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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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#1384147 by Simply Positive Author IconMail Icon


No human being should ever have to suffer at the hands of another. I feel your pain my friend. I have been dealing with the repercussions of my daughters abuse at the hands of her father. I don't think the pain will ever go away but it does get better with time. The best thing for you to do in order to help yourself is to write. It helped me like you wouldn't believe. I commend you for taking this step. Good luck my dear and remember you are NEVER alone.


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Review of The Cat's Meow  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Princess looks like a very loving and loyal companion. I simply adore cats and have had them all my life. I really enjoyed getting to know your Princess and also finding out about the cat's history. I can't imagine anyone NOT loving these beautiful creatures. Thanks for sharing your little girl with us.




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Review of Malice Intended  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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This is a great story. I would never have thought for one minute that this story would end as it did. When I think about it though she wasn't very bright for a criminal.

Your story has perfect composition and no errors. Great Writing my friend.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
There is a great deal of truth written in these words. I can personally relate to what you have written here. I was in this exact place just a year ago and a bit ago. It's amazing how someone else's words can fit other people so well. You have a really great poem here. The meter is great and I didn't find any errors.

Write On!

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Review of Hands Off  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
It seems to me that the goings on in this poem are that of a forbidden relationship. I like the way you brought this together having the reader wonder why the subjects hands need to be taken off. It all becomes clear at the end. The poem had good form and the overall flow is very good. Nice writing my friend.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
As I read this story I couldn't help but wonder if it was true. I personally can't imagine hurting someone and not doing anything to help them. The end of this story also got me thinking about your statement. Are we going to make it? Very thought provoking.

Looking at the overall composition of the story, it's fine. I would suggest breaking it up into small paragraphs so it doesn't look so blockly. Other than that there were no errors.

Write on!
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Review of Age 39  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shannon, this photograph of you is absolutely stunning! You do not even look close to being forty. Your eyes have a sparkle to them like I have never seen before and the hair style definately suits you. Whoever took these phots certainly knew what they were doing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful tribute you have written here for of of WDC's finest. I certainly know what you mean when you say, "my online friends are closer to me than my local friends." The members here are amoung the finest on earth.

This uplifting story warmed my heart. If made me realize once again how very lucky we are to have a site like this to call home. I would also like to tell you that I didn't find any errors in this. Great work my friend.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a beautiful poem that expresses some very fond memories. I found the overall flow of this piece to be quite good. The imagery you created in this poem allows the reader to see a clear picture of life around you. There were no errors found in this entire poem. The dedication you added makes it even more special.

Write on!
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Review of Birthday Sonnet  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem starts out as a wonderful birthday tribute for a mother. The sentiments being said are warm, caring and heart-felt. Then you get to the last two lines and the beautiful picture painted by the first part of this poem is shattered into a million pieces. What a shocker! You did very well with this.

The form of this piece has no issues and I didn't see any errors. Write on fellow poet!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a magnificent idea to help assist newcomers to WDC find their way around. All of the links are listed in neat and clear fashion and look very professional. I like the fact that you didn't just include "how to" links but also some for contests and cNotes. Way to go!

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Review of Freedom In Death  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Dawn,

I have to tell you that you have a good story here. It's sad that Tom felt as if he had to die to be free. I can undserstand why he felt this way though. You conveyed his emotions well. Most of this story is fine but I did see two mistakes in the same line.

Tom said as turned his head slight to the side You are missing 'he' after Tom said as... and 'slight' should have 'ly' on the end.

Aside from those, the rest of the story is well written and error free.

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Review of To you.  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
As short as this piece is, it is quite good. It has a good storyline, reads well, is easy to understand and has great imagery.

I do have a few suggestions though. In its current form it is very blocky and looks like one huge paragraph; even with the indents. I would break it up into a few smaller paragraphs to give it a more streamline appearance. I would also lose the brackets around the quip about false alarms. It can be emphasized with commas and still be effective. Other than that, you did great.

Write on!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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#1384147 by Simply Positive Author IconMail Icon


Who wouldn't get excited to learn someone has a crush on them? I was thinking about this the whole time I read this story. I enjoyed the overall tone of this piece, with the budding affection growing bigger and bigger. Like the character I was disappointed when I heard the origin of the statement. Thankfully, it was real all along.

You have a really good story here and I am happy to report I didn't see any mistakes. Write on!


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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#1384147 by Simply Positive Author IconMail Icon


Hi Judy,
I couldn't agree with you more about everything you said in this story. I am the mom of 4 extremely challenging kids and I have tried pretty much everything. I found that the more positive I am, with love, attention and praise; the better the behaviors.

I would certainly recommend this piece to anyone who needs a little advice. I personally appreciate you taking the time to share your experience with all of us.

PS..There were no errors found. *Smile*




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Rated: E | (3.5)
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This short but very direct story depicts a tiny portion of American history. I suspect that part of what was said could actually be true.

Looking at the overall story, I don't think the large font brings anything special to this piece, but that is personal preference. I didn't find any errors in this story.


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Review of The Falls  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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#1384147 by Simply Positive Author IconMail Icon


You tell a creepy tale of woman's obsession in this story. The ironic thing about it is that it's quite believable. Some people will go to any length to get what they want.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing this entry. It is well written, has a great outline and there are no errors. Great writing my friend.

Write on!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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#1384147 by Simply Positive Author IconMail Icon


I can certainly see the reasoning behind your statement of a 5 star rating, however, I tend to disagree with it.

Giving someone 5 stars for one piece of work does not mean that everything is perfect. For me, it lets that person know that for something that they poured there heart and soul into is was just right.

If you praise something enough to merit a 5 star rating, but for your own reasons won't give it; I find that personally insulting.

This is of course my opinion and we are all entitled to them. Thanks for sharing your views.



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Review of At the Mall  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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#1384147 by Simply Positive Author IconMail Icon


What a great story! It shows the reader how easily a situation can change and how much more aware of our surroundings we need to be. Sometimes when we get stuck in a routine, we don't notice obvious things that we would otherwise. This story sends wonderful message to its readers telling them to always be cautious.

The overall look structure of this story is fine. There are no spelling errors, the story is believable and the character is real. Nice work my fellow author!

Write on!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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You certainly have a nack for story telling. I felt as if I were right there at the party and I even checked my face for tell tale signs of bithday cake...*Laugh* This story was a joy to read and it brought back fond memories of my own childhood birthdays.

The overall composition of the story is great. It follows all of the proper guidelines and I didn't see any errors. Nice job my friend. Write on!


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Review of ENCHANTRESS  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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As I read this poem, a vision of beauty entered my mind. I knew right at that moment it was your enchantress. I guess I needed her and you brought her to me; divine timing? Maybe...

This is a poem worth reading. To me, it felt as light as air. The words flow effortlessly off the page creating a magical atmosphere for the reader. It is remarkable and flawless. Brava Sherri!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Most of the time I try very hard not to think of the atrocities you mention in this poem because my head and heart cannot deal with the emotions.

I wish I was able to answer the "why" in this poem but I am afraid none of us will ever be able to. Your poem is very deep and thought provoking. The images that came to my mind as I read it were enough to make me cry. It has great form and the overall flow of the piece is seamless. There are no errors in this poem.

Great work my friend. Write on!




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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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I had never heard of this style of poem before I read this but I must say I find it very interesting. Your poem is lovely. It paints an erotic but tasteful scene for the reader to explore within their own imagination. The rhyme scheme is idyllic, the meter is smooth as silk and there are no errors. Thank you for introducing me to yet another wonderful style of poetry.


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Review of The Climb  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I have got to give a big high five to Bob for his ingenuity! What a smart cookie...*Laugh* I loved this story and I hope you don't find it odd that I laugh my hiney off when I read it. It's priceless.

The story has excellent compostion, flawless grammar, punctuation and spelling. You have a brilliant mind my friend. Write on!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
WOW! What I just read here creeped me out big time because all of it is SO true. I have goosebumps all over me. This really make one think about so many different things at one time. It certainly got my brain gears going.

It doesn't have any errors but I would recommend breaking it into 2 paragraphs. Some people find blocky chunks of text hard to read. Just a suggestion though.

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