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Item's Title Last Moments
My Favorite Parts
Good title/description
Good, but sad, topic
Good description
Conversation
Flow/pace
Questions or Confusions
--None
Some Fixings
--None that I saw!
Overall Impression...
Sad, heart wrenching--yet powerfully moving and motiviating! The amount of love these two sisters had for each other beamed brightly in every word they spoke, in every touch, in every second they were together--even if it was just fictional.
Their emotions were raw but real. their conversations were real, something that woudl happen any day, any time. And the subject matter was very relatable.
I loved the place you chose to have them meet--they picture only enhanced it and made it more stunning in my mind! The ending was sweet; I liked the little angel and how it, and the meeting with Haven, brought closure to Julia.
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Item's Title Tanya
My Favorite Parts
Great description to draw people in to read your work
Love, love, LOVE Vampires!
Refrence to Bella and Edward--that was great! it's a current thing and not worn out yet
LOTS of detail in a perfectly delievered way
Questions or Confusions
When will it be continued?
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"...seemed to twinkle in elation as well, above all those ..>" Should Be: I think the 'as well' slows it down so try: seemed to twinkle in elation above all those
You Wrote:"Just that single word seemed to flow like music to Tanya's ears." Should Be: I think it should be reworded-slwo for me. Maybe like... Hearing her name on his lips played like a beautiful melody....Hearing him speak her name flowed to Tanya like music to a musician...maybe use a similie.
You Wrote:"..when he spoke as well, as if rejoicing those words of his." Should Be: Again, slow and the as well made it choppy
Overall Impression...
Short and sweet--an interesting prologue. It definetly makes me crave the fruit of knowledge for what the heck happens with the two!
Your descriptions were excellent--not too much not too little--VERY good at show don't tell
Other than above, I don't have any other suggestions! Although I do wonder of her appearance..how they met, where this is going etc etc
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You Wrote:" After Rahul’s latest outburst ..." Should Be:Rahul's-->Scott's
You Wrote:"...and shelter manager Steve’s passionate persuasion. " Should Be:manage, Steve's,
You Wrote:".. had aroused Ria‘s protective ..." Should Be:Ria's -->Anna
You Wrote:"...stretched in contentedly on the .." Should Be: stretched contentedly
Overall Impression...
It was a cute story; I loved the dogs, their personality, their profile--very cute!
I reccomend that you make the section titles different--like bold, color etc them or something so that it makes more sense...I didn't understand at first, but afterwards it was really cute and I liked that a lot. I also like the ending a lot. Very cute that she ended up with Steve!
Item's Title Diamonds are for Forever- or are they?
My Favorite Parts
Cute title/description
Unique names/story
Was quick and short but good
Questions or Confusions
See below
Some Fixings
I didn't see any
Overall Impression...
There weren't any grammatical errors, spelling, sentence structure, etc like that that I saw so that's a plus. I also liked the names of your characters; it was unique and cute. The story line was one that is often done--girl marries controling, self-absorbed guy and meets new guy she's really into, so she has an affair. Classic, but you added some uniqe touches and made it your own.
You have a good beginning to your story and it was enjoyable, I'll give you that. However, I felt like the story was missing parts.
One thing, where are the descripitions? What do your characters look like, especially the man she's having an affair with. You don't have to, but you could go into detail abit in their love affair to show how or why he's so great in her mind.
Next, the missing parts. Towards the ending, you have your MC go home from the affair then she's suddenly leaving her friend's house. What happened there? It happened sooo fast that I was like woah-how did that happen? I thought I missed something. I reccomend adding detail there.
But by the way, the strategy the girls use is very good--that's very uniqe and very clever =)
Lastly, so did Tina tell the husband about the affair? Why did Tina keep the necklace?
You Wrote:"As the stork went up on her shelf, she overheard a conversation" Should Be:period after conversation
You Wrote: "Ir's you, isn't it?" asked the ceramic duck. Should Be:It's
You Wrote:"Can a crystal stork and a ceramic duck find hapiness?" Should Be: happiness
Overall Impression...
This was a sad story at first that ended with the two lovers being brought together even if it was through being broken.
The story, when it started, and up until the two 'animals' were moved to a new place, reminded me somewhat of an old, married couple. They love each other and are fully, completely devoted to each other but...they don't act like it. They don't touch, they don't laugh, they don't speak...they co-exist around each other YET are fully aware of each other's presence.
You did an amazing job on "Show, don't tell"--I do believe I turned green with envy when I first read the first paragraph. I was like "wow...I can totally see it."
what little speech there was, was adequate and fit the situations well. I loved that while the 'animals' could always see each other, they never spoke or anything. yet...they were together and happy.
Pretty good all around and it was romantic, sad, dramatic. A good story all around
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Item's Title Different and Cool-Part 5
My Favorite Parts
Good speach the two made
Good reactions
Good ending
Questions or Confusions
None
Some Fixings
Didn't see any this round
Overall Impression...
Quick chapter--very cute picture at the end!! I it! Tarah is just so cute; I think she is by far my fave out of the bunch.
I liked that you did this book in parts--each day was a chapter; that was really unique when coupled with the assignment and the events that happened. Really nice!
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Item's Title Different and Cool-Part 4
My Favorite Parts
Good events and convo
Mari scene
Questions or Confusions
--None
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"..Tarah was least liked person .." Should Be:the least liked
Overall Impression...
I recommend that you italzie their thoughts instead of (); it works better.
You did well again on showing how teenagers act--especially with the notebook thing; that is so childish yet very typical of teen boys.
I liekd that you had he and Mari talk--he wasn't even nervous or anything! Now...am anxious to the see the ending
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Item's Title Different and Cool-Part 3
My Favorite Parts
Love the title, by the way--fits really well
haha bathroom scene
Questions or Confusions
-None
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"OOutside Starlight Jr. High, there was..." Should Be:Outside
You Wrote:"...small hallways of thge complex, ..." Should Be:the
Overall Impression...
I think you chose well by having Andy open up to Tarah about his parents; I also think you did well on showing their emotions and actions after they kissed, well she kissed him. Very teen like.
The boys in the locker room was hilarious; I laughed so hard mainly b/c it reminded me of a time my friends and I did the same thing! Haha, they never tried to get back in there...
Good job
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Item's Title Different and Cool-Part 2
My Favorite Parts
Sad thing is, I could soooo picture the total chaos such an assignment can produce! haha
Good dialouge
Nice events/incidents/action
Questions or Confusions
Where are Andy's parents?
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"It's was bad they were losing; the teacher..." Should Be:Not sure what you were trying to say?
You Wrote:"...his accession of his friends' fancies...and into a fancy all his own..." Should Be:I believe you mean fantasies not fancy? fancies-->fantasies, fancy->fantasy
Overall Impression...
Once again, not too many errors in grammar/spelling etc. You're pretty decent at that. Your characters are becoming more developed so and their personalities shine through each scene they are in.
Did I miss something about what happened to Andy's parents?
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Item's Title Different and Cool-Part 1
My Favorite Parts
Cute little Tarah
Interesting subject
I like the subject of the assignment
Questions or Confusions
--None
Some Fixings
--Didn't see any!
Overall Impression...
Good character development; their personalities came out strongly in the little that was provided. There was good conversation flow, veyr typical of teens, good content.
I think every teen should be given that assignment from Clark and see what they do...that would be interesting.
You also created relatable moments that probably everyoen has witnessed like the spitballs--I have to say I have seeen that quite a few times in my life lol
I'm interested to see where this little project/story goes...
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Item's Title Diem
My Favorite Parts
Interesting idea
I the name Diem
I the spell she did; that was a cute idea!
Questions or Confusions
See below
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"... me the silence treatment.." Should Be:silent
You Wrote:"Diem at her brother, mad. She fell to her bed, frustrated." Should Be:Don't do that. SHOW how he is mad, SHOW how she is frustrated...that's bad to keep writing it that way. It makes your writing appear weak.
Overall Impression...
I don't remember reading the first chapter so I am a little confused...
Despite that, you should detail the mission a bit to let the reader in on it a little more. You need to work on SHOW as well; SHOW DON'T TELL!! That's the most important thing ever to learn as a writer! Show how she was mad, how she felt, how everyone you mentioned felt. How did the mansion look? was it huge, small, purple, green, brick, wood, did it have towers, how many floors? Etc...see where I'm going?
I do think you have a good idea here so keep writing...just show more.
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Item's Title Racial Discrimination
My Favorite Parts
Nice examples used
Good 'voice'
Point/opinion clear
Questions or Confusions
This piece is focused on observations from Taiwan, correct?
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"I would like to talk about racial discrimination, which stood out notoriously in the history." Should Be:Might sound better if you just say something like "Racial discrimination has stood out notoriously throughout histroy." We already know what you are goign to talk about so you don't need to say "I would like to talk..."
Overall Impression...
Let me start off by saying that I agree with you that discrimination will never be rid of. It will always exist no matter what the people of this world do. I also agree that people shoudl learn not to sterotype people just by their race. An example would be 911--ALL muslims/Arabics etc are clumped into the 'terrorist' category b/c of it and it isn't right...
anyway, good right--you did well on getting your point across; your view/opinions were clear and you had agood strong voice.
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Item's Title Looking for adventure
My Favorite Parts
Awesome description in the opening paragraph
I liked the characters a lot
Storyline
Questions or Confusions
"...He rolled his eyes and knocked again.
sounded inside the house. The doorknob ..."
What?
Some Fixings
--Didn't see any
Overall Impression...
***If you are going to use hyphens to signal speech come up wiht a better system..it looked messy
Awesome story idea! It was very unique, one I haven't come across before! Right away you started with the drama--who is this hooded figure adn where is he going? answered of course, but really good job on peeking the interest of the reader.
Good job all around!
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Awww very sweet! Too bad that fairy doesn't really exist--could use that these days! However, if it were always lollypops, gum drups, and rainbows I don't think the world woudl be as fun...It might get a little dull--the drama, bad things, keep us moving on. How else would we learn from our mistakes you know? Even though a LOT of bad things happen, like the things the fairy inyour poem want to heal and/or get rid of, they help us out b/c they teach us lots of things on a daily baisis that I don't think we'd learn in a perfect world.
Anyway, good poem--flowed well, made me feel and smile. I didn't see any errors and found it to be a very sweet poem! Gooooooooood job ma'am!
BTW, you said non-rhyming but some end words in each stanza did rhyme! haha, nice job for unintentional =)
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Item's Title The Charm Bracelet
My Favorite Parts
Love the cat
The bracelet sounds beautiful
I liked the situation--girl wanting inspiration, it was acute and unique way played out
Good ending
Questions or Confusions
**See at the end about Alice
**The ending, see below
Some Fixings
--None that I saw--you write very well
Overall Impression...
Was a cute story; I personally didn't find it chilling just interesting. I have seen this kind of thing done before dozens of times, the part about the shop being at the end of the alley one night and the next it's gone...that's done a lot. I know the prompt for this round b/c I had thought about entering myself so I think you did a good job at using the prompt in a unique way. I did like the ending with the cat walking away-that was cute.
Onto my confusions/questions...
You said that Alice was exotic looking...but how? You didn't describe her at all really.
You wrote "A sudden shiver crept down Elena's spine as something unpleasant dawned on her." BUT you didn't explain it...what's with that?
So does the narrarotor have insipration still? Does she write on? What happens wiht the cat/woman?
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Item's Title Secret Admirer
My Favorite Parts
Interesting title and description
Great story line
LOVE the ending
Questions or Confusions
--None
Some Fixings
--Didn't see any...
Overall Impression...
Well that was certinaly emotional and ...devastating! Wow! I didn't see that ending coming but it fit great! I liked that you ended with teh Romeo and Juliette quote although clearly that was NOT their relationship.
I liked the little girl with a crush fantasy thing that was going on--the whole ,he says one thing but the girl hears what she desires him to say...I think everyone has gone through that BUT not the ending lol
Good story!
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Item's Title Discarded
My Favorite Parts
LOL--first have to say, random story idea but it worked great!
the story line
conversation that really wasn't a convo between teh dress and the girl
Questions or Confusions
--None
Some Fixings
None
Overall Impression...
Nice unique story!! I've never come across one one like that--I loved the dress in the closet and even though you couldn't heaer what was said on the phone, one could draw conclusions adn it was pretty typical of a teen. Been there done that, fun till it's over.
No suggestions of change really, thought it was well written and thorough.
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Item's Title Yesterday's Child
My Favorite Parts
It was interesting pretty much the whole way through so I was able to read it quickly and stay interested, hungry for more.
Awesome plot
Loved the ending/Les
Questions or Confusions
--None
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"how much more can I loss? Can ..." Should Be:loss-->loose
You Wrote:" I have to get make to the hospital." Should Be:get to the
Overall Impression...
I really liked this story. It is very typical of the time period but you made it your own; you took a classic story, tweaked it in all the right spots and made it unique. My favorite part was when Les came in and told her he was going to bethe father and all. It takes a brave, strong man to do that and he became an amazing father to all their children. I don't ahve any suggestions of change or anything; it was really good.
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Item's Title I Never Left
My Favorite Parts
The title is strong and gives the fortelling of something bad
the description made me laugh and I just had to read it, especially with what you wrote
I love how you wrote this; flows great
the poem/riddle you added at the end
Questions or Confusions
I am curious as to what you made you write this
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"Of Course you..." Should Be:Course-->course
You Wrote:"Some Kind of monster..." Should Be:Kind-->kind
You Wrote:"...ith a smile to wide to fit your screens.." Should Be:too wide to
You Wrote:"What a riddle Am I." Should Be:am
Overall Impression...
Wow. That is a very powerful and moving story. It may be short but it is straight to the point; a point that is delievered powerfully. I like how you chose different, classic monsters to compare hate to such as vampires. That really added a personal touch.
But my favorite part was the ending where you did the riddle/poem. You wrote that very well and althought it's the sad, grim truth, it was great!
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Item's Title I don't know yet
My Favorite Parts
Good details in the beginning of the type of sorrow she felt; it made me feel
cute names; although Cayden isn't as rare as hers
Questions or Confusions
I'm puzzled as to where this story is going...
Some Fixings
--None that I saw, you wrote very well
Overall Impression...
It was a good story; lots 'show, don't tell' detail and such, however I am puzzled as to where it is going.
One can gather by the way Aurora acted that she is in an abusive relationship. One can forsee that Cayden may perhaps have a roll in her future; maybe he helps her get away?
regardless, come up with a title...i suggest something to do with struggles, or overcoming a great battle. Maybe "The Rising of Aurora" or "Aurora's Rising"
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Item's Title All Gods' Children, chapter 1
My Favorite Parts
I liked that Nana spoke german and that she had to be and have things translated--with that,I love that Paulus lied about what she said to Murphy--that was cute
Very good family ties
Questions or Confusions
I think you need to introduce Paulus quicker--I was under the impression it was a girl getting beat up lol I also thought they were children--HOWEVER, it was a good intro
Skunk? what was tha tabout
Some Fixings
None that I saw
Overall Impression...
I thought it was a godo beginning, definietly has me curious enough to keep reading--why the heck was a grown woman beating him up? at first i thought, ex lover really pissed off lol but...It was very interesting to have the family all protective over Murphy when she was the one beating their relative up! It made me chuckle, several times I laughed--which is good.
You definetly started out good...I wanan read more and see what's really going on here!
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WOW! That was a really touching song...although I am certain it sounds better when put to music, most songs do. But that was really powerful...moving..touching......emotional. You did an amazing job on it and it fit's its purpose perfectly. I would suggest maybe bfore you go into the song, writing a couple sentences explaining what it is for.
But otherwise, it was a really good song that even rhymed! GREAT JOB!
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Item's Title "Who was my Father?"
My Favorite Parts
Obnce again, you picked a great title and wrote a good description that would have drew me in even without you requesting a review.
Plot
Questions or Confusions
I am curious as to where you come up with such story ideas!
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"...about her condition then her specialists." Should Be:then-->than
Overall Impression...
Very sad story...it was also moving and powerful, and uplifting at the same time. I was shocked to find out who Steven really was and could see why then she had never told Noni...but at the same time i was upset she didn't tell her. I mean, the mom was obviously so proud and happy as to who he was, she didn't care, she was in love! But it seemed she was ashamed to tell Noni the truth.
All in all, a good read!
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Item's Title Dear Joe, Paid in Full
My Favorite Parts
"Joe continued to have and forget women as fast as he asked their name." made me chuckle
Interesting story line/plot
Questions or Confusions
--none
Some Fixings
You Wrote: "... hits and is now seeks a leader." Should Be:now seeks a leader.
You Wrote:"tear in the wind as anxious ghosts with secrets that cannot rest." Should Be: not sure what you mean here
You Wrote:"...to Mad Dog Joe 's songs." Should Be:Joe's
Overall Impression...
Overall, it was a good and sad story. I thought it held lessons in it for anyone of any age as long as they take the time to read it. It was written well, the story was told, explained well what was needed to explain. the hand print was a unique trait/aspect to the story that I have never seen done before. that made it very uinque and special-something that just makes it perfect, an added touch...what happeend to the print? does he still have it?
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Item's Title She was the Quiet One
My Favorite Parts
Interesting title and description; even without having you requested it I would have been intrigued and curious enough to read it. (That's key to getting reviews)
"She was christening years of her own neglect, as Daddy had celebrated Anita’s life, with gasoline in place of champagne." A very powerful statement that says a LOT.
Good plot!!
Questions or Confusions
"Phillip had raised the girls after Margaret died giving birth to a stillborn son."
In the beginnign you said their mother's name was Ariana
Some Fixings
You Wrote:"He would never mean to harm but their lives revolved around his." Should Be:This is just worded odd...I had to read it several times.
You Wrote:"A harp solo by an gifted friend was a..." Should Be:an--> a
You Wrote:"The sisters, Anita and Alice were planning ..." Should Be: Alice,
You Wrote:"...cataloging, packing and dividing their Dad's art." Should Be:packing,
You Wrote:‘Damn his soul to Hell for ignoring me,’ Alice thought as she..." Should Be:since it's her thoughts, italize it
You Wrote:"go back to a therapist" Should Be:needs a period
Overall Impression...
WOW--I did NOT expect it to go this way! I did notice that Alice seemed to be neglected throughout the story and it was all about Anita, but I did not expect the way it went...
Rather good story I thought, good twists adn turns, good emotions, plot...all good for the most part.
Did Phillip really die of natural causes? Why did he never paint Alice?
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Good title/description
Questions or Confusions 
--None that I saw!
Should Be: I think the 'as well' slows it down so try: seemed to twinkle in elation above all those