I like how the first paragragh it seems as though this is a historical piece talking about the Appalachia and the civil war then transforms into the modern you with your bass boat, new vehicle. That is a great way of displaying how the past is a part of you.
You could explain TVA. I vaguely remember that the last two initials are Valley Authority, but do not remember the rest.
I thought that tornadoes did not hit the Appalachian area since tornadoes avoid high country.
You left me hanging! I am going to search your port and hope you wrote more about the people you have lost on Massacre mountain.
This was good. I hope you have written more about Appalachia.
Jello
This is a really neat story, I like how you bring history to life and make it exciting.
The ending was dramatic and beautiful. He threw away the gold and rescued someone with golden eyes who must be the real treasure. I found the first 3 sentences hard to understand at first and had to reread them. Then it was like a beautiful flower opened and revealed a beautiful story.
I became a fan so I can read other things you write.
This is the only Victorian image I see. It is beautiful. I hope in the future that you will carry more from the 1800's. Have you seen the free clip art through the Dover Catalog? The guy smoking the long pipe in Victorian clothing would probably sell well for you.
This was fun. Baseball is so fun. I remember playing baseball in Jr high and learning how to hit the ball. The thrill and excitement of the bat cracking at the ball with my eyes closed when it hit because I was so scared. Then running as fast as I could.
I did not do well.... Maybe it is from lack of sleep.maybe it is because I never read Shakespear. You asked challenging questions. The questions were welll worded and I did not see any punctuation errors. Good general questions.
Hmm It was a total wild guess on my part.
I did not have any idea. what a crazy life that sponge bob leads.I must admit I have never watched him on the televison. This is the stuff that creates imagination. At least he seems to be better than the Simpsons!
Good quiz, I guess I could take the bible study class at church and focus less on just singing the songs. Although I went to church daily as a kid apparently I did not retain the information. I guess it will take rereading the bible to remember what I have forgotten.
I am surprised at how people answered this question. I rebelled against the racial religous upbringing I had. I was brought up in a religon that taught that only white people went to heaven. I understand that this was a rather wide Christian way of looking at the Tower of Babel. I walked away from that religon without looking back
This was actually to predictable of answer. It does not surprise me with how there has been a change since victorian times of how people use to take writing desks outside since the outdoor spaces have decreased (people's yards are smaller) and the crime rate is higher.
35% of these people are clueless how dangerous it is meeting people in person that you have met online. Maybe I am jaded from personal experience and unable to see the goodness of most of the people in the world, but I have seen the whites of the eyes of the worst of the worst.
This was well written and better than most of the poetry on WDC.
It is clear and understandable; however it is disgusting.
I have to say this is the most disgusting one I have read.
You have successfully found a way that reaches emotions in your writing.
Excellent question to see peoples views.
I personally think there will be a massive die off due to lack of food. So that is actually partially in the oil answer. We are growing food for gasoline substitutes while there is a current massive famine going on in Africa that is being kept out of the media. Probably because we are causing the food crisis with our oil policy.
But what can we do. I do not want a nuclear plant in my back yard.
MEN ARE ALIENS! That is why they seem so foreign. The scientists of New Zealand have solved the mystery. Now that we know we can now establish teaching plans to better train men to inteact on this planet.
This needs to be expanded. This is more like a good story for like a sitcom.
Joy--in snowball fight!,
You have given me a good tip, putting a notebook next to the computer to keep track of the story. I wonder if a synopsis and blurb are the same thing?
This is an excellent informative piece on how to write a synopsis for a publisher including which fonts are acceptable.
Thank you for writing such a excellent, well written informative piece.
Jello
iva*mae,
Thank you for writing such a welcoming piece.
You have opened up more of WDC to me by giving me the insight to use the search box in a different way to search for help. I have found it difficult to get around at times and did not realize that I could search so easily using the search box with those search terms.
Thank you
This was well written and clear with good helpful information.
ProudPop,
I am doing some writing and needing information on how to develop characters and ran across this to read and review.
I read it. What it did not convey to me was a sense of who the individuals are. Their uniqueness that provides a like dynamicness? to the writing. Without providing more information it is almost like the people are inatimate objects.
I have no advice to offer you since I am lacking the same thing in what I am writing.
I am reading Consistency is Key, your right consitency is the key to credibility.
You coached Larry bird and Michael Jordan? That is Exciting! and to by chance run across someone who has influenced such great sports figures is unexpected.
Consistency creates credibility. Consistency creates results. The great ones are consistent in all they do. More importantly they are consistent at all they do well, and that is what creates greatness.
Your words are inspirational to be consistent and reliable are very good traits of a sucsessful person.
This is well written, without error, your message is clearly understood.
Good job!
Kayna-amy,
I have just read part one of sister bond.
I read it and became deeply intrigued... it is not a dog what is it?
You wrote it really drawing me in to the story... I sure wish I knew the mechanics of how you did that.
I did notice a wrong word. seized. should be ceased... unless I am wrong.
Uhh, Did you write this? This is so well written and sounds like such a perfect story that it sounds like it is done by a classic master. Obviously you did write it, but man alive, that is as good as the best classic folk tales I have heard in my life.
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