Great writing. I'm sure your just continuing with your trend of great poetry, but I just had to say it. As I said with your other poetry it's great just remember to have fun with your writing. This poem here has a nice steady flow which is very nice. Keep up the good work.
Loved it. It was fantastic. This I believe is my favorite so far of the pieces I have read. Even though it doesn't really follow any rhyme meter it seems you had a lot more fun with this one:
"I was an Armadillo once,
but that got boring,
so now I pretend
that I don't really care.
Not that I do,
do wah, do wah do wah ditty,
talk about the girl from New York City."
This I believe is my favorite part I don't believe I have every read a poem where someone actually used the word Armadillo. You had fun with it so you just have to have more fun writing your others. Keep up the good work.
Keep up your writing it seems to be a wonderful way for you to express your feelings and emotions. And as you said in your first entry you want the tears to be wiped away so you could see clearly without looking through your emotions. It seems to me that looking through your emotions is the only true way to see the world. Whether you see the world through happy or sad emotions is comlpetely up to you. If you choose to focus on the unhappy things in the world you will miss the happy if you choose to only see things happy you will miss the big picture just try and live in the future and forget the bad in the past. Re-living the bad things from your past will only cause you more unbearable pain, so better to focus on the happiness of the future, the smiles you have now, and glad memories that you already experienced.
It seems that there is a lot of anger in this particular piece of writing. Hopefully this was a good way to vent your rage and hopefully you have gotten over that anger to write more happy poetry, because it seems you have that ability with the soul that you write your poetry in anger with. Although it is not to my particular taste it is still a very well written poem. Good Job.
Not one of my most favorite poems, but it is still very well written. You use a great aray of words to describe everything that you feel in your poetry. The symbolism you used describing crushed and run over emotions as roadkill, although slightly nausiating to think of roadkill, is a very good descriptive word. Keep up the good writing and try something happier.
I love poetry and I have read thousands of scary poems, but I must say that that was the first one that truly sent a shiver up my spine and made me look over at my shadow to make sure it was not sneaking up behind me. The last two lines I think were the scariest:
"You're very lucky for now I'll hear another's cry
Yes, I think I'll choose a little girl to shadow today!"
That poem is something I think Steven King would feel a little jittery after reading. Keep up the great work.
You make a great amount of information seem so simple with the way you speak about the different Writing.com setups. Lots of the things that you wrote I didn't know about until I read them in your writing and I'm sure many other people had questions about the same things you wrote about and described. Good work and writing.
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