Well written, this poem describes different forms of art. From the novel to the child's coloring book, the poet takes care to show different types of art. My favorite line is, "and leafs out a mighty oak". Using excellent diction such as 'assortment', 'palette' and 'deliberation', the writer paints a vivid picture. Well written. Write on!
This thought-provoking poem delves into what could be. The last two lines of the first verse show a desire for unity despite differences and choosing to view others as they truly are. showing the value of education and the hope that students will long for knowledge is the theme of the second verse. The poet wraps up the poem with the desire that we make "the world a far better place". Using good diction, some examples are, 'birthplace' and 'yearning'. Keep writing!
This poem gives honor and glory to the Lord almighty, recognizing Him both in trials and in joy. The poet shows how creation praises God with great diction like, 'effulgent', 'translucence' and 'gossamer'. The final verse hints at life beyond the grave and the hope we have in Christ. Well written! Keep writing!
This sonnet captures a more traditionally described scene. The poet utilizes superb diction such as 'meanders', rustic', and 'sultry'. Also, the writer uses alliteration in his poem. Two examples of this are, "playful pair" and "sultry summer". Well written! Keep it up!
The description in this piece produces a snapshot of a foggy day. Some examples of excellent diction in this poem are, 'tendrils', 'entwine' and 'irrigate'. My favorite line is, "The stabbing husk of carbon." Well written depiction of nature! Keep on writing!
Beautifully written, this poem of goodbye and grief gets the message across brilliantly. Comparing the past to, "a broken hourglass" is poignant description. Keep on writing.
Well crafted, this poem focuses on a partner's hands in many different aspects of their duties. I like the line, "Fine-tuned acts and well-construed knowledge,". Keep it up!
Raw and real, this poem describes child abuse perpetrated by the father. This poem switches back and forth from the child's perspective and the father's. My favorite line is, "A child's smile dead". Keep writing. Write on!
At first glance, I thought this was going to be a villanelle. However, it turned out to be a rhyming poem with repetition. My favorite line is "I inhale the fragrance of your passing,". Personifying the world, the line, "Where the world bleeds white" describes snow as blood. Well written. Write on!
This well written open form poem about memories grabbed me from the start. My favorite lines are, "As rain fell, it washed away
The memories, even the pain". Beautiful description! The end of the poem succinctly winds up the piece in one word, driving the point home. The poet's past "is almost completely" "Forgotten". The final line says it all. Sometimes there are pieces of our past which are too painful or precious to fully forget. Well done. Write on!
Haiku is a hard form to master since it is so short and succinct. I enjoyed this poem but wanted more detail. Haiku in their original format should echo nature. Although, this poem does this, in my opinion, it barely taps the surface. Keep tweaking it and adding more detail. Perhaps, "A vast empty sea,
Devoid in the navy depths
Of leaping large whales." is how I'd put it.
At the same time, your message of conservation rings true. Repetition brings it home. I just don't think Haiku is the best way for you to do that. Write on!
A poem about relationships veiled in the context of sewing, this poet uses repetition in the first stanza to grab the reader right away. Although, it's a bit dark, it's appropriate. It is deeply emotional, like the line, "I looked dead at him and I threw that blade." Well written. However, I'd encourage the poet not to utilize curse words unless it's absolutely necessary. Write on!
This caught me from the beginning. Well written yet so simple, this poem about the sheer pleasure of taking a bath hits home. My favorite line is, "I could vacation inside the cracked paint up there." Only two suggestions pop into my mind, one would be to have no spaces between your lines. The other would be to take the brackets off of the final line. Continue writing. It's quite the poem! Write on!
This poem dazzles me. From the moment I began to read the first line, the poet hooked me. The only question I have is when you use the term, 'Free Spirit'.. Are you referring to the Lord of Israel and of Christians? He is truly LORD. I loved the lines, "Soundless swimmers, gliding down,
swirling through her emerald gown." Well written. This poem is very descriptive and truly a masterpiece on Gods creation.
This piece on friends is inspiring and true. Thanks so much for sharing it! My only critique is a typo, 'Hawks sat around' in the third to last paragraph. Writing what you know is very important! Keep it up! Well written. Write on!
Wow... At first, I thought that this was fiction. It is very well written. They say, 'write what you know'. How true. The emotion in this piece touched my heart deeply. I know what it is to lose a loved one as I lost my father when I was twenty. Cancer is curse! At least we know where Charles is now.
If you keep writing pieces like this, you will be great. Are you a published author? I found nothing wrong with this piece. Keep one producing such masterful work! Write on!
What a positive, frank and honest prayer! I applaud you for it. Well done in your walk with God and your witness. I thank God for people like you. The writing reads like a prayer - a true outpouring of the heart to the Lord of all. Amen. Keep writing!
I enjoyed this insightful nonet on time. It intrigues me as we humans simply cannot explain time. Utilizing, the line, 'Ought not the bell toll for death today?' as an opening line captured me immediately. It also reminded me of 'for whom the bell tolls'. Well written. Write on!
Well done. This open form poem captures the reader immediately. It's interesting how you referred to the young woman as 'she'. I like the line, "Seeing through the veil like haze" and "Short lived the fires of her heart". My one suggestion is to break it up into stanzas or verses. Try to find when the mood shifts, i.e. the subject changes enough to do that. Other than that, great job!
As a fellow believer, I applaud you for your boldness in your witness. Well done. God is pleased. This poem reads like open form or free verse. It touches me to the core on a spiritual level. Perhaps you could try shortening some of the lines, for example, "Did he not speak against materialism?" could be changed to "Did he not frown upon money-love?" Overall, I really enjoyed this piece. Keep writing!
Extrememly well written. Every line shows thought and constant care at the placement of proper diction. I love the line, "A spectacular thought, a dubious fire," as well as the line, "The shadow hunters blithely enter.". Amazing. This poem has blown me away. I have no criticism for it at all despite the dark subject matter.
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