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Review of Letter from Home  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Bonnie Author Icon,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your contest, "Letter from Home" Open in new Window..

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What an incredibly awesome, amazing, outstanding thing you're doing here! This is a FANTASTIC idea!! I'm surprised no one thought of doing something like this sooner. Our brave men and women fighting overseas are the reason we all have the right to well...write. *BigSmile* We should all be taking the time to thank them for all that they do.

I'm shocked *Shock* that this hasn't received an awardicon yet. I'll be taking care of that shortly! *Wink* I'm also going to be working on my letter that I'll be submitting for this wonderful contest.

Thank you for taking the time to honor those who serve. Kudos to you for doing this!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sharkdaddy Author Icon,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your short story, "How I became Sharkdaddy" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I like titles that make the reader think. This title definitely had me thinking, "Hmmmm, I wonder what he did?" *BigSmile* *Wink*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. Good job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a very cute story explaining how you became "Sharkdaddy". I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of It's My Toy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Liam Author Icon,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "It's My Toy" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I like your title. I think it's a lot of fun! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. You've done the Rhyme Royal well. Iambic pentameter is my favorite! You've done an excellent job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great choice of words. I sent absolutely no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, it's great just the way it is!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a masterfully written piece. My favorite part would have to be your first line, "There are no sweet dreams still to dream today". It opens your poem well and opens the imagination of the reader for the great read they have ahead of them. *Delight* Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

I see that you're a "newbie". I encourage you to look into some of the newbie groups that are offered. They're awesome!

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Happy Spring Author Icon,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your short story, "Amanda's Magnificent Obsession" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
An interesting title for a unique flash fiction story.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good, especially since you weren't able to have any repeats for this prompt. I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I would suggest making this longer so the storyline is more clear. As it is, it leaves the reader a bit confused.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of The Betrayal  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi E E Coder Author Icon,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your short story, "The Betrayal" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
After reading the story, the title definitely fits.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is very good. I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. Great job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a great story but, I have to tell you, it made me cry. I am a huge dog lover...and I have a Black Lab! The part that really got me was your ending:

"Buddy was a large black Labrador and fought the losing battle valiantly until he managed to crawl into the safety of the thicket. As he lay there with his life draining into the mud, he wondered if he had been a bad dog." *Cry*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of A Writer's Home  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi winklett Author Icon,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "A Writer's Home" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your title fits your poem well. This site is, after all, a writer's home "away" from home. Great job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This poem flows well and the line breaks are appropriately placed. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great use of vocabulary! I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None at all!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your poem is a lovely tribute to this wonderful site! Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maryann Author Icon,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "The Magnitude of Stars" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
What a wonderful title! Astronomy fascinates me so your title is what lead me to open this and read it. I'm so glad I did! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The flow of your poem is magnificent! Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. I love your a-a-a-a b-b-b-b rhyme scheme also. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is excellent! I see absolutely no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None whatsoever. *BigSmile*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I could picture the stars in the Heavens as I was reading this. I love the whole poem but, if I had to pick a favorite part, it would be the following:

"The magnitude of stars is majestic, they say,
In the incredibly enchanting Milky Way."

That's amazing! Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Mr. Prendergast  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Jakrebs Author Icon,
I'm reviewing your short story, "Mr. Prendergast" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great title! It doesn't give any hint to the content within your story so it keeps the reader guessinng...and quite intrigued. *Wink*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I really like how you used your words in this short story. You made it sound like a homeless person. I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, I love it just the way it is!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
You have a wonderful imagination! Wow, I am speechless after reading that. While I was reading your story I had a feeling I knew who (or what) Mr. Prendergast was and how the story would end but I did not see the part about the youngest son coming! You're an amazing writer with exceptional talent. I can't wait to read more of your work!!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Love poem  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi ewai Author Icon,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "Love poem" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I think your title is more of a description. Is there another title that would better fit your poem and show the depth of the emotion and just how far someone would go?

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. The only spelling error I see is in your first line, "aline" should be "align".

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
My only suggestion would be to keep the number of lines per stanza the same. Your first stanza has 5 lines, the next 2 have 4 lines and your last stanza has 6 lines. I don't think it detracts from your poem but I think it would help the reader follow your thoughts and feelings a little better.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I like this free verse poem you've written. I think you did a good job with it.

I see that you're a "newbie" here at WDC. Welcome aboard! I encourage you to look into some of the newbie groups that are offered.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Day Dreaming Mind  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi TM Crane Author Icon,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "Day Dreaming Mind" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A good title for the one you're meant to be with...someday. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The flow is good but I think it could be just a little bit better. I think the third line should end after the word "face". Then your fourth line would be "with just the thought of him". The fifth line might read better as "He puts a tear in my eye when I miss him". The rest of your line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. I don't see any spelling errors. Good job! The only recommendation for punctuation are what I have listed above.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I really enjoyed this free verse poem of the one you'll meet some day. I like how you ended this poem with a question. Is it a dream or will it be reality someday? That was excellent! This was a thoroughly enjoyable read.

I see that you're a "newbie" to WDC (as of today). Welcome aboard! I encourage you to look into some of the newbie groups that are offered.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of THE LAST TREE  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi markymark Author Icon,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "THE LAST TREE" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A great title that gets the reader "thinking" even before they've started reading the poem. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The flow of your poem is quite good. Line-to-line transition and breaks are excellent. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great choice of words that are both thought-provoking and powerful. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, I think it's great!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This poem captivated me from the beginning. My favorite part, and also the most powerful, is the following:

"Don't they know that in life
there are no guarantees?
We still could be left
in a world without trees."

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi spidey Author Icon,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "in the shade of the cherry tree" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your title fits your poem well.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Good word choice. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I love cherry trees! *Heart* Every spring I look forward to seeing them come into bloom. Their blossoms are amazing and your poem captures it so well. My favorite part is the following:

"I close my eyes, spread my arms,
Taking in the peaceful feeling;
I feel the blossoms dance
in the shade of the cherry tree."

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi typingrhyme Author Icon,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "A WALK IN THE PARK" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great title! Who doesn't love a walk in the park? *Wink*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great word choice. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I adore how you ended this poem. It is, by far, my favorite part:

"Have a little picnic.
Invite a friend or two.
Just relax in the sun.
The park is there for you."

I felt as though I was having a perfect picnic in the park with my friends! This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Well done. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of The River  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi CHarris Author Icon,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "The River" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your title is short, sweet and to the point. It suits your poem well. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The flow and rhythm of your poem are quite good. You have an excellent rhyme scheme too. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your vocabulary is great. It creates a picture of your lovely river within the mind of the reader. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Absolutely none! I think it's perfect. *Delight*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a beautiful poem. I can tell that this is a very special place to you. It comes across in your words. My favorite part is the following:

"And if I shut my eyes, and then listen close
to the birds, cicadas, and the summer breeze,
ruffling green oak leaves, I can hear the ghosts
of those who came to share what the river sees."

If I close my eyes, I can see it too! This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of The Finger Lakes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi T.L.Finch Author Icon,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I'm reviewing your poem, "The Finger Lakes" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm and an excellent rhyme scheme. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is quite good, offering the reader a "peek" into the area. Your spelling and grammar are flawless. Great job! One minor thing that I do see is at the bottom, under your picture. You have a "}" in your by-line.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a well-written piece reflecting on the beauty and wonder that Mother Nature has granted the Finger Lakes area. My husband and I have been thinking of a long weekend to the area to check out the wineries and local scenery. Your poem started that conversation again. *Wink*

The addition of the picture at the bottom of the poem is a nice touch. It's a beautiful picture and helps the reader envision the lovely area you're describing. My favorite part is the following:

"A brighter day has come about,
the outlook is brand new.
The green of spring is peeking out
and here for all to view."

This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Well done! Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of The Bequest  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi 🌖 HuntersMoon Author Icon,

I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your poem, "The Bequest" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great title! It's very thought-provoking and fits your poem well. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your flow and line-to-line transition is good. I'm counting 8 syllables per line, making it flow easily while reading it. Rhythm is good also. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is quite good. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I like the addition of the picture. That, along with your words, pull at the familial heartstrings in all of us. My favorite part was the following:

"He took his grandson by the hand
and, in the small copse, patiently,
explained that each tree in the stand
had been planted by his family."

This made me think of my times as a child when I helped my grandpop in his garden. *Heart*

This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Well done! Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Thaddeus Buxton Winthrop Author Icon,

I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your poem, "Early Morning Treats" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I love your title! *Heart* Indeed, what a treat!! *Wink*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
It could just be me but I think the meter might be slightly off in your second stanza. I think it's that third line that's throwing it off. Again, that might just be me.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Excellent word choice that is so vividly expressive! Well done! I think the first line of your last stanza might read a little easier if you add a comma after "finest".

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I felt as though I was drinking my cup of coffee and breathing in the air of a fresh, new day! My favorite part is the following:

"Auburn with purple and pinkish hues,
Beautiful colors all meld.
Scarlet-orange with a splash of blues.
Mother Nature makes the weld."

I can actually picture it! Great job! *Star*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of I Am  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lilyx* Author Icon,
I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your poem, "I Am" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This title fits your poem well.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I think there are a few places where the meter might be off slightly but it doesn't detract from the poem. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Excellent word choice and I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
On a personal level, this poem touched me deeply. I almost died and the feelings/thoughts/emotions I have from that experience are expressed so beautifully in your poem. You will be receiving an awardicon from me shortly! *Wink*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Your Last Chance  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Incurable Romantic Author Icon,
I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your essay, "Your Last Chance" Open in new Window.. Your name, Incurable Romantic, is what drew me to your port in the first place. I am a hopeless romantic myself. This was the first item I read but I will certainly be going through others! *Wink*

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This is a very fitting title that fits your essay well. *Star*

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You are very descriptive in your writing, which is excellent. It's something we all strive for as writers. You've done it well. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

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This was absolutely amazing! While I was reading it, there were several places where I actually got chills. One of those times was this:

"But when I walked in and found her later that night, I was never more relieved and thankful that we'd made saying those "I Love You"s a very important part of our life."

I lost both of my parents when I was in my 20s. When my mom died, I was the one that found her. Almost 6 years later, I still have the occasional nightmare from that.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Night's Spell  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Kim Author Icon,
I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your poem, "Night's Spell" Open in new Window..

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A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

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Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

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Your word choice is good. I see no spelling errors. Adding some punctuation might help add emphasis.

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This is a beautiful poem. I just wish it was longer. I think you have really good thoughts here that you can expand on.

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This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Well done. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of A Prism  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon,
I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your poem, "A Prism" Open in new Window..

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A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

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Your word choice is excellent! I don't see any misspellings. Punctuation doesn't apply with this form.

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None, it's wonderful just the way it is! *Star*

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Diamante is such a cool form of poetry. You've done an excellent job with it! I've never tried it but you've certainly inspired me to do so. This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Well done. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of For you...  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Bigjosh52629 Author Icon,
I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your poem, "For you..." Open in new Window..

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A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

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Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

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Your word choice is good. I would suggest adding some punctuation to add impact and emphasis. Also, in the next to the last line "Its" should be "It's".

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This was a good read. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of A Dark Dream  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi love love Author Icon,
I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your poem, "A Dark Dream" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. There are several errors that I saw. "Peirce" should be "pierce" and "plase" should be "place". Also, the first line of your last stanza, it should be "too" instead of "to".

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This was a good read. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Photograph  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi bloodyrose Author Icon,
I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your poem, "Photograph" Open in new Window..

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A very fitting title for your poem about remembered snapshots of time for a friendship that is no longer.

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Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

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Your word choice is good. In your second line, it should be "laughter" as that is also the plural.

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In your 5th stanza, you change tense. The first line is written in past tense but the second line is present tense. I think you probably mean it be past tense so "come" should be "came".

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This was a good poem. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi crandejr Author Icon,
I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! Author Icon and I’m reviewing your poem, "Heart of the Storm" Open in new Window..

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Good word choice. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Good job! *Star*

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None

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This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Well done. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

I see that you're a newbie. I encourage you to look into some of the awesome newbie groups here at WDC.

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