Wow, whoever she was did a number on you, didn't she? I like the way you used the ocean, waves and sand castle as metaphors to describe your turbulent relationship and new beginnings.
I don't see any grammatical errors. Your poem flows nicely.
I hope you realize that they are plenty of fish in the sea (pun intended) and that not all women are like this.
What a truly touching and heartfelt poem. It certainly pulls at the heartstrings. I don't see any grammatical errors and the poem seems to flow nicely.
My favorite line was the last one. I believe that people know when they are about to die. Somehow, they just know.
I'm speechless. I know how difficult this must have been for you but the most important thing is that you, Dean and your cat survived. Remember that always! Things can be replaced - you cannot. I know that all too well.
Thanks for sharing such an emotional and personal piece.
This is such a beautiful poem. Truly heartfelt - I could definitely feel your anxiety!
The only grammatical error I see is in the last line of your first stanza. You are missing the last period of your ellipsis. Other than that, I don't see anything wrong with it.
This is a great poem! Unrequited love is something I'm sure everyone goes through at some point in their lives and, more often than not, it's a friend they love. I know I've certainly be there. Thanks so much for sharing your personal experience with unrequited love. I hope it all works out for you. Have you told your friend how you feel?
This is a very creative piece. It asks a quite complex question. You could ask a hundred different people what hunger means to them and you would probably get a hundred different answers. Thanks for sharing what it means to you.
I'll be sure to check out more of your work when I get a chance. Keep up the good work!
I really enjoyed this poem. It's very well written and flows nicely. Although it is true that beauty is in the eye of the beholder, it's also true that beauty is only skin deep. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work!
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