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Rated: E · Short Story · Contest Entry · #1665909
a girl's desire is to get out of the cave, neglecting her other responsibilities.
Controlling impulse seems to be something difficult for Daisy. She has spent years of her life, trapped in an underground cave. Daisy was only seven years, when she decided to outdoors and discovers the world around her.

Daisy was walking towards the new buildings in her country, when she felt like her legs are directing her to stay away the new buildings, and keep walking until she saw a cave covered with rocks and sea shells. She felt danger, yet the desire to go inside was stronger, than her own. She tried to fight, she tried to flee, but nothing worked her legs were walking on their own. Once she entered the cave, Daisy felt chill of coldness inside the cave. The desire of working in the place and making it better was way so strong, tougher than her desire to leave.

After exploring the cave, she found out that the cave is connected with a damaged underground tunnel, which should end with the ocean. Daisy tried to examine the tunnel but to no use, whenever she gets closer, she feels that the tunnel is going to collapse. Daisy decided to try to figure it out after she gets some sleep, she was very tired, so she made herself a bed, using rocks from the cave, arranging them, in the most possible way, to feel comfortable sleeping on them. Inside the cave, there was no difference, between the night and day. It was impossible for Daisy to know the difference between them, when she trapped inside. 

When Daisy woke up, she had an unexplained desire to fix the tunnel. At the mean time her own desire was to figure out a way to get out of the cave, but every time she gets near the main entrance, her legs brings her back near the tunnel. At that point, she knew that there is no choice for her except to stay in the cave. Once she decided to stay, her hands started to feel stronger, and she started to fix the tunnel between the cave and the ocean. When she started thinking of what she was doing she realized that by fixing the tunnel, she might actually allow water to enter, the cave, if water entered the cave she might use the water flow, to get out of the cave.

Daisy had no choice, except to fix the tunnel and hope that her plan works, and the water would be enough to flood the cave and its flow helps her to get out. Daisy kept on working everyday, till she got tired, then she goes to sleep, and wake up next day and do the same work in the tunnel. Her life became a strict routine, that no matter how much she tries to control her impulse to work and might actually try to get out, her body just moves and do the work, without her control.

Daisy had finished fixing half the tunnel, successfully when she realized that there are other factors affecting the damage of the tunnel, like the water and the crabs, the water makes the sand between the rocks of the tunnel moves, and that causes more damage, she has to find something to stop the water or she has to find something else to connect the rocks together that isn’t affected by water. As for the crabs they seemed like they came out of no where, to ruin the connection between the rocks, forcing it to collapse faster. Daisy, started to think of what help her fix the tunnel and keep the crabs and water away, she started, thinking of many things, like making a new type of material that connects the rocks together, and prevent the tunnel to collapse, but to no avail, the tunnel just mysteriously collapse.

Daisy decided to stop fighting the impulse to leave and made her desires the same as the cave’s desires; she gave up on her desire to leave. Suddenly extreme power and speed controlled her, she was able to move fast and fix the tunnel fast, and she was faster than both the water and crabs. In no time she was able to fix the tunnel. Once she fixed the tunnel, she saw a blue eyed creature, with fins like fish, and face like humans. He thanked her for helping him, to get out the prison and the curse that the lord of the ocean cursed him with. He told her that he is a magical creature, and made a mistake, and that’s why the lord of the ocean cursed him. He offered her freedom, and apologized for trapping her inside, he told that he had to get out, and that he trapped the first person, who entered the cave, just to help him get out.

Daisy asked to go home, he answered with a smile “You have already learned the lesson.”

Daisy asked with confusion “What lesson?”

The creature answered “To control your impulse, and force yourself to do the right thing.” The creature then used his magic, and sent Daisy home.

Daisy woke up to find herself in her bed, she looked at the mirror to find herself an adult, she realized that, she has spent 15 years of her life in that cave!!!



Word count: 878 words

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