P.J. Monroe's (wordsmithpj) Reviews

P.J. Monroe

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#3900187

Review of Five minutes

Review by P.J. Monroe

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Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)

I like it. I like the repetition. Though a couple line, because I think, you were going for the rhyme, the rhythm was off a bit. And I'd love to give you a solution, but I don't have one. I run into the same problem with my sestinas. But overall, good job.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .

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#3885997

Review of The gardener`s prayer.

Review by P.J. Monroe

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Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)

I wrote this kick-ass review and then... And then... the computer blipped out. Short version - Good wording, good rhythm, but sounds like a poem, not a prayer. Which is not to say it isn't good *which I explained well and eloquently the first time I wrote this*. But it could be polished. The joke kinda falls flat at the end. But I see the horse, I just think you have some more to chip away.

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#3882181

Review of My shed.

Review by P.J. Monroe

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Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

This is great! The bad habits our parents teach us. My Mother believed that if it was in a pile, on a table, then it was "put away." I have piles on every flat surface in my home, which means it's clean.
That's why this poem is so good. I think most people picked up a habit or two from their parents It's universal.

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#3874671

Review of The WDC Angel Army

Review by P.J. Monroe

Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (4.5)

I wanna join. If you'll have me.

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#3872858

Review of Writing in Snow

Review by P.J. Monroe

Rated: 18+ ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Very, very nice. Perfect. I've always seen snow as white paper. I'd never thought it the other way around. Remember: A blank piece of paper is G-d's way of showing you what it's like to be G-d. G-d. White paper. Mashed potatoes.

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#3871533

Review of Unfixable

Review by P.J. Monroe

Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (3.0)

Little cliche. Some good word combos. And I hate to sound like an English teacher but... You're telling, not showing. Overall, though, I see promise.

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#3867197

Review of The Sport of Bowling's "Unsafe Crackers"

Review by P.J. Monroe

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (2.5)

I felt this piece was choppy. I follow from the ball to the roll to the pins to the strike. But the explaination of the safe crackers just feels shoved in there.

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#3866509

Review of Master the Fox-Hole

Review by P.J. Monroe

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)

Some very great imargery.