Ok this is a sample of a story I am writing I will take any comments back on it. Thanks. |
Prologue It was a picturesque morning on the flat farmlands of Emerlet, the crisp air gave way to the breath taking picture forming on the horizon. The great sun was rising, its warm rays of gold were lighting the Rahokie Mountains up making them look as though it been some great painting overlooking some heaven. Slowly the clouds rolled down the mountainsides first revealing the reddish brown peaks, and then it revealed its true beauty the lush green forest hypnotic and mysterious in every way drawing at any who would stare to long. The mountainside forest had always been a mystery to him, he never understood why they would draw him in so. While staring into the deep green lush of the mountainsides he heard voices deep with age and wisdom. He focused harder still on the mountains trying to pick out the source of this voice or of his seemingly hypnotic hallucination. Gazing deeper yet into the forest he saw a many things, he saw patches of trees turned black as though they had been burned in place but left completely intact, is was all very odd to him maybe even sinister in a way. Slowly the focus he tried so hard to hold was drifting away, blurring and then his whole world began to shake and rumble and there was a new and yet familiar voice. 1 The Dream Awakens Satoym wake up, Satoym... would you just wake up! The moment Satoym began to stir he lost his picture, it reseeded into the back of his mind like a memory of days before lost or forgotten maybe even both. He gave up the fight to hold on to the dream and opened his eyes and saw that it was his brother Yogie waking him out of his place of peace, but why so early he wondered. The light of the sun had not even reached out to the sky over the far mountainsides. Pausing a moment to react to the sudden shock of a possible emergency he franticly looked about the room. Listing all he could see in his head, the room still dark only lit by the tapered candle, but even now, he could see the many shapes and objects he recognized for being his own, but somehow the room as a whole looked different somehow it looked wrong. The window he looked out of to guess the time had been open, he could feel the wind blow on him now the crisp cold air from the mountains, almost as eerie as the voices in his dream, of which he swore he could still here. Looking closer at the window, he noticed it had been broken and its shattered pieces strewn across the room. “Yogie what happened?” dizzily sitting up not fully awake yet, he looked straight into Yogie’s eyes inquisitively. “I wasn’t sure myself. I was down stairs when I felt the house began to sway as the wind began screaming around the house, and then I heard a crash... I don’t know what happened but I rushed up here to see what it was but I didn’t see anything.” Looking concerned as ever. Yogie looked like a simpleton, his face was gaunt, skin pale, his clothes where of common material, grayish after many days work, and his eyes like blank mirrors, seemingly void of any thought or even a soul. I always thought it was his way to hide his emotions and thoughts; he was a true believer of the eyes being the window to mind and soul. Even the way he looked was as much of a deception as his eyes because he was not a simpleton and was always in deep thought. ”What is it Yogie?” Yogie continued to look concerned and even worried about something. After a long pause and a somewhat reluctant shrug “It is noon and sun hasn’t risen and even if it were not noon the sun should still be up, yet it isn’t... there are no clouds that I have seen just this horrid wind and endless whistle slowly driving me insane. Satoym was awake now and looking out the window, looking over the shadowed land over the foothills into the pitch black that he knew was the mountains, still he swore he could here the voices reaching him even now past his dreams. He stared blankly at the now blank horizon thinking back onto his dream, remembering the voices and as if waiting for something he stared deeper yet in the void... Yogie noticed Satoym’s stare it was almost as if the unseen mountains carried him away, back to his dreams maybe or maybe it had something to do with this wind. The wind had been coming out of the mountains all morning and now stronger then ever. Deep in thought and worried about his brother, Yogie lost track of the time he spent pondering what this wind may be from, and wondering why his brother was so attracted to the mountains. Yogie looked deep into his brother’s eyes and heard a voice longing to remember his brothers past, it felt almost as if it was his conscious tugging at him to reminisce and just wait out the wind... Satoym had always been interested in the mountains he would always go to the edge of town just to climb the tallest trees, to look over the forest at the mountains. As a young boy he never had friends he never had time for them he was always deep in his own thoughts which were overflowing spinning him in circles so he often would seek the refuge of that tall tree. He often had the eyes of many of the towns girls and even some of the young ladies. He was of medium height, he had long black hair often braided in ceremonial braids, which accentuated his tanned skin and blue eyes, and he was a well-built youth despite his recluse behavior. His taste in clothing had always been a little bit more substantial then his brothers, where his brother would wear common clothes his brother would only wear clothes that set him apart from the rest of the town but his clean well kept body and clothing attracted many of the female persuasion. He had always felt he was different maybe even crazy, he felt his calling in life was not that of a peasants he was a thinker. He never took to any of the women who threw themselves at him he felt that if he was to be better then another muscle with no brain he should wait until he found a nice young woman he could truly share his thoughts with. A few years ago, our parents had died in a fire and so we were left to fend for our selves at first I had to do everything from the hunting to the work of everyday life, soon I couldn’t keep up with it, and I had to coax him into learning to hunt but it worked. Soon after only a couple times going with me he could hunt like no other in the town he would even pull in extra money by hunting for other townsfolk. Soon after that he began to train under the edge of a sword, learning all he could from the books in town and the mercenaries that accompanied the travelers as they passed, so he would master this or so I thought but Satoym thought different he never stopped practicing and learning. He could best any man in combat but he felt he was lacking something, but he was not sure what. That bring us up to today, for today we were to go deep into the woods maybe even to the base of the Rahokie Mountain range, not only were we to hunt but map the area for other families wanting to explore the lands around the town. Yogie was finished reminiscing and so his gaze to fell over the blackened mountain range soon the both were asleep. |