There were a lot of things about this story that kinda sabotaged it.
1. You didn't include parentheses when there was dialogue...when the dogs were talking, you kept out the " " symbols.
2. You spaced out the wording in the beginning...then bunched it all up later on.
3. The story was very choppy..." he did this..she went here...we did this.." I as the reader lost interest very early on.
4. You misspelled a lot of the words..some just by a letter.
You have the start of a great story...just need to refine it some.
Maybe take a writing class..or do some studying on writing styles and stuff.
Hope this wasn't too harsh....good luck in the future.
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