Feedback on my Romeo Haikus

Haikus for Romeo, from Romeo and Juliet. Actual feedback needed!

This is for a major grade, so I definitely need a lot of constructive feedback! Thank you~



The dank summer dew
bubbles on the grass like love.
Juliet, love me? ❀


All eyes on my love.
She looks so, so beautiful.
All eyes, but my own. ✞

She is like the Sun.
Everyone can see her.
​Yet, the stars cannot. ❂