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Review by Dejaa Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this! Yes to me it is poetry. Keep on writing.
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Review by Dejaa Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Story Review

What I liked. *Heart*
Loved the whole Idea of going in...

Suggestions. *Idea*
Breaking it into paragraphs would make easer to read.errors.

Overall impressions
I enjoyed it very much. Keep writing..A good Idea!


Writing is a personal experience you can make public. It allows you to express yourself through inner thoughts brought to view.

Keep expressing yourself!

God Bless
Dejaa *Bigsmile*



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Review by Dejaa Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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First Impression :
Healing, cleansing, renewing, Very beautiful

Spelling and Grammar :

Nit pick! third line from the end did you mean wends or winds?

Flow :


Additional Comments :
Love this verson as well.
Since dross is to discard do you need of in that line?
Keep feeling!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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First Impression :
Beautiful! Very Imaginative and creative, a very nice place to visit for a while.

Spelling and Grammar :
Did not detect any.

Flow :
Flows well.

Additional Comments :
Love the intro to your space here. Thank you for adding such informative links. I will also check out your other space also.
My favorite part so far is your into about the Last day of Spring...

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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First Impression :
Loved the story, a good amount of suspense.

Spelling and Grammar :
beneath eyelashed lids (eye lashed)
the goosebumps, the tic (goose bumps) unless its the Book.


Flow :
The flow of your story was very good. It kept pulling my along wanting to see what would happen next.

Additional Comments :
Good work, full of visual imagery.
Keep it up!

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Review of Change of Seasons  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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First Impression :
You first poem has great potential!
Your Haikus are very good. Bright and happy.
I enjoyed them.

Spelling and Grammar :
Did you mean season is? season's
are they lost just now or have they been for a long time:
They're or they have?

Flow :
You poem flows well giving much to ponder.

Additional Comments :
Keep writing, keep enjoying it and keep improving.

God Job

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
First Impression :
A very good depiction of Marie Laveau. Very well written.

Spelling and Grammar :
"bow and chant and give."

To me it seems that a comma between (bow and chant) bow, chant, and give
Would give it a smoother line here. The and seemed to break the smoothness here.

Flow :
Other than the one spot above it had a very nice cadence and flow.

Additional Comments :
They say she's not in the tomb, you know!
I enjoyed it very much Keep writing.
Good luck on the contest.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
"Fyn's 21 Days of Poetry" Open in new Window. 13+: A poem a day, for 21 days.....
"Answer to Yesterday" Open in new Window.
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First Impression :
This reminded me so much of a sci-fi movie of the future. Loved the symbolism that you used!

Spelling and Grammar :
I did not detect any spelling or grammar errors.

Flow :
The flow from idea to idea transitions smoothly, and carries me with it.

Additional Comments :
Keep writing, I loved your play on words.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
A beautiful out pouring of love and fear and Faith. He will provide a way even when we feel there is none. Keep choosing to look to him. Keep writing!! There are many of us that have some of these same feeling.

God Bless

Dejaa

One little nit pick.. Did you mean.
"healed me hurts." ? my ?
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Review of Stall Call  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
What a fun fun poem. Very much enjoyed it...

Did you mean circled in red?

"a demon in bed"
was cicled in red,
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Review by Dejaa Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your story very much. Joy form Sorrow is quite a conundrum.

God Bless and have a Happy New Year
Dejaa
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Review by Dejaa Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is an awesome story, what a wonderful way to incorporate every thing in the prompt. I may stay away from fortune cookies for a while.. Ha Ha

God Bless and have a Happy New Year
Dejaa
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Review of Remembering Him  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That's what it's all about.
God Bless
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Review by Dejaa Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very Good story. I keep re-reading it and thinking it could be a little longer with more detail.
keep writing
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Review of Lacie's Garden  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A very good story. This could be illistrated beautifuly into a childrens book.
Keep writing
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Rated: E | (5.0)
May we all use this recipe through out the coming year(s),
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Review of I WAS  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Yes, it is very easy to relate to this poem. It is a good contrast of the forces in one's life. There are several different uses of rhyme types going on here, and several clever near rhyme that keep the flow moving. A couple of places feel like a stop with a ; could be used to break the thoughts. I really like this poem and hope to see more from you.

God Bless
Dejaa
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Beautiful story, this story would make any little girl feel special and wanted.
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Review of Halfway  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your poem is moving and thought provoking! I like the way it roll off the tongue. I'm curious; though, why did you choose surpassed in the first stanza? It seems that the visions of God had passed as in you could no longer see him.
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