Hi strlcuckoo,
I'm reviewing your poem, "I Remember" , after seeing it on the Shameless Plug page. This is an adorable poem about childhood memories. The only thing I would change would be this line, "The fishing trips, the outdoors fun". I think "outdoors" should be "outdoor". That's the only thing I would change.
Thanks so much for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!!!
Hi Jamminbales,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Hope" . I really enjoyed this Shakespearean sonnet! I thought it was put together well and the rhyming does not seem forced at all. My favorite part is the following:
"The pain caused tonight will last for a long time
As we each seek to take our pound of flesh"
Thanks so much for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!!!
Hi Nightshift,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Watercolor Dreams" , after seeing it in this week's poetry newsletter. Your vivid imagery describes the true beauty of spring. I really enjoyed reading it. My favorite part is the following:
"With ardent strokes her brush paints the ‘scape,
Mother Nature’s artwork begins to take shape."
Mother Nature's artwork is truly beautiful! Thank you so much for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!!
Hi Yellow Rose,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Loss" . Loss is such a poweful emotion and it's something we all experience sooner or later. Your poem describes it perfectly with so few lines.
Thanks so much for sharing a little piece of yourself. Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!!!
Hi COUNTRYMOM,
I'm reviewing your poem, "THE HEALING TOUCH OF GOD'S HAND" , after seeing it in the Spiritual Newsletter. This is a wonderful poem and a lovely reminder that "He hears us and will always be there". That's so very true!
Thank you so much for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!
Hi Joy,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Relief" , after seeing it in the Spiritual Newsletter. This is a FABULOUS poem and it has truly inspired me. I've never written a poem in Ae Freslighe verse form and now I'm itching to try!
Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful piece! Keep up the great work and WRITE ON!!!!
Hi easyeverett,
I'm writing this review for your poem "Soft And Silken Hair" . I enjoyed this poem quite a bit. I could feel the depth of your emotion throughout. One thing I noticed is that this line, "My soul confront a dark and centered core.", I think it should actually be "confronts". I wouldn't change anything else.
Thanks so much for sharing. Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!
Hi Mrs. Populatery,
OK, let me start by saying that I think this is a good storyline but it needs some work. There are a lot of grammatical errors (misspellings, missing or incorrect punctuation, etc.). There are several places where the story gets a little...choppy, I think is probably the best way to explain it. It sort of jumps around or is inconsistent. I hope this isn't coming across as mean. It's really just constructive criticism. Again, you've got a good story here, there's just some things that need to be cleaned up a little. I'd be happy to help in any way I can, if you'd like, and even re-review it once the corrections have been made.
Let me know if you have any questions or need any help. Thanks for sharing!
Awesome blog! I've only read a few entries so far but I will definitely be reading more. I have to say "Doomsday" cracked me up! By the way, I'm a chick and I totally agree with you about VD. It's total BS. Flowers/gifts/whatever mean a lot more when they're given on a random day instead of being given on a bogus holiday.
You've got yourself a new blog follower! Keep up the great work and write on!!!
What a great tribute to your 2 best friends! I love my friends dearly and have written poems for them as well. Just one correction to this line, "of a heart the pumps such depth." It should be "that" instead of "the". Other than that, I wouldn't change a thing. Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work! Write on!!
This is a great poem! You really captured the rebirth of nature with the coming of Spring. Your vivid imagery and the use of the picture really take the reader to a beautiful Spring day. My favorite part was the following:
"The sycamores, the oaks, the beech,
reach heavenward as they beseech
the soft embrace of gentle rain;
a harmony of silent speech."
I wish you all the best in the contest! I'm sending 1,000 gift points with my review because I really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work! Write on!
Wow, you had me from the very first word. What an amazing twist at the end of this wonderful short story. I have to admit, I did not see that ending coming and it totally gave me chills! I wouldn't change a thing about this.
I enjoyed this so much that I'm sending 1,000 gift points along with my review. Enjoy! Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work! Write on!!
This was a great read! Thanks so much for sharing. Your imagery is awesome - I could picture what you were saying quite clearly. I wouldn't change a thing about it. Keep up the good work and write on!
I really liked your poem. Just a few suggestions. In the fifth line, "jewellery" should be "jewelry". Also, using some punctuation might help the flow a little better. Again, these are just my suggestions. Creative writing is just that, creative. Keep up the good work and write on!
This is a great poem! You were able to describe your feelings exactly with so few words/lines. I hope writing about your emotions helped you. I know it sure helps me!
This was a good poem about the possibility of a chance meeting. It made me ask the question, "what if?" We all ask ourselves that question sooner or later. I have a similar poem called "If...". Check it out if you have time.
This is an amazing poem and quite a tribute to those lost on that horrible day. I wouldn't change a thing about this poem - it's wonderful as is. I've also written a poem about that horrible day, if you'd like to check it out.
Hi Michael,
I enjoyed this poem. I could feel the emotion in your words. I've had a few turning points in my life as well so I can certainly relate. I don't see any grammatical errors but it looks like you were trying to center the poem because you have {/center}{/left} after the last line.
I hope everything has worked out for you since your turning point. I'd like to see more writing from you in the future!
Hi dannoden!
Your view on war is very astute. Are you in the military? This poem is quite moving and I'm sure your sentiments are shared by many, including myself.
You've done a great job with this - I wouldn't change a thing!
Hi G,
As promised, I stopped by to check out your new poem.
I really enjoyed this quite a bit. I think we all have moments where we feel like this.
My favorite part:
"Chasing after dreams, hoping for better,
just to catch a nightmare, worse than the last,
adding another ugly souvenir on the dusty shelf,
the one I keep in the back, hidden even from me,
hoping the dust will settle and cover them,
but still...
'Round and 'round I go."
Thanks so much for sharing. Keep up the good work!!
Hi Diane!
I can only imagine how embarrassing this must have been for you! I've actually had a nightmare just like this. Fortunately for me, it was only a nightmare.
I really enjoyed this short story of yours. I hate to admit I got a chuckle out of your embarrassing moment. I'm sure you've since been able to laugh about it as well.
I see no grammatical errors at all - you've done a fantastic job! Thanks so much for sharing. Keep up the great work!
Hi Jaye P. Marshall!
Wow, what an amazing story! I truly believe that things like this happen every day. Our dreams/nightmares can foretell events to come.
My favorite part:
"Suddenly the bright sunlight seemed to waver and the scene she was viewing seemed to pulsate back and forth - toward her, then away again."
Thanks so much for sharing! Keep up the good work!!
Hi Ẃeβ࿚Ẃỉtcĥ!
What an eerily wonderful short story you have here! I really enjoyed your frightening tale of dark pixies and vampires.
My favorite part (because it builds the suspense):
"Dark fairies prey on the souls of the lowest form of human existence, thus, we actually do society a favor. Our pixie appearance gives us the innocent look needed to be great bait."
Thanks so much for sharing! Keep up the good work!!
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