resumes what the song is all about. I would love to listen to it. The message like I said before is beautiful. About the description, you should add a little more of what's the song all about, so it can capture the eye of the reader easily. Remember that you can always add such kind of description about the song, music, etc, in an Author's Note, on the body of the item. Just a little suggestions for improvement. YOu did a great job!
Take care and keep on writing, such positive, and beautiful items. Hope one day all that can be true!
You did a good job with this poem. I really like it, because it's simple, and easy to understand. It kept me reading from begining to an end, and I enjoyed the rhyme you added. Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them, the description by itself is good. Well done!
Suggestions
I think that a little suggestion for improvement would be for you to add the ./,/!/? etc, where they are needed, it will make it easier to read, and give the emotions each line needs. Just that, you did a good job!
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Overall
This is a great poem. I like the message you are portraying. That is a day that I'm sure, no one will forget. Thanks for such a great tribute for the 9/11.
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Great choices for both of them, they capture our attention, and we want to read what you wrote about for 9/11
Suggestions
A little suggestion that I have for improvement, is to replace the last 3 verses for the verses you have before them: Time for Change, time for prayer, time for peace. I think that way, the poem ending will be more powerful, and also means, that we HAVE to make a change, for good, with that peace, that we all long for. Just a little suggestion for improvement, your work is beautiful! Thanks for sharing!
Keep on writing, and have a great day and week!
Winnie
God bless you and your family!
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This is a good entry! Easy to understand from begining to an end, and also, full of emotions. Great use of words! Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice for title, but about the description, you should add a little more to capture the eye of the reader easier. Try adding a part of the acrostic, a line that you think can make them run to read it!
Thanks for your entry, and keep on writing! Have a great day, and weekend!
OMG! You brought tears to my eyes! This is beautiful, and very inspirational! Is a wonderful piece that teaches so much! Great job! I love it from begining to an end, and it's very emotional. It was written from your heart, and that's what makes it so beautiful! Well done!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
I love the title, and the description is PERFECT! It captures the eyes of the reader easily, and make us want to read it. I have to say, that my answer is No! I'm not ready yet, like you said on your poem, my son, etc. But if time comes, I'll have to do the same, take his hand. Beautiful work!!!!
Keep on writing such beautiful items for the community to bless from. Great job!
Winnie
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While you are playing Play Station..., lol HUGS!!!
Overall
I think that you did a great job with your first entry for the campfire. I like all the horror things that you added to your story. I like your character, and I like the backstory you added about him. It paints a great picture of what you want to let us know about him. Great job! I'm proud of you, honney!
Spelling
I did my best and didn't find spelling errors. Great job!
Title/Suggestion
Good choices for both of them, about the description, like I always say, you need to add a little something about your entry, to capture the eye of the reader. Just a little suggestion for improvement.
I want you to keep on writing, I know you can, you have the talent, and the imagination. You create good horror and mystery. Motivate yourself, and believe that you can. I believe in you!!!! Don't worry, you'll get that upgrade again, just work for it a little more. HUGS! Love ya!
Your Beautiful wife LOL!
Winnie
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You did a good job. Like the mood, the words you used were the right ones for the kind of picture that you want to portray. It kept me reading from begining to an end. Well written!
Spelling
My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice for a title, but for the description, maybe you can capture the eye of the reader better if you use the ending as a description. Maybe you can add: I live with a stranger, I live with myself, that way the reader will ask, what's happening, and will want to read it, it can capture their eye! Just a little suggestion for improvement.
Keep on writing, and take care!
Winnie
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You did an excellent job on painting the picture of how a little boy would feel with a divorce. This piece is very, VERY sad! I din't have words for that ending. You did a great job! You choosed the perfect words, the perfect emotions, the perfect questions at the end, that's how a boy feel about that.
Spellling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Great choices for both of them! Well done!
Keep on writing, and sharing with us your beautiful poetry!
Take care!
Winnie
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OMG, this is beautiful! It's very sad to know about the tragedy, but it's beautiful what you wrote for that person. It's true, every single line of it, it's true. God ALWAYS pull us through. Thanks for sharing, and God bless you and that family too! Great job! Just beautiful!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice for title, about the description, is a good one, but maybe you can capture the eye of the reader better, and also gave more meaning to your piece if you add: God pull us through, or will pull you through to the description. Just a little suggestion for improvement. Well done!
Keep on writing! Take care!
Winnie
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This is a great item! I like the motivation, and the way you ended the piece is great. The begining is good, because you started the item, with a simple sentence, that when you keep on writing, you notice the important of it. Great job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them! Good job!
Keep on writing my friend. You did a good jo!
Take care!
Your friend, and group Leader!
Winnie
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This is another good poem. I like how you describe the lies, the way you use the words, to gave them, some kind of life, and let us wondering, and asking the question you added. Great job! Very original work. I love this verse: The bird of hope.
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice for title, about the description, you must add something from your poem, it's a good piece, and to catch the eye of a reader, you should add something more, just a little suggestion for improvement.
Suggestions
Your poem is great, a little suggestion for improvement would be, to add the (./,/! etc.) where they are supposed to be. Just like you did with the ? you should add those, to give them the pause, and the correct pronunciation, and feeling you want to give, and also, you can add the upper cases where they are supposed to be, not always at the begining of a sentence. Just a little suggestion for improvement. Other than that, I have no other suggestions. Your piece is great!
This is a good Haiku. I LOVE haikus!
The metric is correct! Even thou I'm Spanish Speaker, I did my best and I didn't found errors.
Like the last line. Good job!
Spelling
No spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice for title, about the description, maybe you can add what you wrote on the haiku: A breath of crisp air. It can capture the eye of the reader better this way.
Suggestions
Try talking a little more about the winter, not just the actions you take on winter, but the emotions you feel, compare the winter with something else. They are just suggestions for improvement. You did a good job!
Take care and have a great night and week!
Winnie
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. I like it, it was writen with honesty, and kind of letting out your anger/feelings at the time. Your load (stress). Thanks for the note at the end, that way we understand the purpose/reason of the item, and the feeling you portray in it. Good luck!!! 
I can imagine the meaning of it, because of what you say in the sentence, but I'm not sure, so if you can, please let me know, I would like to learn. 
If you see this review, please, do the word search. It's fun to do, and doesn't take you much time. I did it in less than 5 minutes, so let's honor her work on the site, just by doing this simple game. I know she did it with a lot of love, cause she LOVED animals and always loved to do fun things for the community!!! 
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