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Review of Fat Mikey  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Contest entry last modified--6:24pm on 10-28-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Nice plot, nicely written.

Technical errors: Remove semicolon from I launched a snowball; smacking his forehead. Add 'had' in final sentence to use correct verb tense: I had finally confronted our bully.

Overall: Good job.


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Review of The Hunt  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
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Contest entry last modified--7:36pm on 09-18-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: I found myself with several questions--how did the anteater get into a cave, for one. I also would have expected the python to coil itself around the victim rather than bite.

Technical errors: The dialogue should probably be italicized, not in quotes, unless the snake is actually speaking the dialogue out loud. In your item description, I think the word you are looking for is "predatory," not "predatorous."

Overall: The circle of life continues in a dark cave.


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Review of The Fish Tale  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--7:25pm on 09-18-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: I like the hide & seek between the fish and the worm, and the emotions ascribed to each.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Fun perspective on fishing!

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Review of Target Acquired  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Contest entry last modified--2:48pm on 09-13-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Nice buildup of tension, complete story, intact window. *Laugh* Good word choices!

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nicely done.

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Review of Tech-No-Type  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--11:25am on 09-07-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: This familiar feeling brought a smile to my face.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nice job.


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Review by Quill o' the Owl Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--1:58am on 09-12-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Clear plot with nice emotional component. Good images and word choices.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nicely done!

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Review of Heat Exchange  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--10:18pm on 08-31-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Not a traditionally gripping plot, but good vignette of patiently waiting until a cooler season.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: You show that "talking about the weather" can be nicely written!

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Review by Quill o' the Owl Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Contest entry last modified--3:59am on 09-01-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Clear plot, complete story. Some nice word choices. I think some phrases, such as "Smile lit my face..." and "Bouncing off hood," show the strain of the word countlimit.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Good job.


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Review of Hunted  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Contest entry last modified--3:37pm on 07-12-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: I would probably change "Sight is impaired to lily pads of light" to "sight is limited to..." You have good descriptions and set a mood, but some of the phrasing is almost haiku-like in its sparseness, which seems to show the strain of limited word-count.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Good descriptions.


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Review of Love & Betrayal  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Contest entry last modified--5:28pm on 07-14-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Good distillation of their life together. I would probably change "obsessed by" to "obsessed with." The question of whether she deserted/died willingly (or if her decision led to her death) did detract from the emotional impact a little for me.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Good job.

Congratulations on winning second place in Round 104 of "The Hint Fiction ContestOpen in new Window.!

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Review of His Life  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--3:13pm on 05-30-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: The scenario is easily imagined and though not much is known about Wally, his "type" is familiar. Good word choices--itching, popping up, humming, etc. I did wonder what would happen next, and if he's successful in his hunt.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nice job.

Congratulations on winning second place in Round 97 of "The Hint Fiction ContestOpen in new Window.!

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Review by Quill o' the Owl Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.0)
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Contest entry last modified--12:35am on 04-17-2009
Word count--Your entry contains only 53 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: An amusing bit of wisdom, but no plot or characters.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Not quite the right entry for this contest.


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Review of Ride Smart  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Contest entry last modified--3:23pm on 04-04-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Kids learn a valuable safety lesson in this classroom scene. The plot seemed focused on providing context for the punchline, rather than building up to it naturally.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Definitely a cautionary tale!


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Review of Poodle Dresses  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--6:51pm on 03-04-2009
Word count--Unfortunately, your entry contains 56 words and so cannot be considered for a prize. ("doo-wop"=2)
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Great images and word choices, good sense of time and context.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nicely done...except for word count! *Sad*


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Review of One-on-One  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--1:12pm on 02-15-2009
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Nice sounds, images, and emotion in this piece.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nice job!

Congratulations on winning second place in Round 83 of "The Hint Fiction ContestOpen in new Window.!

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Review by Quill o' the Owl Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Contest entry last modified--12:08pm on 12-20-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Lovely images and word choices. The plot is simple, a bunny's escape, but nice.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Well done!

Congratulations on winning second place in Round 74 of "The Hint Fiction ContestOpen in new Window.!

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Review by Quill o' the Owl Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
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Contest entry last modified--4:55pm on 12-20-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Conveys strong emotion and depicts and internal struggle, but does not meet the contest criteria for beginning, middle, and end of a plot.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nice personal story.


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Review of Lost At Sea  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Contest entry last modified--11:44am on 12-19-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Plot is incomplete with regards to who this character is, how he/she got there, time, etc. Intriguing struggle to keep exhaustion from giving in to death. Repetition of "sing" derails the flow a little.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Some good images.


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Review of On Patrol  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--8:50pm on 12-19-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content:Clear components, simply told. Good words--soggy, etc.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: A tragic tale! *Laugh*


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Review of Final battle  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Contest entry last modified--10:05pm on 12-17-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Larger plot is unclear in this brief scene. Without the item description ("on the eve of battle"), it's not even clear why the father is leaving. Why does he only nod to his wife--surely a more tender gesture of goodbye would be in order if he's really not coming back?

Technical errors: Last sentence should read "doubted they knew" instead of "doubt" to keep verb tenses consistent.

Overall: Good effort, but needs polishing.


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Review of Out of Control  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--11:33pm on 12-01-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Clear plot, nice satire. I did wish you'd been more specific about what was on his hands--an allusion to stains, or red droplets, or something--but I know that would wreak havoc on your word count.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nicely done.

Congratulations on winning first place in Round 72 of "The Hint Fiction ContestOpen in new Window.!

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Review of Gristletoe  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Contest entry last modified--10:33pm on 12-06-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: You say a lot about the characters and their relationship, and throw in the holiday details to put it into context. The "plot" in this case is more about the back & forth of their struggle rather than any specific action, but I think it works here.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Good job.

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Review by Quill o' the Owl Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Contest entry last modified--9:56am on 11-22-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: Good story arc. I did have a little uncertainty about the main character. "His little hand" indicates a child, but his final thought ("we cannot afford this") seems more like something an adult would worry about, whereas a child might worry mostly about getting in trouble for it.

Technical errors: Italicize We cannot afford this to indicate that it is internal dialogue.

Overall: Good job, but some inconsistencies in characterization.


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Review of Windfall  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Contest entry last modified--11:51pm on 11-13-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content: You told a complete and clear tale of seizing opportunity--or a walnut!--when it presents itself. Good, vibrant word choices (seizing, chattering, escape, etc.).

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nicely done.

Congratulations on winning first place in Round 69 of "The Hint Fiction ContestOpen in new Window.!

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Review of Halloween Treats  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Contest entry last modified--3:34am on 10-31-2008
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating--Appropriate.

Plot and content:A different image of Halloween night. I liked the poodle thrown in there. The phrase breathing was a result of direct intent seemed a little awkward, perhaps extended for word count when breathing was difficult would have done nicely.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!

Overall: Nice job.

Congratulations on winning second place in Round 67 of "The Hint Fiction ContestOpen in new Window.!

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