October Novel Prep Challenge

Well, I turned in what I have...such as it is. It didn't turn out at all like I had planned. My intention was to show that my main character is fiercely independent, determined and brave...but has a family that DOES love her...but are very overprotective, overbearing and her older brothers can come across as belittling and patronizing...but they don't mean to be cruel...they are just....knuckleheads. Her mother on the other hand is supportive and encourages her daughter to do things for herself.

Maybe it would play out better if they had this conversation over a family dinner? Or something? As it is, it's kind of boring...and the tone isn't right...what can I do to make it better? Thanks in advance.
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