I liked how you organized the stanzas with no apparent rhyme, and the use of itallizing was good affect, though sometimes hard to read on my screen... the plot however isn't that unique, for there once was a story of a Jew who mocked Jesus on the way to His cross; and as legend has it Jesus told him that he would wander around the world until Jesus' return.
The Jew was later called the... you guessed it... the Wandering Jew.
If this how you invision immortality so be it, yet your final tone was very egocentric and lonesome at the same time. I hope that is not how you entrust immortality for you and your love one, and no one else to attain...I guest we have different views. For one day I hope to be immortal too with many others including you, if, God wills it to be.
Excellent poem with its explaintion of the symbolism of the colored roses. Thought provoking...the way you dissected jealousy and envy with the cowardness it is through your golden wisdom. I applaud your over-all effort to make this extraoridanary poem. Thank you for sharing with us.
Yes, love is an emotion, and it does well for all of us to experience it as many times in this life as possible...love is servitude and please to do so..., for all we can for the manner in which we are given it, and, or received it...have no doubts about that, for I to have Loved and loved again in this lifetime... so please don't be like the wicked servant that buried his one talent in the ground.
A daring and bold poem not so much the lack of capitol letter and or puncuation, but rather its contents for it is strange how you equate the womb with walls of crap...very interesting indeed...but true in the light of this poem...the act of copulation is in much of this poem, 'Walls', however I can't help but think it has to do with conception too.
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