I believe you, as you reminisce of times of old. It was nice to see the past through your words. Nicely done.
Your memories have become your treasures, of which only you see the true gold. Thank you for sharing.
This is a good analysis of writing to be published. While, I do feel the self-published method is easier and more cost-effective. I do agree that writing is the easy part. Editing and publishing are more difficult.
It is a nice short story.
I'm not sure which font you are using or if you have used bold, but it is hard to read. Also, there should be an extra line break between paragraphs, which will also make it easier to read.
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It all began **in a stormy morning in the calm town of Bideford.
**replace in with on
Dark stormy clouds, heavy with water vapour, lay hovering over the town** closing the sun's bright morning sunlight.
** add a comma after town
A cold** stormy wind howled around the town, making trees groan.
**add a comma after cold
Inside a **two storeyed house was a **strong built 13-year old boy dressing hurriedly for school.
** add a hyphen between two and storeyed
** add a hyphen between strong and built
Thunder crashed **and lightning struck above.
**add a comma after crashed
To his enormous surprise, he saw that the front door had been unlocked and **opened a crack.
** add word [was] before opened
Guy felt as if he was being watched **and he turned sharply around.
** add a comma after watched
No one was **there in the streets.
** delete word [there] not necessary or replace line with [There was no one in the streets.]
**Curiosity got ahead of him and Guy tiptoed to the front door.
** suggestion line replacement [His curiosity spiked as he tiptoed to the front door.]
Inside was a small living room, with a now **moth eaten sofa, **expensive looking fittings and a **marble topped table.
** add a hyphen between moth and eaten
** add a hyphen between expensive and looking
** add a hyphen between marlbe and topped
The walls were covered with cobwebs **and the curtains were thick with dust.
** add a comma after cobwebs
**The walls seemed to listen and closing in. Suddenly SLAM went the door shut.
** suggestion line replacement [The house seemed to be listening in, and suddenly the door slammed shut.]
The room darkened **and thunder crashed above the house.
** add a comma after darkened
A cold wind shifted near Guy and **send a chill down his spine.
** replace send with sent
A bright light illuminated the whole room **and **on the far corner of the room was a small boy in a life jacket.
** add acomma after room
** replace on with in
The boy walked near **to Guy, **its footsteps sounding wrong and stretched.
** delete the word to or change it to [toward]
** replace its with his
Guy felt adrenaline churning through his veins **and his heart beat faster than ever.
** add a comma after veins
"The house must be remembered**" the boy said in a chill whisper. "The front door should be remembered".
** add a comma after remembered before the "
Guy nodded his head to prove that he **understands.
** replace understands with understood
"Thank you**" said the ghost boy and shimmered into the musty air.
** add a comma after you and before "
The storm blew over **and a ray of sunlight penetrated through the clouds.
** add a comma after over
The house was never strange, the front door was remembered daily **and it remained locked.
** add a comma after daily
**Guy now knew that locked doors that had never been locked before are not just mysterious but contain things to be remembered.
** suggestion line replacement [Guy now knew what a locked door symbolized. A locked door was no longer a mystery; it simply contained things to be remembered.]
This item is marked as a children's item, which seems appropriate. It is an amusing story of a bat with a personality and many friends who indulge his misfortune by attempting to teach him how he can accomplish his goals. With a mix of humour, comedy, and a touch of drama, this short story is complemented with simple-to-read chapters.
First response: WOW
This has been written with so much thought and perfectly delivered. No word is misplaced, or meaning lost in each line, providing an impact of what had been and now is. Very nicely done.
I was born in '58, and your first paragraph hit home for me. Those were the golden days.
As for your article, it was certainly an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.
I personally wouldn't consider this a poem, but rather an article of thought. The first part was easy to read and understand the thought process. The second part did not complement the first; rather, it left a series of questions for the reader to determine what was and what was not viable. However, the wording left more confusion than resolution for me.
It was an interesting read. Your last line, I believe, the word extinguishes s/b extinguish.
The story was nicely written, and served well to show that the importance of an adult's profession can sometimes exclude a child from doing something with their parent.
The characters seemed very true to form, the parent not really busy in a physical sense but mentally exhausted from his profession. The boy was reserved, and yet it was apparent that he had at one time reached a breaking point with his parent and now treaded carefully. Based on the storyline, the characters were great.
This item was an enjoyable read and was written nicely.
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Daily Writing Challenge (E) Can you write every day? Well then, sign up and prove it. February 2026 Challenge #799460 by Wannabe
Good use of the rhyming method. Not certain why the long dashes were required. Double use of through at the start of lines 1 and 2 in stanza 3. Perhaps: An intense clawing pain and a throat, bone-dry. Written words provided a good visual.
And now that the good kids have got their wish, I think the good adults should, too.
- In this line, l would replace 'got' with gotten.
This was a quicker read than I anticipated, but it was good. I'm guessing it was a play off the Harry Potter characters :)
I hope you did well in the competition. Sorry, I wasn't on site to review it before the closing date.
Not sure of the style of poetry here - sorry, but it does have a nice read to it, flows well, and provides a mini story where you can fill in the blanks to the meaning of the line. All in all, good use of the 8 words you were given. "Daily Writing Challenge"
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