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for entry "Heroes and Villians" 
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is an interesting story I was a bit confused as to who the he was in the first paragraph. The story was mostly told as opposed to shown. It made the places where you did show character or other elements of the story it seemed out of place. The bullies as characters were really flat. There were a lot of places where the story could have gone somewhere interesting. Like the quiz. Why is it in there did everyone take it or did the teachers want to see how far ahead she was. There is more to be said there. The bullies having something planned on the bus was another missed opportunity. As was the girl who sat next to her on the bus. You say they became friends but how? Is it because of things said or an awkward interaction ending in giggles. I want to see that part. It was just an unfulfilling story for me full of told details I do not care about because not enough was shown. What was the new friend's name. Where she get off the bus? If it was the same stop why did they not meet before?
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Review of Kiley's Story  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awe, what a sweet kitty tale or tail or whatever. It sounds like that is one happy cat. I have four they are less happy because they have to take turns sleeping on my head, my chest, my side, my feet. The plump one prefers my head my athletic one likes balancing on my side, my gray one only bothers me for food and grooming so he just wags his tail in front of my nose until I sneeze awake. Cats are some of god's best creatures.
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Review of The Less I Know  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Detective Kurtz has just a touch of obsessive compulsive disorder. All the rituals make that clear without saying he has OCD. He reminds me of Detective Monk only he is way higher functioning. If something happened to his sister though I could see that shoving him right over the edge. I don't know if an aid would be enough to help him work again. I also don't know how good a detective he is. the only things he comes up with are things almost anyone would notice. Put him on the trail of a murderer that would be the real test. Sorry about the tangent. THis story wasn't about him being Monk it was about showing not telling a story. It really does a good job of that.

I was shocked about how little he knew about his sister and yet he was absolutely sure he needed to do a welfare check. That was a bit odd for me. I would think he would have at least known what her degrees were in even if he didn't know where she worked... Actually I would expect him to know that too. This is a rare quirky set of siblings and I would love to read more about them.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Poor Gregor, I hated him in what I've read of later, but with this he is almost sympathetic to me. Ismona seems aloof. This is a Hitler situation to me for the price of an if only perhaps things could've gone differently. I took know too much about what may happen to tell you if it is revealing but as usual the writing is great. Though what's up with the first few lines... A what?
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting switch on a subject. I expected the usual werewolf shtik but your werewolf took a different path. it sounds like a monthly werewolf carnival to me. I can see it in the woods run by gypsies, because who else would cater to a bunch of werewolves? But if this is how they spend their time as wolves where do new werewolves come from? this opens up questions for me on how your lycanthropic curse works in the world you created. Is it passed by a bite or by mummy and daddy werewolves having baby werewolves? do they take their pups to the carnival or do they leave them home with a dogsitter? Oh, so many cool paths this could take as a story.

Okay now to the readability. i would recommend placing the description of the form that you used in a drop note or a popnote it would clean up the way your poem is displayed. When I write a poem I usually put any prompt or form descriptions in a drop note at the bottom of the piece. I lead with the poem because it is the priority. I add the drop note to answer any questions about it.


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Review of The Wooden Pen  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Bizarre concept. I wonder where you are going with this ultimately. It sounds cool. Is it going to be a series of stories like the first part or are we going to follow Sally in her further adventures. Is it really Sally's adventures or will there be more of a mind warp later?
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very clear character sketch that also introduces a bit of the setting. It feels steampunk ish. And I like the character names especially Mr. Plumpockets and the rest of what I assume is his family. The story states they are running out of food and water in the attic. It must be a remarkable attic since it seems weird to have food there in the first place.

Good story and happy anniversary.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good story. I like the plot and the ideas behind it. A post apocalyptic search for lost knowledge. Aurelius has a good idea of what that library's knowledge would mean but he doesn't realize that he can only postpone the rise. It is the nature of people to reach for more.

By the way happy anniversary 🥳🎉
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Review of Stake Deal  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It seems to follow the form well. I am more used to the nature themes of haikus. I did not see anything in the notes on the form that specified a theme. I am not familiar with poker but it seems to be on point with the theme. One suggestion I have is that you put the note on the form in a dropnote so it does not overshadow the rather short poem.

Oh yeah and happy anniversary.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Whoa. That took me closer to war than I wanted to be. It was a graphic description of death without the killing part. I can smell the nasty rotting stench of no man's land. The way the mud almost became a character was genius. I loved the part where he spoke to the dead man and found a picture of the man's wife. The rats the maggots the bullets it nocked on all the doors I expected, but his wound seemed like an afterthought. I didn't feel the bullet or the wound I would think it would be pretty preoccupying with the pain and all. There were a couple of places where I thought, "but wait wasn't he wounded?" Like when he poked his head out of his hole. How did he put weight on it. And at the end when he was crawling back it seemed not to impede his movement. I feel he should have done something to attempt to attend to it. Perhaps a bandage from part of his sleeve, or some kind of attempt to slow the bleeding... He seems to have paid it no mind instead conversing with a corpse. Is that a comment on the madness of war?
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Review of The Rose  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome. I can barely believe you fit so much story in only three hundred words. There is a clear sense of character and an actual plot. It ticks off every element I expect of a story of any size and I am really impressed by it. I can see the rose and her smiling at it.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Very nice stream of consciousness. it grasps lightly at reality yet expresses one particular reality perfectly. I find I had very little problems following as it bounced from apparent non sequitur to non sequitur. They really are more connected than a surface read would show.
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Review of Shadows  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
THis is AWESOME, I love the characters. the setting changes which I don't always like in such a short story but the point of the story is the change in setting. I love the character growth. It is a good lesson about life being lived not just observed. I love the lengths the king has gone to to keep his daughter safe from the nasty world outside. But I also love the long lost aunt for realizing that there is such a thing as too safe.

I would love to read the adventures she went through to get back home to her brother's castle. SHe talks about the spring as though it has never failed to heal her. THat makes me wonder what wounds or illnesses she had survived in her years out on her own. She is a world wise woman who returns home to her brother the hermit king. I feel like the king needed the healing of the spring as much as his daughter did.

It is remarkable what a little soak in the water did for the princess. I have to wonder if the spring wasn't magical it was just able to kick her psychosomatic paralysis. After all she had no trouble feeling the cold of the water. I think that this ambiguity of whether or not it is a magical spring is lovely.
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for entry "Phil's Friends Arrive" 
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Okay the thing that leaps out at me in this chapter is the situation of the verse from Proverbs. I think there has to be a better way of slipping the citation into the dialog rather than a misplaced footnote. Perhaps saying as my mother would quote from the book of Proverbs. Not much more than that should be needed since the Bible is public domain.
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for entry "Joyful News!" 
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This chapter is awesome. It reads smoothly the elements of the original work are there. I would love to see this illustrated. I can almost see the setting in my head just from the descriptions. I like the characters so far and I hope they don't not disappoint in future.
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for entry "Fair And Warmer" 
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I love dinotopia! I love the story so far! One problem, the switch in point of view from third to first rubbed me wrong. I saw no good reason for it. It was following the same character. I think things would flow smoother if you just turned the first person perspective part into third person.
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Review of The Flawed Gods  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is an excellent start to something. I can see so many directions it could go. The writing style is a bit graphic. It is also highly descriptive. I would hope at some point in the story for a flashback to how he came to be this way. Is the computer from the future or another planet?
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for entry "~ My Daily Routine ~" 
Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This piece inspired by the question of the day about routines is anything but routine. I know how hard setting a routine can be. Especially if you are disabled or retired. Days can run together and it can be hard to keep track of what you did when.

The writing is honest, though the tone to me is heavy with guilt. You can not beat yourself up when things slip past you. I have been trying to get at least one of each of the seven day badges but still have not managed the post in a forum one. It has slipped easily away from me with just one confused day or another.

I have only managed the login one and the post to he feed one relatively regularly because I like to wish people happy anniversary and happy birthday. Still my current streak on those is four days.

Habit heroes is a great activity. I wish I was consistent enough to join in. Though I have been keeping up with I write in 24, promptly poetry challenge and
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This crossword marks correct answers as wrong until other answers are filled in correctly. I also tried several spellings for five down but it will not accept the correct answer. It was incredibly frustrating to try and solve this. I do not think it is the author's fault I think it has something to do with me filling it out on my phone. Because I had the same trouble with another puzzle earlier today but do not seem to have the problem when I fill them out on my computer. Whatever, I tried, I just could not get it to play nice.
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Review of Virus  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a strong story. The two characters are strangely evenly matched. I wonder if he had ever actually killed anyone before kidnapping her. It would be ironic if he set out for his first murder and ends up being killed by his innocent victim. She of course will not be charged with murder. It could not be more clear that it was self defense. Still she has self applied the label of murderer and no defense attorney can ever remove it or the guilt she will carry. This whole story is well told and we have learned enough of the character to know that she is now as irrevocably damaged by this as if it were his plan all along


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Review of Snowy, My Love  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a lovely poem. And a lovely subject. Snowy sounds like a perfect furbaby. Dogs like snowy are one in a million. and I understand not wanting to dim the memory with "Replacements." But consider that there are millions of homeless animals who need the kind of love and affection you gave Snowy. Some of them are in danger of being put down in shelters to make room for more animals. No one and nothing will replace Snowy but you could legitimately be saving a life if you took in another animal companion. Second love like this can be just as sweet.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Still too fast paced. there needs to be more character development they are all equally frantic without giving one clue about why they would be. so they're spies. if they really are spies they can not afford to be as frantic as they are being. there needs to be more to their character than that sense of impending doom and inability to sit still for two seconds. the thing about the cacao that seems out of place like a product placement commercial if it really was an issue of the character not having it he should have showed frustration that morning as he was getting ready that he didn't have it rather than an infodump three hours later about it.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a fast paced first chapter. It could use more showing of emotions and scenery than telling, I have never been to most of the places it tells about and would like more of a sense of being there with the characters. The pace is a bit fast to get much of a sense of the characters too. Don't feel that just because you set off at a run that you can't take a few breaths and put in some showing details so we can catch our breaths and get into the characters heads. Right now all the characters are to me is several shades of panicked and frantic. Not all of them should or would be yet. Nothing really has happened for them to be frantic.
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for entry "Is there an answer?" 
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I feel sympathy with the writer and agree that I am glad I am advanced enough in years to not have to see where our population will have pushed the earth in another fifty years. I thought this would be themed around human kindness to each other but it is as much about human kindness to our planet. Either way round humans are less than kind.

Wars, both physical and philosophical tear our societies apart just when we need to pull together to save our future selves. I have little hope for the kind of cooperation necessary to reverse the horrible things this piece predicts. I just hope there will be enough of our wild and beautiful planet left to rebuild after we have had our way with it.

I hope that we won't be the mass extinction that wipes out all life. I would feel a little peace in the extinction of humanity if we left a few bugs and a few plants around to rebuild the ecosystem from. Even better if there were mammals and flowers, fish and fungi, a mild bit of diversity to rebuild from. But I fear that earth will have to rebuild from bacteria.


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Review of The Firemen  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great story. It follows the prompt well, but for me the hopping around from one point of view to the other was a little jarring. I don't expect that kind of thing in a short story. It really didn't seem to give either character the platform they needed to be fully developed. I would really like to see how it would read if you stuck to one character's point of view through the story and built the character of the other character through the thoughts and impressions of him and the way they change through the story. To me the main character, or at least the band "leader" is a real jerk who doesn't want to do what is necessary for the band to have success. The drummer has good valid suggestions to improve the band but he gets shouted down. With the point of view split between the two the characters have equal weight in the story and it is a little confusing which one is the supporting character the prompt requires. I think it should have been all from the point of view of the leader.


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