It's great it took a while for me to figure out that you were talking about the royal family. The dialogue was sometimes hard to keep track of who was who but I liked it. It was good
I haven’t read any of the other chapters. This is the one that popped up for me so I don’t know what’s going on however, I will say that I found it interesting that Sonia I think was her name came up to them while they were canvassing instead of, I don’t know, them going specifically to her to get this information or meeting her at the precinct or they’re not being another parent or guardian there while they were doing the interview, as she was under age. All in all though, I loved the press scene and the dialogue, and the foreshadowing of the father keep up the good work
Well, this is the second review I’ve done one of your stories and the first one I didn’t know who Noah and Oliver were now I do. It feels like this is a part of a larger story that you’re working or perhaps, an Anthology of short stories regarding these character. One thing I will say, although I do find it delightful. Is that while you describe the cats you describe them together pointing out which one is which. Also, I’d like to know a little bit more about the little old lady in the cottage. It seems like there needs to be a few more brushstrokes to her character as she is going to be important to The Bassett hound anyway, and possibly the larger story?
Hi Tim, so I'm not really good at poetry. I always find it difficult to understand what someone is talking about. But I didn't really have that issue with this poem. Or at least I interpreted it as an exploration of current events and migrant issues. I liked it keep up the good work
So the first thing that I kept asking while I read this was kind of animals or Noah and Oliver. The second thing I was asking was what kind of animal is sneaky Sam, my guess is a weasel or something. I like this rough draft of the story. It's got potential to be pretty good children's story. The ideas are good. I would like to feel a little bit more like I'm in the forest with them. Keep up the good work
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