Hey I really like your style choices and the topic of your story. I actually found it very interesting to read. A few small things I would change just to make the whole story more
1. At the beginning when you are introducing the story and setting the sentence "Piston City was home to many cats, lynxes, wildcats, dogs, wolves, foxes, and coyotes" I think kind of breaks up the flow.
2. I don't really think the sentence "They dined on their meals, laughed, and talked. He smiled at that before turning his attention to the city streets. " Flows or brings a lot of imortance to the story
But, besides those I think it is really good and enjoyed reading it!
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